Also, I'm not totally done with this sub yet cos I still need to update the scroll on the actual 9 in Chinese folklore. I got my sources already but would u believe it there are 3 different versions of them (all right, 2 are quite similar but still)!
Actually, I just realised that the companion sub to this that will be upcoming, the First and its Descendants, will be the same exact mixture, although this time I'm doing any mixing of animal parts by myself. The appearance of the First are as detailed in Chinese folklore. Anyway, stay tuned!Go to Comment
On your concern over storytelling, I would think Elbin's suggestion of making this an old script by someone describing this race will hit the nail on the head in this regard. I actually thought this was more or less what you are doing now as this is written in 1st person tense but then I would add an extra line at the end to let ppl know they are reading an excerpt from some written work like this: ~ An excerpt from xxxx. However, if you don't want to keep to the conventional structure of grouping content as this will be leading you towards, then you can write it this whole sub in the voice of someone who learnt abt info. on these Crawling Giants bit by bit and then it would justify the current structure of content not being grouped together.
Overall, I really think me and Elbin are saying the same things abt this sub although our votes are slightly different. Happy to revote on it after edit. If I don't see a revised version of this myself, just PM me. You can probably PM Gossamer and Redgre and ask them for a revote now as it seems to me like they are mainly after more info on these Giants and your addition of the Explanations section will have satisfied them in that regard already.
Rumour 1: “And so King Fedroas ordered a Fool’s Crown to be made out of Fools’ Gems, as befitting such a fool of a king as Crohatus, and gifted it to him before sending him away on exile on a remote island”
Rumour 2: “This is the Crown of Fools, the heirloom left by the First King of Sydknon. As the one who has accomplished what was deemed the impossible task of uniting all of Sydknon, he commissioned a crown to be inset with Fools’ Gems, to remind his descendants that with persistence, the most plain will shine one day”
P.S. I should really thank Muro's comment for inspiring this particular entry and hence the whole of this scroll.