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Queen Nekcrola the 47th (a Tale of Mysantia)
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-10-28 03:21 AM
The content of this sub is solid, the character and her surroundings have been fleshed out properly. But I find this sub a bit hard to read as it seems quite ‘jumbled’ in terms of how content flows from one aspect of this Queen from the next. Besides the HOOK section, there’s no headings and this sub would probably read better with more of them.

One final point is that I’m not sure whether you’ve already tidied up this sub or just expanded a character sheet into words (at one point I thought you had done the later from your first comment but now I’m not sure, anyway, I hope you do not find it offensive for I mean none). I think that might be why no one had ventured to comment but then it could be just inopportune timing that you’ve posted this sub in. Also, the fact that you wrote 3 comments yourself could be why as well. On the Citadel, getting 3 comments is already very good catch.
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Items  (Materials)   (Sentient)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-10-22 06:08 PM
Good questions all. This is one of my work that has been held up for a long long time by Mathom that I finally get tired of and kicked out so there's bound to be some loose ends with it. Anyway, my answers are:
1. To tell the truth, I do not have a genuine answer for it as many of the wordings just come to me while I was finally settling down to finish this piece. Doing a logical extrapolation on this first aspect, one could take it that these sprites somehow have moments of lucidity during this Deep Slumber that provide chances for communication or else that while their active consciousness shuts down in the Deep Slumber, they have some kind of 'secondary consciousness' that is still active in a kind of fuzzy way (the mages might not be aware of this peculiarity of the sprites though) that is able to be communicated to.
2. To enter this hibernation state, the Sprite itself has to reach a certain threshold in terms of its own powess so this excludes the case of them forever hibernating. Go to Comment
Items  (Materials)   (Sentient)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-10-24 06:28 PM
When I wrote up this sub, I was thinking more like MM but what you suggested about the sprite becoming a 'de facto' familiar is certainly an interesting direction to take this in. Go to Comment
Seven Forms Ascendant Hunter
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-28 03:33 AM
Certainly a very complete character and submission that doesn't leave anything more to be desired. Go to Comment
Introducing Generators!
Articles  (Other Gaming)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-11-06 02:08 AM
Good utility sub. I just added one- Chinese name generator. Maybe a more complex one to come, I'll see how it goes. Go to Comment
The Black Leviathans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-06-12 08:36 PM
A very versatile species for an acquatic setting and a good solid submission. I personally feel that this sub seems to lack somewhat in the exploration of the character of such a lifeform but then I did note that you said that they are supposed to be a diverse race and you were probably writing this up for game use rather than meta-game description. I guess I'm just measuring this sub. against the normal Val standard. Go to Comment
World Creation and the Citadel
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-06-10 08:30 PM
Update: Another sub saved from Mathom's grasp, yay! Go to Comment
World Creation and the Citadel
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-06-11 08:00 PM
Thanks, Val, for the info about regions admin rights. I've added your name to the region section. Go to Comment
500 Word Submission
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-10-28 08:53 PM

I didn't think I would be the first one to put one up but there it goes. Very positive feedback too for a sub that I consider less than a real sub. Thanks, Kassy, for introducing this great format.

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500 Word Submission
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-06-14 04:16 AM
A neat idea, I agree that sometimes 100 words is way too short. While I normally use it strictly for my 'discarded' ideas, there are once or twice where I'm over by like a few words and then find it a headache to try to cut down to the word limit. For this, bonus 0.5 mark. Go to Comment
The Vanishing Diner
Plots  (Event)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-29 09:44 PM
Same as Val. A very versatile utility sub but would be interested in author vision as well. Go to Comment
30 Fantastic Locations
Locations  (Area)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-21 07:49 PM
Scars, Tower of Mok has been destroyed? Eaten by a grue at any rate. Will come back shortly to actually comment and vote. Go to Comment
30 Fantastic Locations
Locations  (Area)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-25 06:13 PM
Excellent 30, covering a wide range of different terrain are unique in the sense that they could only have evolved in a fantasy setting. I simply love fantasy so how could I not love this sub? Go to Comment
New Personal Best
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-25 02:54 AM
Like the alternating perspective very much in this piece. Another excellent piece for your Delta world. Go to Comment
30 Fairies
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-11 05:47 AM
Excellent 30 as others have said, I especially like how you attribute different terrains to different types of fairies and the fact that they are all benevolent or innocuous. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-20 05:13 PM
Even though I'm not a gamer, I find myself agreeing more with Kassy on this sub. It is of just the right length for me. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-20 06:45 PM
Actually, I am aware of the nature of the Decathros challenge but it is true that I did not start reading this sub with the Decathros association in mind. My comment was basically written from my impression that the length of this sub was what Val had intended it to be and the fact that I'm fine with it in this particular instance. But yes, I can understand why others would expect more of this sub starting their reading experience from the Decathros angle. And in general I do think that more content in a sub would be of benefit to it rather than being detriment. In this particular case, I was just judging more on the basis of author positioning, I guess. Go to Comment
7 More Reasons Why Not Everyone is a Magic User
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 04:32 PM
It would be helpful if you put up a link to 30 Reasons why Not Everyone is a Magic User so that ppl aren't contributing duplicates. I've tagged this in my fav folder and will try to contribute 1 or 2 items to the list but I need to know the original 30 reasons so that I'm not doubling up Go to Comment
The Song That Doesn't End, Part One
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-04-22 11:45 PM

An unusual story and entertaining read.

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Ysra Fulsven Vineblud (Noblewoman of Parna)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-11-29 04:50 PM
I see, thanks for the enlightenment regarding the term mores. :) Go to Comment
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