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Tome of the Ancient Kingdom
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Campaign Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-05-14 12:09 AM
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A Cupid for Cornelius
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-27 04:34 PM


A well-written submission based on an amusing concept of novelty.


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Timmy the Tequila Worm Brand Tequila
Items  (Potion)   (Sentient)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-24 06:03 PM


The underlying idea is solid and logical. The overall submission is also quite likeable as a whole. A good first post.


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The Keep Beneath the Dusky Star
Dungeons  (Mountains)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-17 04:42 PM


A superb combo of atmospheric writing, images, and easy readability.


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The Seir and the death of the Old World
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-10 10:05 PM


I read this purely as a creation myth without any knowledge of the Locastus setting and liked the way  the idea was executed, esp. the first part on the myth of the Grey Lady and the Seir ( I agree with Silveressa's point on the sci-fi terms although personally I just glossed over their actual meaning and interpreted them as being part of the description for a titanic battle with devastating impacts on the world so I didn't deduct any points for this aspect).



Overall, however, I did think this seems like a sub that has enough content to be labelled complete (and is accompanied with good quality write-up) but still lacks something  to reach its full potential. In particular, I think the sub would have benefited if you could insinuate more on the culture of the Seir within the creation myth so that they are more vivid as a people. I think that would also address Silveressa's comment on this currently doesn't quite fit into the category of Lifeforms.


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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-24 09:11 PM


62. Extra recreation activity- train your pet croc!



63. Opens up a new career path as animal trainer



64. Provides a quick way of earning some money when short on cash- surely the novelty of seeing a croc performing ‘tricks’ on command will draw some spectators



65. Be renowned for the entirely new unique “fighting with a croc at your side” style of combat

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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-26 06:48 PM
77. New way to throw off pursuits- join a travelling circus/entertainment caravan as a trainer of crocs

78. Along the same line as 77, this is an effective way to join a travelling circus/entertainment caravan which you might need to get close for some purpose (eg. murder investigation, need to get close to a particular member to retrieve sth or get info etc.)

79. Hire your croc out as a mount for a river-side cruise when you need money Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-26 06:54 PM
Nearly 80 now Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-04 06:59 PM
92. A new way to sneak up on enemy vessels in the middle of the night- ride your croc to it and climb aboard!

93. Pioneer a new fashion in camouflage wear- croc-skin suits (to be used when swimming along your pet croc on vessels spying missions). Of course, said suits are made of normal clothing materials instead of real croc-skin (you don't want to upset your little pet croc on its sensitive spot) Go to Comment
Things Are Not Always As They Seem
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-01-13 11:33 PM


Short and sweet and funny


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The Majestic Silver Oak
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-12-22 07:08 PM


Overall, a solid piece. Like Dossta,  I like the tragic yet positive ending to the bard's story that gives rise to the tree.

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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-12-20 10:52 PM


A solid first submission. I quite like the descriptions in the second paragraph. Personally, I would insert some bold headings to separate out different sections but as it is, it's still quite easy to read and I didn't take any points off.


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The Final Tests of All Tests Ever
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-14 04:42 PM


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The Singing Wood
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-14 05:25 PM


Like the underlying idea and the execution of this sub.


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Memory Moths
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-09 04:43 PM


A good quality sub overall, with a coherent backstory. I also quite like the interweaving b/w the narrative story and the scientific/medical excerpts.


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Moon Razor of ManBeasts
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-07 05:20 PM


Certainly a very atmospheric piece. A good spin on a werewolf legend.


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The Friends
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-07 05:38 PM


An interesting idea with solid write-up. But, I still need to ponder more before voting.


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30 Tieflings and the Gifts they bestow
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-10-25 02:19 AM


A very coherent set of 30s (as in a set that flows well together)


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Odinsteed
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Plains)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-07 07:26 PM


A neat idea with solid write-up. Would be nice if it could be expanded in ways already mentioned above.


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Grandfather Pestilence
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-07 07:10 PM


Like Muro, I also remember seeing this piece when it was in-work and was waiting to read it as a full sub. Not much personal comment to add to the above. Well and "intelligently" written as OIontur so elegantly sums this up.


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