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30 Exotic Birds
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-07-01 10:10 PM
29. Canyon Darters (aka Dawn Divers/Golden Pigeons)
These unusual pigeons have feather that appear golden in hue when sunlight fall on them but otherwise not much different from normal pigeons. They nest in cliffs and have the unusual habit of diving towards surrounding canyons in flocks at dawn.

It is rumoured that the first flock of Canyon Darters are found in the neighbouring region of the Canyon of Dreams. Given that many have felt a strange emanation from the Canyon, it was hypothesised that these birds’ behaviours might have been the result of a call originating from deep within the Canyon…

30. Needle Egret
A needle egret is an egret whose plumes are lavender in colour. It is found in tropical swamps where it nests in colonies, often with other herons, on platforms of sticks in trees or shrubs.

While many desire its plumes for decorating hats, the hunting of needle egrets are extremely dangerous as it can excrete a poisonous chemical that hardens its feathers at will and often shoots out some of these hardened feathers in defense when hunted.
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Grue - An Explanation
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-30 03:10 AM
Had never heard of the other ref to grues (that is, besides the one on this site) before I read this article. A good article. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-03 02:41 AM
Not a fan of zombies normally but this creature is refreshing and I can see the logic behind why they arise. Good work overall. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 11:06 PM

Nice concept and solid write-up

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White Rock - A fishing village
NPCs  (Extras)   (Agricultural)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-06-19 11:21 PM
Kaish and Meana
Retired fisher and net peddler

Old Kaish, as he is known as around the village, is a stick of a man. Already in his seventies, he is now a wizened old man who walks stooped over. Yet, this has not always been so- only a few years back, he could work like any other young men. It was a stroke that reduced him to his current state.

Family and Life
Like most of the young men at White Rock, Kaish was once a sailor but settled down to be a fisher when he got married. He has only one son who was never found after out fishing on a stormy night and his daughter-in-law soon followed her husband’s footsteps. His own wife had also passed away quite a number of years back. He has one granddaughter, Meana, who lives with him and makes the nets that they make their livings from.

Kaish is the one who taught Bendolf the skill of trapping fish. He in fact hoped that Bendolf would get together with Meana. Unfortunately, both of them only saw each other as friends. Even worse, Meana has fallen for one of the two troublemakers, Bobrus. Kaish deeply disapproves of this but it seems there is little he can do.

Roleplaying Notes
Old Kaish still likes to talk about the old days before he settled down and according to him, he had been through lots of foreign lands and had many adventures back then. Many of his stories are as coloured as those of Padalos’.

The other thing that he does incessantly is to complain about those two troublemakers. He often glares at one of them in particular.
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Deathwalk Boots
Items  (Clothes)   (Villanous)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-27 09:18 PM
Another short and sweet submission that is very self-contained. If you are looking for ideas for expanding it, then maybe provide more details on who descreated the pair of Gravestompers and why, although if you do that, it would probably be a story of a evil cult or necromancer and then might fall into cliche and this might've been the reason you only had such a short history. (I wasn't sure if you just wanted general comments or wanted input into expanding it when you said let you know what I as reader think but here's both anyway).
Currently as it stands, would vote 3.5 but not sure if you want to expand it so withholding vote at the moment.
Oh, and I esp. like the italic text, it enhances the atmosphere of the piece substantially.
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Uwue's Utensils
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-27 05:34 PM

Everything has been said before so I will just vote.

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The Pegorans
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-18 12:25 AM
A nice sub abt an extinct ancient culture, I personally think the Pegorans quite likeable.
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The Luminary
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-26 07:18 PM
Like others before me, I like the concept but have difficulty with the fact that spirits of nobles animals shatter into a humanoid shape. Go to Comment
Sophelia the Merciful
NPCs  (Minor)   (Religious)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 12:26 AM

A good twist on someone dealing death by 'profession'. The summary is particularly captivating.

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Wishful Thinking
Plots  (Event)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 12:37 AM

A nice concept with good humour value.

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Dove Whistle
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-02 06:18 AM
As other said before, a nice item for the Epoa world. Go to Comment
The Six Who Are
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 12:53 AM

A high quality piece with good set-up of the tone

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Sigil Swords
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 08:28 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Winter's Talons
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 08:58 PM
A solid sub, with good imagery. Go to Comment
Spirit of the Steel
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 08:43 PM
I like the sub as it is w/o any fluff but like Valadaar, I also feel this sub can be more somehow. Also, personally I feel somehow the sub becomes a bit disjointed when moving from the first paragraph to the second. Go to Comment
The Fatal Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-22 08:55 PM
The quote that Ouroboros just mentioned above has my head spinning (in a good way) but I see it as the essence and magic of this sub. I'm currently out of votes so will come back tmr to vote. Go to Comment
The Fatal Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-23 07:02 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Black Man
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Side-Quest)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-09 06:10 PM
A basic 3.5 for being short, direct and complete. +0.5 for delving into the racism theme (I'm a fan of stories delving into any kind of meaningful/thought provoking life issues, hence Lord of the Rings remains my all time fav) Go to Comment
The Dreamkin
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-05 04:37 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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