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The Pocket Realm of Brocschtal
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 08:05 PM
I like the added blockquotes. I think now the uniqueness of the place stands out more and I can with certainty give this a 4. Go to Comment
The Pocket Realm of Brocschtal
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 03:19 AM
I think this sub is a quality one in terms of both completeness and write-up. Why I have a struggle over the score is that all the way up until the last paragraph, I'm inclined to give this sub a 3.5 but the last section I definitely like and think should be graded a 4.

For me, 3.5 is a score I reserve for subs being of better overall quality than the average 'solid' benchmark sub whereas for me a 4 is clearly above the average. In this instance, I think why I think this way is that I like how your wrote up your version of an idyllic place with hidden threat and yet, this version still doesn't distinguish itself from other potential versions of this idea in a way that makes it entirely refreshing. Having said that, though, I also feel like that in the sections I said I would give 3.5, I can find snippets that is clearly deserving of a higher score than just 3.5. For example, I quite like the starting blockquote on how the common people re-interpret the Sundering as a divine-created event and it's quite close to a 4 to me.

I'm afraid that my comment isn't really useful in helpful you to identify what you could possibly improve on. This seems more like me rambling on about what I liked more and what I liked less about various bits of this sub. Anyway, at least now I've vaguely pinpointed key areas that give rise to the score conflict.
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Earth and Iron, a Love Story
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 08:50 PM
The love story is sweet and the way you interweave this background story into how the world could interact with Daazan and Utheleii is nice. Go to Comment
Earth and Iron, a Love Story
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 08:50 PM
The love story is sweet and the way you interweave this background story into how the world could interact with Daazan and Utheleii is nice. Go to Comment
Eyre Magick - Introduction
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-25 03:25 AM
The write-up is clear and to-the-point. I also like how this system of magic relates to genes and ores in real life. Go to Comment
Mobile Ground
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-20 07:59 PM
Seems to be an interesting idea grounded solidly in logic, even though I personally adhor and suck at physics as a student (and I'm not talking abt uni, this is high school). A good submission for the 100 word challenge. Go to Comment
The Eye of Avarice
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 12:48 AM
A solid submission that covers all pertinent angles, with flavour text inserted just where they are needed. Overall, a high quality piece. Go to Comment
The Glyph of Tarnos Krae
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-17 06:54 PM
A neat idea that seamlessly integrates the 3 freetexts. I like the blockquote and the completeness of this sub. Go to Comment
How I Vote
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-17 07:17 PM
What Silveressa said Go to Comment
How I Vote
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 07:39 PM

Given the evolution at the Citadel, my voting practice has changed a little as well so I'm updating this but nothing major has changed from when I just wrote this. 

I am not really that active a voter really but I am quite interested in how different people vote so I thought I will share my own system of voting here for those who felt this topic is interesting. Actually, in essence, my voting system is really quite similar to that of Forganthus. The differences are:


1. The score of 3 is my benchmark score for submissions that do not have obvious problems with respect to spelling and grammar, content and logic (but in reality, I’ve hardly ever given a submission just a 3, I somehow always managed to find something that I like enough about the sub to rise it up to 3.5)


2. I mainly judge a sub by two parts: content and write-up. (I am not a gamer, I just visit this site as someone whose hobby is writing fantasy related things) Regarding content, I only grade its originality and underlying logic, with more weights given to logic (after all, I think there’s really nothing new under the sun, a lot of original ideas are just new spins on existing ideas). And write-up obviously includes anything basic and objective from spelling and grammar to more complex and subjective domains such as expression, tone and atmosphere etc.

3.(NEW!) With new developments at the Citadel such as the Oekaki Challenge and the Weaver Guild Quests etc. that are various forms of Writing Challenges, my votes now adjust for the inherent difficulty of these writing challenges. So a sub that's normally just plain 3 for me is now 3.5 if it falls under one of these challenge categories. I will explicitly mention such deviation from my normal grading scheme in my comment as well. 


4. My 5’s are what I think perfect. Of course, that doesn’t mean the submission has to be perfect with respect to both content and write-up. I think a submission that scores 4-4.5 on one aspect and 5 on the other aspect will already get a 5 from me.


5. I also have a habit of abstaining from voting on particular submissions. These are either: 1) those that I don’t have anything to say about it for whatever reasons, mainly subs that are not really my type- I'm an avid fan of fantasy whereas sci-fi is really not my thing; 2) those below my benchmark score for which I usually leave a comment on suggestions on areas to improve and might revisit if revised; 3) those that I read and found I didn’t agree with the existing score but didn’t want to downvote without providing some constructive feedback on how it could be improved (and usually for these I couldn’t).


6. My Hall of Honour isn’t really reserved for submissions with high scores. It could be something voted low for the write-up but has an underlying idea that’s quite interesting. But of course, it could also well be an old but quality submission that has already been acknowledged by existing votes but maybe hasn’t received enough votes from my point of view or I felt was inspirational and deserved to be looked at again.

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Mountain's Coin
Items  (Jewelry)   (Combat)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-14 06:18 PM
A solid idea that is well presented. I like the logic of how these coins came to be and I especially like the bits on the rune changing. In fact, I got mildly curious as to why after usage of the coin the rune becomes "debt". Go to Comment
River's Coin
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-12 08:50 PM
I more or less have the same thoughts as Forganthus with regards to the underlying concept(s) for this sub. Personally, the write-up will get at least a 4 from me, though I also admit to not particularly liking the fact that as the sub currently stands, the coins seem to be a way for Alira to bypass Polleus and resurrect someone already dead even if her petition fails (although not a way that guarantees success but still a way) which then sort of defeats the purpose of Polleus not agreeing to the petition in the first place. But this new idea proposed by Forganthus fits this "logic hole" nicely. Will wait till the new version and then vote. Go to Comment
Keeper of the Hourglass
Plots  (Event)   (Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-11 07:00 PM
Update: Updated incorporating Forganthus's idea and the great image. Thanks for the input. This feels more complete now with respect to the possible interactions with humans, which I personally felt was somewhat lacking before. Go to Comment
Keeper of the Hourglass
Plots  (Event)   (Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-14 06:09 PM
Now that you mention it, it does sound likes comets. Basically I was just trying to incorporate your image but adapt it so that it's more in line with the atmosphere of the sub and the "chase themselves across the sky" just came to me. And your idea abt the forgetting the First Tongue, that's interesting as well. Surely a creditable plot hook that could arise from this background. Go to Comment
Keeper of the Hourglass
Plots  (Event)   (Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-17 03:37 AM
Update: Promoted from stub to full sub Go to Comment
Keeper of the Hourglass
Plots  (Event)   (Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-17 05:33 PM
True, on the Keeper himself, I can't push further cos I see him being part of the bg to a setting (ppl might not even know of him specifically but rather just that the Ultimate Countdown will appear sooner or later if they know abt the Countdown at all). Hence, this was originally a stub that I sort of liked but just didn't think it's suitable as a full sub. But after Forganthus's comments and a revisit, the plot ideas sort of surfaced so that's why I've promoted it to a sub.

Anyway, I'm changing this sub to a Plot as suggested cos it is more fitting. Go to Comment
Of Sprites
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-11 09:31 PM
Good idea for spicing up the sub, might add some of the oddballs when I'm taking breaks from my one of my 'serious' subs Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-07 07:52 PM
A solid and well-presented sub. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-12 08:59 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Tuner Mages
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Country/ State)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-15 05:54 PM
Thanks for the suggestion above. As always, it's a good idea and I can easily incorporate it into the sub. Go to Comment
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