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4 Sentences NPC Generator
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-09-09 01:41 AM
Update: I now have 10 lots fully done, I think that's good enough for now. Vote on it, guys! Go to Comment
4 Sentences NPC Generator
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-09-13 11:21 PM
Update: Updated summary to add in due credits somehow forgotten on previous edition and added 11th lot of content while at it. Go to Comment
Whitestill, the First Sister
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-29 11:22 PM
Update: Turns out I can't be total slacker and has to add a brief character sheet after all for this to qualify for the Legendary People quest. Go to Comment
Whitestill, the First Sister
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-31 07:33 PM
The legendary aspect is partly tied up to my stub titled Sisters of Magul but I did explicitly say in the sub that as a team of three, she changed the way the Crunalan people lived ever afterwards by turning them to nomads. Even without the actual tale of how she manages to achieve this, I would say readers can take away from a purely logical perspective that she's a legendary figure.

I understand that the sub is a bit on the terse side, it did come from this short story that I was submitting to epub issue 1 but just couldn't take to the finishing line so this tale of how she's the most influential etc. is basically this stalled short story and the rest of it is vaguely in my head somewhere but I'm just not up to telling it. I don't mean to be defensive but just stating things as they are.

Writing might be a little lacking in clarity, I agree, shall bring this back to public draft for now until I give it another clarity check. Go to Comment
Whitestill, the First Sister
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-31 08:10 PM

Update: Minor update for clarity as per Strolen comment.

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Whitestill, the First Sister
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Moonlake's comment on 2017-02-05 10:13 PM

As mentioned above, this character came out of a stalled short story going towards the epub and I decided to recycle it when the 4 sentence tool came out. I tried to edit it a bit to clarify the legendary aspect of the character but overall, I can't take this sub much further. Is there anything specific that you think I could have added here to address the issue you see with it?

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7 Things About Suicide Squad
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Players)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-15 09:32 PM
I haven't seen the movie and am not particularly interested when I saw the movie poster for it at the tram stop outside my office so I can't really give a vote to this. But as an article, this works. It's got a strong narrative voice and the 7 things form a single coherent opinion about the movie. Go to Comment
Captain Will 'Deadshot' Hiller
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-18 08:26 PM
Don't know who Audie Murphy is so can't give bonus marks but a solid NPC made from the 4 sentence template. Go to Comment
Dr. Somerset Carter
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Travelers)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-18 08:24 PM
+0.5 for the links and the fact that she is all these disparate aspects to her character but they work so well together into making her unique Go to Comment
Eccentrica Gallumbits
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Artistic/Performance)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-18 08:30 PM
Works as a prostitute archetype. Go to Comment
Lilya Tupoleva Valerianovna
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-18 08:21 PM
What a score of 3 says. Go to Comment
Tilde, the Fixer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mercantile)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-08 07:01 AM
This I find a better illustration of the 4 sentence NPC concept compared to the last sub. The slightly contradictory of what this character is seduced and frightened by at the same time gives it a nice flavour. Go to Comment
Zora, Sorceress Queen
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-08 06:56 AM
I know this is supposedly to for the 4 sentence challenge and I don't mind its length. What I do mind is the one-dimensionality of the NPC. The seduced by and frightened by parts seem to me as if they are the same thing rephrased in a different way. Sorry, Scras, didn't mean to be harsh, but I just felt like some of the potential of this NPC had been wasted this way. I'm gonna go with 2.5 on this. Go to Comment
Zora, Sorceress Queen
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-28 11:08 PM
Revoted to 3 after re-write. Go to Comment
The 4 Sentence Tool
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-05 07:06 PM
I've just eyeballed this and looks like a good tool for writing up NPCs in whatever length you want to write them in. Actual vote and more detailed comment to follow.... Go to Comment
The 4 Sentence Tool
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-18 08:40 PM
As I said previously, good utility sub. Go to Comment
The 4 Sentence Tool
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-29 08:12 PM
This idea interests me, I will put it on my to-do list for semi-procrastination time which always come up for me. It can be another Wiki project for the Citadel. Go to Comment
Collection of Daggers 2
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-06-14 07:51 PM
Since you requested feedback on what to add, I would say one major aspect would be the backstory behind the item's creation (not the crafting process per se or only when it's interesting. Rather, I would say you could have delved more into what dark origins from which the daggers arose from. I gather that some gamers don't find this aspect very important to include but the Citadel has a few quirks of its own and this need of the readers for an item's backstory I would say is one of them.)

I also find that the entry on the 13 Obsidians a bit too sparse in that there's not even a description of its properties. Go to Comment
Fantasy Military Rankings
Systems  (Combat/ Warfare)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-05-05 08:32 PM
Firstly, welcome to the Citadel! This is a solid system, could use a bit more details but as is, it provides a good overview of the this specific ranking system. Go to Comment
Arrow of the Winged Sparrow
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-05-05 08:38 PM
I like it, from the summary I somehow had in mind that this arrow would be serving as a means of sending a message (clearly I glossed over the adjective pointed) so I was a bit surprised as I read on. The legend is a nice touch. Go to Comment
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       By: MoonHunter

It seemed like a great place to camp. The clearing was good sized and sheltered from the wind. The brook just a few feet away. There is a natural hallow to keep the horses.

Then the night came.

It was like it became a different place. The temperature dropped. The wind, which does not seem to disturb cloth, almost cuts through you like an arctic wind. No one can sleep, as the soft ground has turned hard. The horses are uneasy. The Bats are flying over and stopping in the trees.

And then there is the eyes. There are glowing eyes just inside the tree line watching your group. The mages and clerics can detect nothing, but there is still something there.

(yet there is nothing at all... The Darkness will do nothing unless the players do something to it. And even then it will all seem to be a conincidence.)

Of course, in the morning, it all becomes sweet and light.

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