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The Silesian Trireme
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Moonlake's comment on 2009-05-10 04:37 AM
Sorry that I didn't make it 100% clear. The correct syntax for a blockquote is (left pointy bracket) blockquote (right pointy bracket) ...Insert text...(left pointy bracket) /blockquote (right pointy bracket) Go to Comment
Chapter 3: The Ivanvil
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-12 12:28 AM
To be honest, I can fully empathise with this "self indulgent" writing as you call it. A lot of the stuff I put under Dragon Empire freetext is wholly self-indulgent. When I first created the label, I wasn't even planning on embarking on novel writing except maybe in my old ages and not for gaming purposes either. So in that sense I was doubly self-indulgent. And yes, writing in general for me is at least half about self indulgence- I just love to write and write in the way that I do.

Anyway, I somehow interpreted Val's comment as referring to the ethnographic tone but yeah, I'm all for self indulgent writing for hobby writers. As for bullet points versus blocks of text, I actually prefer the latter. But then I've never been much of a bullet point person. My bullet points usually are just normal sentences but with the first nouns removed. However, I understand for the purpose of 'stealing ideas' as quite a lot of people come to this site for, such a structure might be less preferable than your original GM bullet point lists. Go to Comment
Chapter 3: The Ivanvil
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-11 08:29 PM
I'm of two minds on this. First, I'm with Val in that I feel that this is written in a way that does not particularly draw readers. However, given that this is done in the context of a dwarven ethnographer, I don't mind it so much. The length I can also live with, not in one sitting but broken up into multiple sessions, I have no problem with it. Second, I really like the allavets and the character of the Ivanvill does come through for me. So all in all, I still think there is something different about this sub that elevates it above the conventional mass. Go to Comment
The Nation of Parna
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-23 10:31 PM
Check your PM for grammar edits on the Codex. Not putting them here b/c want to leave the comments section for more constructive comments. Go to Comment
The Nation of Parna
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-31 01:30 AM
I actually still vaguely remembered this sub and it is still in my fav folder, I obviously had intention to re-read it at some later stage back I first commented on this. Anyway, I find there is substantial improvement from before re: spelling and grammar mistakes. I think the last time I read through, I liked the blockquote a lot but found the rest of the content a bit dry (having said that, it beats me how it could be possibly improved upon given that this is the intro to an ethnographic text). This time, my feelings changed in that taking account of the fact that this is a Codex which is just for holding subs together, I think the highly atmospheric blockquote makes up for the rest of the sub. This is certainly more effort than I usually put into my Codex. I distinctly remembered that I once put up a Codex where I just said this is a placeholder for my series of subs to do with fabrics and then I managed to expand it to somewhat less than one A4 page specifically at the request of Muro.

Anyway, having said so much, my vote is still pending because it's my way to include the quality of the included subs into the score for the actual Codex (else in my opinion, there's really nothing to vote on given that a Codex is mostly just an organisation tool for the author and most people use it as such). Go to Comment
The Nation of Parna
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-19 06:19 PM
Finally able to vote on this, phew. Go to Comment
Wakazashi the Ooze Hunter
NPCs  (Minor)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-08 01:37 AM
A quaint gnome for sure though I don't really see him as silly. I think he has practical uses in a fantasy world. As to the sub itself, I think it's fine as it currently stands- nothing I can suggest to improve it. Go to Comment
Pinker and Strotz
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-06 12:11 AM
Good concept. Go to Comment
Pinker and Strotz
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-07 07:21 PM
I would certainly have bought this if available in real life Go to Comment
Heather's Corpse Ship
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-02 01:32 AM
You go into Pieh's Codex and scroll to the bottom of the page. In the textbox under the text that reads "Suggest a submission:" type in the title of this submission. Go to Comment
Heather's Corpse Ship
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-31 07:47 PM
This sub has its own dark charms, the excerpt is certainly excellent as backstory to how this spell is created. Go to Comment
Cloak of Pebbles
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-31 10:08 PM
Nice concise sub. It conjures some quite cute images of the cloak and dwarven children.

