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Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-27 07:55 PM
I could see Karim as a character just awaiting misfortune to befall him. Still, I quite like the way he's presented here. Go to Comment
The Nightmare Demons of Sorrow
Plots  (Mystical)   (Mini-Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-12 01:47 AM
This sub could use a once-over since there are typos that impede understanding (only slightly but still) at places. Sounds like a good set of adventures that could incorporate both a combat solution and a more puzzle type solution. And I just happen to let the theme of this sub quite a bit. Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-09 01:48 AM
I really like the ending. It took the story off in a totally different direction that I had expected. It was also at part 4 that the poignant themes of this story really started to sink in. Overall, good work. Go to Comment
One Man's Trash...
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:08 PM
A nice plot, very straightforward but with a sort of 'moral dilemma' thrown in at the end. The post itself is very easy to read. Go to Comment
Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-05 08:10 PM
A very comprehensive sub on a location. The formatting is good and makes it extremely easy to read thru despite the length. I think the Legend, the Persons of Note and Plot Hook sections are done very well but I like the other sections quite a bit less. In particular, I have the following issues with them:
1. Recent History: it's still well-written but I would have appreciated more sign-posting (i.e. tell me to refer to persons of note section for the personages). Currently, the various names mentioned in a short paragraph has a slightly overwhelming effect on me
2. Culture: currently, the majority of the section is concerned with what garb ppl of this city wears. I agree that's one part of culture but I would have appreciated sth more in-depth on cultural aspects. You did go into mindsets of the ppl and beliefs in after-life later but I guess what's bugging me is the inbalance b/w the more 'shallow' aspects of culture (what they wear) and these more in-depth aspects.

Overall, a high quality sub that achieves its purpose of describing the city very well. Go to Comment
Igneus Saxum
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Underground)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-12 01:03 AM
Unfortunately I have to agree with Axle. The underlying idea is refreshing but the write-up really borders on being terrible after the first section, with alternating voices that occur for no seeming reason. Go to Comment
7 Things About Criticism
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-22 12:46 AM
Very useful and expressed artfully too. Go to Comment
Youma
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-08 11:33 PM
Normally not much a fan of mutants and such but this has okay differentiation from its anime counterpart and sounds like a high utility sub like Val said. Go to Comment
Creating Generators from 30s
Articles  (Resource)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-11-06 09:00 PM
Val, quick question: I've recently uploaded a new 30+ Chinese name generator. I'm currently working to expand it into 101 and here comes my problem. So far I can only see an edit button which then requires me to copy and paste in items one by one. Is there a function that allows me to override the existing generator by uploading a new text file to replace the old or is the only option for me to delete the old one and replace it with the expanded version? Go to Comment
Alexandra Stacja
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 06:57 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Law Enforcement in the Cosmic Era
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-05 12:23 AM
This gives a very concise overview of law enforcement in CE and I like both the italic text showing usage in different geographic locations and the subsequent text on the shortcoming of a particular option to law enforcement. This is a very article-y piece but it was a easy read and I liked the overall discussion presented here as being very logical. Go to Comment
The Second Renaissance
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-05 12:11 AM
First, I would like to say that I really liked the first paragraph and given that I have a personal penchant for articles of a particular era of a speculative fiction world, I should have given this a higher score than the standard solid 3. However, the major problem I have with this sub is that I felt like it was written on the premise of assuming that I had read a whole bunch of CE subs which I haven't. Specifically, the 2nd paragraph had already lost me a little. From the name, I thought it would be a sort of tech. combining 'conventional magic' from the fantasy genre but from the actual paragraph, that's not it from the impression I got so then I wonder what on Earth it is really (I'm not a technie person so I don't want to know the specifics but I just get a vibe that it is supposed to be a new form of tech. that expands new real life tech. exponentially but it somehow has a name that reminds me of fantasy so that's just weird to me). On top of that, there is also discussion of the 2nd Dark Ages and Petroleum Era which I think you had written up elsewhere but didn't explicitly link to and the discussion on how the Elysium project would make humans win and droids lose by replacing all unskilled labour with non-human entities makes me wonder the following "In the Cosmic Era setting, where have all the unskilled labour gone? Totally eradicated by education and technological advancement or what?"
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Masgolth's Fire
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:00 PM
A good epic weapon with an interesting backstory reminiscent of old legends and such, I even get a little vibe of the Lord of the Rings somehow. Maybe it's the timing since I'm going to see the last episode of the Hobbit this coming Tuesday and I'm just re-reading the whole LoR series again. Go to Comment
The Spirit Net
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:34 PM
I agree with SE: certainly short and sweet. I liked the Entwiners (although not sure whether I officially voted on it) and I like the idea of the Spirit Nets. I also think the first sample seems like the strongest entry among the three. Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 05:01 AM
I found the format used to present this idea appealing- reminds me of the Forgotten Realm books starring a travel novelist as the main protagonist but written a notch better. Maybe you could revisit this and turn it in a proper sub when you have some more snippets along the same lines and then you can change the title to Excerpts rather Excerpt. Or maybe you could turn this into a Wiki if you can't seem to let it go as a stub (Wiki Duo at it again, what is it with me and you together? It's becoming like every second correspondence b/w us involves a Wiki somehow) Go to Comment
The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 11:12 PM
The comment I have is that I would like to know more but you did say this is a building block sub so I will await future subs. Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 05:27 AM


Now that I've read the sub, it does seem the tattoo part is sort of secondary to Reposia as a location. I agree tattooing is somewhat a central part of their culture but now like you, I'm a bit uncertain whether this belongs to the quest or not. So I guess we'll wait for the next person/persons to decide.



Quite solid sub but need to ponder a bit before voting.

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Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-07 06:57 PM
Ergh... somehow forgot to come back to this. This is a solid sub on Reposia and while some bits are a little dry, there are also quite a few that are likeable- the link b/w the Trident (a sea related object in Greek mythology) and Trianarianism, the prison camps and the festival days. Go to Comment
The Azul Deck of Shadows
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 07:00 PM
A very complete set of cards with a good legend attached. good work. Go to Comment
Athrillia
Locations  (World)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-27 09:35 PM
The imageries work in this piece but I would rather like to see it expanded. Currently, it's a great flavour/inspiration piece but I think there's more potential to it. Still, one can't expect too much from an Oekaki. Go to Comment
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