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Law Enforcement in the Cosmic Era
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-05 12:23 AM
This gives a very concise overview of law enforcement in CE and I like both the italic text showing usage in different geographic locations and the subsequent text on the shortcoming of a particular option to law enforcement. This is a very article-y piece but it was a easy read and I liked the overall discussion presented here as being very logical. Go to Comment
The Second Renaissance
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-05 12:11 AM
First, I would like to say that I really liked the first paragraph and given that I have a personal penchant for articles of a particular era of a speculative fiction world, I should have given this a higher score than the standard solid 3. However, the major problem I have with this sub is that I felt like it was written on the premise of assuming that I had read a whole bunch of CE subs which I haven't. Specifically, the 2nd paragraph had already lost me a little. From the name, I thought it would be a sort of tech. combining 'conventional magic' from the fantasy genre but from the actual paragraph, that's not it from the impression I got so then I wonder what on Earth it is really (I'm not a technie person so I don't want to know the specifics but I just get a vibe that it is supposed to be a new form of tech. that expands new real life tech. exponentially but it somehow has a name that reminds me of fantasy so that's just weird to me). On top of that, there is also discussion of the 2nd Dark Ages and Petroleum Era which I think you had written up elsewhere but didn't explicitly link to and the discussion on how the Elysium project would make humans win and droids lose by replacing all unskilled labour with non-human entities makes me wonder the following "In the Cosmic Era setting, where have all the unskilled labour gone? Totally eradicated by education and technological advancement or what?"
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Masgolth's Fire
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:00 PM
A good epic weapon with an interesting backstory reminiscent of old legends and such, I even get a little vibe of the Lord of the Rings somehow. Maybe it's the timing since I'm going to see the last episode of the Hobbit this coming Tuesday and I'm just re-reading the whole LoR series again. Go to Comment
The Spirit Net
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:34 PM
I agree with SE: certainly short and sweet. I liked the Entwiners (although not sure whether I officially voted on it) and I like the idea of the Spirit Nets. I also think the first sample seems like the strongest entry among the three. Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 05:01 AM
I found the format used to present this idea appealing- reminds me of the Forgotten Realm books starring a travel novelist as the main protagonist but written a notch better. Maybe you could revisit this and turn it in a proper sub when you have some more snippets along the same lines and then you can change the title to Excerpts rather Excerpt. Or maybe you could turn this into a Wiki if you can't seem to let it go as a stub (Wiki Duo at it again, what is it with me and you together? It's becoming like every second correspondence b/w us involves a Wiki somehow) Go to Comment
The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 11:12 PM
The comment I have is that I would like to know more but you did say this is a building block sub so I will await future subs. Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 05:27 AM


Now that I've read the sub, it does seem the tattoo part is sort of secondary to Reposia as a location. I agree tattooing is somewhat a central part of their culture but now like you, I'm a bit uncertain whether this belongs to the quest or not. So I guess we'll wait for the next person/persons to decide.



Quite solid sub but need to ponder a bit before voting.

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Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-07 06:57 PM
Ergh... somehow forgot to come back to this. This is a solid sub on Reposia and while some bits are a little dry, there are also quite a few that are likeable- the link b/w the Trident (a sea related object in Greek mythology) and Trianarianism, the prison camps and the festival days. Go to Comment
The Azul Deck of Shadows
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 07:00 PM
A very complete set of cards with a good legend attached. good work. Go to Comment
Subdermal Monitor
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 07:21 PM
I'm also leaning towards what Val said. I'm seeing this as more fitting stub material. Go to Comment
The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 01:14 AM


11. The Soft Paradise aka Forbidden Pleasure



A potion that helps a man fulfill his wildest and most lusted after dreams and more…



Materials:



  • 6 strands of virginal hair from the female victim

  • 6 drops of blood from the male beneficiary

  • parts of a plant that has aphrodisiac properties

  • soil with Zomorrod powder mixed in



Instructions

Grow any plant known for its aphrodisiac properties (the stronger its aphrodisiac properties, the stronger the effect of the potion will be) with the Zomorrod-infused soil. Extract the relevant part of the plant at midnight of a solar eclipse day and grind it to dust (or make it into liquid form if it’s a flower or fruit). Mix in the six drops of blood from the male. Remove six strands of virginal hair from the woman by root and put them into the mix.

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The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 01:16 AM


12. The Potion of False Pregnancy



A potion for ruining fame, a potion for exacting revenge, a potion for obtaining freedom… a must-have potion for women that suits any contingent situation



Materials: (note: incomplete)



  • remains of a stillborn baby, preferably fresh or at the very least, not older than 3 months

  • menstrual blood from a woman straight after her pregnancy

  • web strand made by

  • a hematite stone

  • potion of



Instructions

coming soon

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10 Magic Tattoos
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-18 11:16 PM
A good 10, up to your usual high standards. Might want to give the sub once over though to check links eg. Orthacarium was in suggested submission but no link to it in main text; Likewise, no link for Darkwater. Go to Comment
CatBee
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-07 11:02 PM
Pretty good re-work on the "young children vs old witch" cliche Go to Comment
Shrinkstools
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-08 10:53 PM
Short and sweet. I also like the monster attraction part, adds a kind of realism for me. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 01:32 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
School Of Banewrights
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:25 PM
Like everyone else had said, a good background piece to explain the number of 'cursed or dysfunctional items' going around.

Something I don't quite get is the following line: "They do not produce weapons except as a trap for their user, for there is a shred of honesty in the bare blade or flying arrow." It's probably prose but I don't get how conventional weapons are inherently more 'honest' by nature or am I misinterpreting this whole line? Go to Comment
Sparrow Oak
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 03:36 PM
Short and sweet Go to Comment
Ratwood Tree
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 03:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Dragon's Wake
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 01:24 AM
What others said already, a great legend. Go to Comment
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