Some of my thoughts on this item that are sort of on a tangent to what you put down:
1. Maybe the creator of this item not only had in mind a quick way to descend a mountain but rather, a quicky and stealthy way to descend a mountain
2. This camouflage property of the cloak might be useful if the wearer wants to sneak up on say hill giants or sth similar living on mountaintops and attack them or when a castle on a mountaintop is under siege, the cloak might enable someone to sneak out and summon reinforcemnts. Go to Comment
Fantasy fabrics
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-31 06:31 PM
Actually, it did come across my mind that the title could be fantasy fabrics instead of fantasy silks but I stick with the original title simply because silk is my original inspiration for all these materials and also because I've named all the materials as xxxsilk. I guess I might as well change the title given that now I want to change the freetext associated with the Codex and as you said, it's a more accurate reflection of the contents. Go to Comment
Fantasy fabrics
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-01 06:14 PM
Well, if you do make a new type of velvet, you can link it here now since the changed name of the Codex makes it open to additions :) Go to Comment
Fantasy fabrics
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-02 10:04 PM
Updated: Asked to expand the intro and here it is Go to Comment
Flamesilk
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-27 01:42 AM
Updated: My longest sub so far. Had a few issues with it based on logic and nearly got stuck. But now I think all loose ends should be tied. But welcome to point any out if someone spots it. Go to Comment
Flamesilk
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Moonlake's comment on 2010-10-27 09:13 PM


Wow, thanks guys for voting this a Golden sub! Personally, I wasn't expecting the honour. Also, a big thank you to all those who left comments and liked this particular sub, particularly axle who had such interesting discussions with me over the Kogish trees.


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Flamesilk
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-27 07:38 PM
Wow, thanks for the positive feedback, guys. I really wasn't expecting such a high rating as I seem to be running out of steam on this sub half way due to logic issues but somehow everything resolved itself in the final write up.

On axle's question on fuel, I didn't specifically think abt this issue when I wrote the sub but now that it's brought up, I think my take on this issue is that a flame started with flamesilk does run out of fuel eventually. However, I think how long the flame lasts also depends on the force of contact. So if 2 pieces of flamesilk just brush each other accidentally and the it's a very light brush, then maybe it will just be a single spark of flame that will go out instantly. For the Taruksha flame, it might last 15-30 minutes. If a flame is started by a malicious arsonist who rubs flamesilk really hard, then the flame might catch onto other flammable stuff and spread but then it would also just behave like a normal fire. Hope that answers the question. Go to Comment
Flamesilk
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-01 10:27 PM
Hmmm... nice imagery but not sure if the Kogish trees as I've described them can be planted (why does this type of tree want to propogate itself by self-combusting if it has seeds that can be planted like conventional trees? but then this is fantasy so I guess it's possible but from a logical or "pedantic author" pt of view, it doesn't seem to fit) But assuming that they can be, then it's possible to plant them in a ring to act as an outer city wall that will deter any invasion during the periods during which the Kogish trees burn but: 1) this city wall will be useless in early morning and after sundown; 2) one has to have a second outer wall made of the improved flamesilk to make sure the Kogish trees only expand outwards from the town. But then eventually this will make the town increasing inaccessible to the outside. This might be a great idea if the townspeople want to build a hermit society for whatever reasons but if it's a normal town and they need trade, then it's probably a bad idea.

A nice tangent thought you had there though despite some of the less than positive comments I made here. :) Go to Comment
Flamesilk
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-02 06:45 PM
Flamesilk salesman? well, that wasn't the intention but it's what Cheka's idea makes me think of but you are right, it does appear that way hahaha

When you say combustion doesn't exclude the possibility of seeds, you are right again. What I was thinking of in my previous post is that conventional plants reproduce via one method only (ok, I have limited biology knowledge but it seems that way to me) and that if the Kogish trees really exist in our world, why would it have 2 mehtods of reproducing unlike all other plants? that's why I thought at that time that maybe the idea doesn't fit that well. But maybe it does fit after all.

On reproduction without seeds, I would personally make it so that they reproduce by some alternative method other than seeding. The only plausible thing that I can think of off the top of my head at the moment is that rather than seeds, maybe it sheds a bit of its bark in powdery form that might spread to the neighbouring area and this powdery substance acts as seeds in the case of the Kogish trees. Go to Comment
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