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The War Drum of Oyr
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 04:20 PM
Cloudy origin and convoluted myth seem to be personal fav of mine or at least, they tend to crop as recurring themes in my items time and again.

Really like the bovine idea btw and shall incorporate into the sub. Go to Comment
The War Drum of Oyr
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 04:23 PM
Update: Incorporated Muro's idea of Drum effect on nearby bovines Go to Comment
Power Stones
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:20 PM
The Options & Ideas section sets this apart but otherwise this is a solid but slightly too conventional idea. Go to Comment
Wings of Wondrous Power
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:51 PM
Muro summed up very well. So what he said. Go to Comment
Horn of Magic Power
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-03 08:47 PM
I personally feel like this should be put under Items rather than Lifeforms but that's a nitpick and I find this sub greatly amusing. Go to Comment
White Death
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 10:38 PM
I had my suspicions with Val's comment and you just confirmed it :) Go to Comment
White Death
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-05 10:42 PM
I see an edit had been done to cut down on verbosity but the balance between the fiction and White Death itself is still a bit problematic. Like Val said, this is somehow screaming for separation into 2 subs, 1 being fiction and the other being White Death as an NPC. But the prose is really perfect. Go to Comment
Ogre Sports
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Local)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-01-14 06:21 PM
I have a sneaking suspicion that this is inspired by the very educational convo we had yesterday about what meta-fiction is. Rise, meta fiction!

Very gruesome but very believable accounting of a couple ogre sports.

Too bad this isn't about shapeshifters else we could include this straight into issue 1. Go to Comment
7 Spells for Pompous Nobility
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-01-07 10:53 PM
Except for the Thaumometer that I'm not sure about (is it basically a transmutation alert thingy?) I feel that this can be called the 7 spells for pompous nobility and works to that effect. Go to Comment
The Cursed Cup of Immortality
Items  (Potion)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-31 01:12 AM
To me, this is complete and probably can be used as-is in a game. I was never taken much for the idea of the Holy Grail and spin-offs but I'm giving this a score of 4 purely on the prose in this piece. Go to Comment
Alethia Goodchild
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-31 01:19 AM
This NPC has some promise- giving her a maternal urge is a nice touch to counterbalance her praying mantis/black widow side. But overall, this is a very snapshotish sub. If this is a character sheet, I might give it a higher score. Go to Comment
Zherebetz Zimna
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2016-02-02 09:21 PM
This is a very good and wholly unexpected adaption of the magic item template to a lifeform. And the lifeform itself has good merits on its own. Go to Comment
Whore-Spiders
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-12 05:34 PM
You are right, I think I like this sub just as-is. Most of the time, I think people expect a plot hook section just cos the nature of this site but I've often skipped that. It might have affected the votes I got for the sub (my overall average is closer to 3 than 4 and Strolen would say that's very good already, down with the skewed voting) but I don't think it changes the fact that the sub itself is decent in quality. Go to Comment
Whore-Spiders
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-12 01:31 AM
As-is, I would give it a 3. It's got weirdness and plausible applications in a fantasy world. I guess what's lacking is how would PCs interact with it besides gathering it for money to sell to alchemists, buying some for adventuring purposes etc. Maybe a fancy lore about their origin? Don't know but I sorta like this but then I like any speculative fauna/flora type of sub. Go to Comment
Phantom Wood
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-21 07:55 PM
Not much to add, great imagery of the ethereal trees with solid roots. The other thing that I could think of is that in real life, coal packets are popular around HK and Japan for keeping hands warm and I think that burned Phantom Word can be wrapped in a cloth and sewed up to make the same thing. Go to Comment
The Leg of St. Goag
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-10 04:09 PM
I like this sub for its potential to be either serious or silly (and working in both counts). I also like the fact that you could have the leg truly running around inciting peasant rebellions or that being such tales and rumours made up by the peasant army. Overall, just a very flexible, fun and utility sub. Go to Comment
7 Rings
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-08 05:12 PM
Besides the actual rings themselves, I kinda like how their names rhymed. Like Muro said, the limitations are very nice. I think I like Hurl and Hang the most. Go to Comment
Pleem
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-06 01:18 AM
Muro, I seem to have picked up your liking for bizarre lifeforms that are a mix-match of different things. I was thinking this could go into Dossta's PetDex as an entry as well (except for its length, that is). Go to Comment
Sorcerer's Skin (Pants)
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-06 01:26 AM
+0.5 for the stranger than fiction part Go to Comment
The Heart of Winter
Locations  (Area)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-12-04 07:19 PM

Pretty much what was said above. I liked this but it's a tad short for its potential (not much can be done about that though given this is a 500 words challenge, maybe you should do a no word count version?) and can be expanded on as suggested above. Nevertheless, it's a nice Weaver piece showcasing the 2 very well-written pieces by MM and Scras.

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