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The Djavarga
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Area)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-15 12:43 AM
I can't phrase it any better than what the other Moon said. Go to Comment
Corpsemaker
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-08 09:28 PM
Okay, this is not my type of thing normally but I finished reading this piece as a result of doing proof-reading for the Strolenati ebook of horror. So I might as well come and seek this out. All I want to say about it is that at one point it really gave me the chills so good work. Go to Comment
The Greater Adventuring Kharmic Line of Mysantia
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-16 09:32 PM
I agree with Val that this is more of a teaser but personally don't really mind the lack of further details. Go to Comment
The Commoner's Tools
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-24 12:38 AM
An interesting concept for a scroll. Go to Comment
Seven Wonders of the Dwarven World
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-14 03:24 AM
Each passage is concise and beautiful in such conciseness. I also love the blockquotes of the plot hooks spanning off each wonder (Axle said I'm a gamer at heart and I think I should acknowledge that now, esp. since I'm now sorta semi-gamer). Go to Comment
A Dwarf on the Water
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-23 06:33 PM
I'm like 1/3 of the way there and the presentation of what makes dwarves different from humans- the fact that their sense of orientation rely on contact w. earth is really starting to pull me in. Will report back once fully finished. Go to Comment
A Dwarf on the Water
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-05 06:45 PM
Okay, finally finished. The glimpse into Parna dwarven society in this sub is awesome and while reflection of human truisms is less compared with that Priest story (that's a personal taste thing really), this sub also has a little of that in it as well. The thing about the diff b/w written and spoke word I can empathise with but the wording used has a slight effect of throwing me in modern day. I also noted the same thing about the Goddess' voice as Scras. Overall, though, I still think this is high quality fiction. Really like the ending exchange b/w Gorn and Kii and how Kii now having possession of her own soul rather than any of the Parnan deities. Go to Comment
A Dwarf on the Water
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-06 12:11 AM
Yep, understood what you were trying to do, just mentioning my own particular reader taste wrt the human truism aspects, not necessarily saying there should be more or less of them for this piece. On the diff. b/w spoken and written word, I'm referring to the characters' dialog, how this idea was expressed by Gorn.

I agree Kii's characterisation needs more work, still not quite sure why the Goddess thinks her soul so valuable even after the Goddess explained explicitly. For me, Kii comes out mostly as curious until the exchange at the very end with Gorn where she really hit the nail on the head. Dialogue, well, not an aspect that I really value in a fiction piece. I love beautiful prose and I love deep and meaningful life philosophies but I've as yet to come across dialogue in published novels that I love. Humorous dialogue I appreciate but loving is another matter entirely. Possibly one reason why I'm always inside Bortai's head and want to chop up conversation. Go to Comment
Potion of Euphemisms
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-14 02:41 AM
I read this before but didn't vote on it. Fixing the error now, and Dossta, come back to us! Go to Comment
Plains Elves
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-14 02:39 AM
I like this sub overall- it does delve into sth unique for these plain elves although not a lot. One question I have remaining is that why are they forcing all puberty elves to move in with a different tribe that their birth tribe? To prevent inbreeding or some other reason? Nothing major that detracts from the sub but just curious. Go to Comment
Citadel's Blaze
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-30 06:57 PM
Well, I can see why no one has voted on it as yet b/c everyone's holding their breath for more. But since nothing will be forthcoming anytime soon, then a score of 3 for the solidness and likeability of the underlying idea and 0.5 bonus for good write-up. Go to Comment
Beardspiders
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-17 04:14 PM
I like all those blockquotes that add so much flavour to the sub esp. the Conan Doyle quote and the Mourngrym Necromantic flea and the Guild War. Overall, an entertaining read even though I'm not particularly into beards as a woman. Go to Comment
30 Wacky Wedding Customs
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-05-24 02:16 AM
I agree with Dossta about the uneven quality of some entries but overall it is a very fun and flavourful sub and I really like it a lot. Go to Comment
Bow of the Astormen
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-14 02:46 AM
Straightforward, simple and elegant. Go to Comment
Rune Lore
Systems  (Mystical)   (Specific)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-21 02:18 AM
As it is, it still feels somewhat less comprehensive than it could have been. For example, there is no information on how to tune magnitude of spells or is there no way of doing so? This sub doesn't really say. Can one craft something more complex from using more than 1 rune?

Overall, though, I do like this particular rune system and the way you have written it up, I esp. like the history section.
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Yothats
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-05 09:49 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Catbooks
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-11 03:14 AM
A quite novel idea and I must say I prefer Echo's idea of petting the cat and getting the knowledge instilled in you much better than the much darker way in the sub but luckily, I don't have a very graphic imagination. Go to Comment
Tumble Melon Tree
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-05 09:45 PM
A nice fantasy flora. In terms of the write-up, good visuals and humour. Go to Comment
Soul Gazing
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-09-03 08:40 PM

Added more details on how the actual process works and accuracy. As for interpretation, basically everything is left to individual interpretation and the Soul Gazer only knows when the answer for the individual has appeared or not. How this should be used in roleplay, I must say I don't have much idea. This is just sth that came up to me on-the-fly when I browse thru the Archaic Word challenge and I couldn't it develop further into a reasonably quality sub so I just chunked out as a 100-word challenge. I have now moved my ideas on how to incorporate this into roleplay as a user submitted idea

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Soul Gazing
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-09-03 11:21 PM

Incorporation into Roleplay:


This can be either some bit of colourful background for enhancing game atmosphere or it can form a component of 1 or 2 plot hooks. For example, the PCs run into a dillemma/dead-end on one of the adventures and what the Soul Gazer shows them can be a clue to lead them out if they can decode it. Or the whole thing with Soul Gazing might be just a swindle but somehow one of these Soul Gazers have gained prominence at a particular location and the PCs are hired by someone to expose him. These are the basic examples that come to mind of a non-gamer like me. Of course, one can always blend these basic ideas into a more complicated form. For example, there might be true and swindler Soul Gazers in the world. The PCs have this problem on their hands that have to be completed within X number of days. They get stuck and go to a Soul Gazer. Is this a true Soul Gazer that will give them the true answer that they just have to decode or is this a fake one that will just waste their time?

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