Short and sweet as always. The plot hooks are quite nice.
A few typos:
2nd line- "performs" spelled w/o the r;
1st sentence of 3rd paragraph a bit off in phrasing
Origin paragraph 2nd last line- others view "him"
All the apostraphes are gone Go to Comment
It's an okay submission in the sense that it describes the phenomenon well but I only give a 3 because it doesn't mention why such a phenomenon occurs i.e. why do elephants want to migrate across the sea every 3 years? Go to Comment
A pretty solid sub that has a very coherent backstory. It also ties in nicely with your Herthers sub, by the way.
One typo in the 5th paragraph of History of Castle Merciless: When the night of "the" party came...
Also, I would like to raise a pt on presentation: at first I was discouraged from even reading the sub because it's very cluttered up and appears very long (this is at work with a different browser). I don't know whether that's why you haven't received any feedback on this until now but it might be a possible reason. At home, it doesn't look that long but still quite cluttered. Maybe you should consider having a blank line between each paragraph in addition to break between headings.
Finally, I'm undecided on the vote at the moment: it's between 3.5 and 4.0 for me. So my vote is still forthcoming. Go to Comment
A solid submission but I personally would like to know more about how this race is different from humans in terms of social customs although this sub seems to imply that they have almost perfectly assimilated into human society and culture. Nevertheless, I like the description in the summary box. In fact, I like all of summaries in your submissions. In fact, I would suggest that you put the paragraph into the main body of the submission where it's more noticeable b/c it greatly enhances the atmosphere of the piece. Maybe put these paragraphs in italics before the Full Description? the HTML syntax for it can be found on the RHS panel of the add submission page (there should a link titled HTML help) if you don't know off the top of your head. Go to Comment
Those yellow boxes are called blockquotes. There's a HTML help link on the RHS panel on the add submission page where you can find the syntax. Basically, the syntax for blockquote is just the word blockquote within a HTML bracket Go to Comment
Sorry that I didn't make it 100% clear. The correct syntax for a blockquote is (left pointy bracket) blockquote (right pointy bracket) ...Insert text...(left pointy bracket) /blockquote (right pointy bracket) Go to Comment
I actually still vaguely remembered this sub and it is still in my fav folder, I obviously had intention to re-read it at some later stage back I first commented on this. Anyway, I find there is substantial improvement from before re: spelling and grammar mistakes. I think the last time I read through, I liked the blockquote a lot but found the rest of the content a bit dry (having said that, it beats me how it could be possibly improved upon given that this is the intro to an ethnographic text). This time, my feelings changed in that taking account of the fact that this is a Codex which is just for holding subs together, I think the highly atmospheric blockquote makes up for the rest of the sub. This is certainly more effort than I usually put into my Codex. I distinctly remembered that I once put up a Codex where I just said this is a placeholder for my series of subs to do with fabrics and then I managed to expand it to somewhat less than one A4 page specifically at the request of Muro.
Anyway, having said so much, my vote is still pending because it's my way to include the quality of the included subs into the score for the actual Codex (else in my opinion, there's really nothing to vote on given that a Codex is mostly just an organisation tool for the author and most people use it as such). Go to Comment