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The Shadowbeasts
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-07-30 11:06 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
10 Chance Meetings
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-07-24 07:56 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Setam, the Goddess of Nerves
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-08-01 08:31 PM
Thanks for all the positive feedback on this. Personally, I like UU slightly better but I think I can say that personally I fall into one of the categories that revere her, at least at the moment. Go to Comment
Setam, the Goddess of Nerves
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-16 05:01 PM
the belief is that it depends on whether you pay homage to her, she would aid you in this aspect if you pay proper respect to her and be a disruptive influence otherwise. Go to Comment
Setam, the Goddess of Nerves
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-16 05:02 PM
13/30 Magic Tattoos
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-07-17 09:54 PM
Overall, still a quality piece despite being part of the "clean-out" work.

For no. 2, I don't quite comprehend what the phrase "few orcs will care about the status of a human's guilt" meant exactly although I get the general gist that it's supposed to convey the limit of the tattoo in protecting the bearer from unfavourable encounters

Typo alert:
No. 9 Heading: missing e in the word Imagery Go to Comment
13/30 Magic Tattoos
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-07-18 12:18 AM
okay, got it. Go to Comment
The Qualm
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Space)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-08-01 09:12 PM
The basic idea is quite novel- in fact, I like how the qualm is stretching the definition of a kaiju beyond what we normally think, and I like the way content has been grouped in concise broad sections. Go to Comment
The Moon Hunter
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Space)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-07-31 02:16 AM
Space isn't really my theme but the writing adds wonders to the content. I especially like how the itallics break up the sub and make it easy on the eyes. Go to Comment
Changeling Wasp
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 11:51 PM
This is a fun idea. Check the writing though, the last part of the second paragraph has been eaten up somehow. Go to Comment
The Pocket Realm of Brocschtal
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 01:55 AM
I like the combo of idyllic surroundings and the ghoul threat in this piece. I'm a bit torn over what score to give this, though, deciding b/w a 3.5 and a 4. Once I decide, will come back and give an actual vote. Go to Comment
The Pocket Realm of Brocschtal
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 04:19 AM
I think this sub is a quality one in terms of both completeness and write-up. Why I have a struggle over the score is that all the way up until the last paragraph, I'm inclined to give this sub a 3.5 but the last section I definitely like and think should be graded a 4.

For me, 3.5 is a score I reserve for subs being of better overall quality than the average 'solid' benchmark sub whereas for me a 4 is clearly above the average. In this instance, I think why I think this way is that I like how your wrote up your version of an idyllic place with hidden threat and yet, this version still doesn't distinguish itself from other potential versions of this idea in a way that makes it entirely refreshing. Having said that, though, I also feel like that in the sections I said I would give 3.5, I can find snippets that is clearly deserving of a higher score than just 3.5. For example, I quite like the starting blockquote on how the common people re-interpret the Sundering as a divine-created event and it's quite close to a 4 to me.

I'm afraid that my comment isn't really useful in helpful you to identify what you could possibly improve on. This seems more like me rambling on about what I liked more and what I liked less about various bits of this sub. Anyway, at least now I've vaguely pinpointed key areas that give rise to the score conflict.
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The Pocket Realm of Brocschtal
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 09:05 PM
I like the added blockquotes. I think now the uniqueness of the place stands out more and I can with certainty give this a 4. Go to Comment
Earth and Iron, a Love Story
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 09:50 PM
The love story is sweet and the way you interweave this background story into how the world could interact with Daazan and Utheleii is nice. Go to Comment
Earth and Iron, a Love Story
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 09:50 PM
The love story is sweet and the way you interweave this background story into how the world could interact with Daazan and Utheleii is nice. Go to Comment
Eyre Magick - Introduction
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 04:25 AM
The write-up is clear and to-the-point. I also like how this system of magic relates to genes and ores in real life. Go to Comment
Mobile Ground
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-20 08:59 PM
Seems to be an interesting idea grounded solidly in logic, even though I personally adhor and suck at physics as a student (and I'm not talking abt uni, this is high school). A good submission for the 100 word challenge. Go to Comment
The Eye of Avarice
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 01:48 AM
A solid submission that covers all pertinent angles, with flavour text inserted just where they are needed. Overall, a high quality piece. Go to Comment
The Glyph of Tarnos Krae
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-17 07:54 PM
A neat idea that seamlessly integrates the 3 freetexts. I like the blockquote and the completeness of this sub. Go to Comment
How I Vote
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-17 08:17 PM
What Silveressa said Go to Comment
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