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The Old City
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-10 08:26 PM
Tagged this in my favs in case one day I can contribute sth to this but if I was you, the first thing I would try to suss out for myself is the relationship between the Bloodrock Wars and how it changes the Old City so that it becomes a massive collection of haunted ruins i.e. is it just a lot of bloodshed and you have a lot of the slaughtered lying around who can't go the nether realms OR is it sites of mass slaughter attracts some type of 'bad karma' etc. etc. Go to Comment
The Old City
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-08-11 07:25 PM
So I guess you are really looking for inputs into the random ghost table or adding/expanding on the more famous ruins (potentially). Go to Comment
30 Amazons
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-03-10 11:17 PM
I'm not up to touch with all comics but the 5 complete specimen of Amazon we have here are solid character snapshots. Of them, I only recognise Cat Woman but I somehow think Yuna is from Final Fantasy X, is it? Just wondering. Not sure what vote to give this, will ponder and come back to vote. Go to Comment
The Xan-Axe
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-13 05:56 PM
Great boon and drawback to this weapon to cause fun and mayhem. Go to Comment
The Xan-Axe
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-14 05:27 PM
That is hilarious, Muro. For that, have an upvote. Go to Comment
The War Drum of Oyr
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 03:55 AM
I seem to be pushing towards the fact that the War Drum isn't created from a Shard of Storm and for that reason that seems not 100% fitting towards the Shards of Storm quest but I think I have at least made the case that it could be made from a Shard of Storm. It certainly is a possibility- one of two, circulating among sages in my world. Go to Comment
The War Drum of Oyr
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 04:20 PM
Cloudy origin and convoluted myth seem to be personal fav of mine or at least, they tend to crop as recurring themes in my items time and again.

Really like the bovine idea btw and shall incorporate into the sub. Go to Comment
The War Drum of Oyr
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 04:23 PM
Update: Incorporated Muro's idea of Drum effect on nearby bovines Go to Comment
Power Stones
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:20 PM
The Options & Ideas section sets this apart but otherwise this is a solid but slightly too conventional idea. Go to Comment
Wings of Wondrous Power
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:51 PM
Muro summed up very well. So what he said. Go to Comment
Horn of Magic Power
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:47 PM
I personally feel like this should be put under Items rather than Lifeforms but that's a nitpick and I find this sub greatly amusing. Go to Comment
White Death
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 10:38 PM
I had my suspicions with Val's comment and you just confirmed it :) Go to Comment
White Death
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 10:42 PM
I see an edit had been done to cut down on verbosity but the balance between the fiction and White Death itself is still a bit problematic. Like Val said, this is somehow screaming for separation into 2 subs, 1 being fiction and the other being White Death as an NPC. But the prose is really perfect. Go to Comment
The Maze
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-27 09:38 PM
So are you specifically looking for advice about structure or just noting about readability problem up front? I've tagged this in favs but can't make promises as to how soon I can provide feedback. Go to Comment
The Maze
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-07-28 02:02 AM
I see, yep, that sometimes happens, no worries. Go to Comment
Ogre Sports
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Local)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-01-14 06:21 PM
I have a sneaking suspicion that this is inspired by the very educational convo we had yesterday about what meta-fiction is. Rise, meta fiction!

Very gruesome but very believable accounting of a couple ogre sports.

Too bad this isn't about shapeshifters else we could include this straight into issue 1. Go to Comment
7 Spells for Pompous Nobility
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-01-07 10:53 PM
Except for the Thaumometer that I'm not sure about (is it basically a transmutation alert thingy?) I feel that this can be called the 7 spells for pompous nobility and works to that effect. Go to Comment
The Cursed Cup of Immortality
Items  (Potion)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-31 01:12 AM
To me, this is complete and probably can be used as-is in a game. I was never taken much for the idea of the Holy Grail and spin-offs but I'm giving this a score of 4 purely on the prose in this piece. Go to Comment
Alethia Goodchild
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-31 01:19 AM
This NPC has some promise- giving her a maternal urge is a nice touch to counterbalance her praying mantis/black widow side. But overall, this is a very snapshotish sub. If this is a character sheet, I might give it a higher score. Go to Comment
Zherebetz Zimna
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-02 09:21 PM
This is a very good and wholly unexpected adaption of the magic item template to a lifeform. And the lifeform itself has good merits on its own. Go to Comment
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