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The Spirit Net
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:34 PM
I agree with SE: certainly short and sweet. I liked the Entwiners (although not sure whether I officially voted on it) and I like the idea of the Spirit Nets. I also think the first sample seems like the strongest entry among the three. Go to Comment
Excerpt from Lockwhistle’s Adventurer’s Companion for Beginners
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 05:01 AM
I found the format used to present this idea appealing- reminds me of the Forgotten Realm books starring a travel novelist as the main protagonist but written a notch better. Maybe you could revisit this and turn it in a proper sub when you have some more snippets along the same lines and then you can change the title to Excerpts rather Excerpt. Or maybe you could turn this into a Wiki if you can't seem to let it go as a stub (Wiki Duo at it again, what is it with me and you together? It's becoming like every second correspondence b/w us involves a Wiki somehow) Go to Comment
The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 11:12 PM
The comment I have is that I would like to know more but you did say this is a building block sub so I will await future subs. Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 05:27 AM


Now that I've read the sub, it does seem the tattoo part is sort of secondary to Reposia as a location. I agree tattooing is somewhat a central part of their culture but now like you, I'm a bit uncertain whether this belongs to the quest or not. So I guess we'll wait for the next person/persons to decide.



Quite solid sub but need to ponder a bit before voting.

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Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-02-07 06:57 PM
Ergh... somehow forgot to come back to this. This is a solid sub on Reposia and while some bits are a little dry, there are also quite a few that are likeable- the link b/w the Trident (a sea related object in Greek mythology) and Trianarianism, the prison camps and the festival days. Go to Comment
The Azul Deck of Shadows
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 07:00 PM
A very complete set of cards with a good legend attached. good work. Go to Comment
Subdermal Monitor
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 07:21 PM
I'm also leaning towards what Val said. I'm seeing this as more fitting stub material. Go to Comment
The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 01:14 AM


11. The Soft Paradise aka Forbidden Pleasure



A potion that helps a man fulfill his wildest and most lusted after dreams and more…



Materials:



  • 6 strands of virginal hair from the female victim

  • 6 drops of blood from the male beneficiary

  • parts of a plant that has aphrodisiac properties

  • soil with Zomorrod powder mixed in



Instructions

Grow any plant known for its aphrodisiac properties (the stronger its aphrodisiac properties, the stronger the effect of the potion will be) with the Zomorrod-infused soil. Extract the relevant part of the plant at midnight of a solar eclipse day and grind it to dust (or make it into liquid form if it’s a flower or fruit). Mix in the six drops of blood from the male. Remove six strands of virginal hair from the woman by root and put them into the mix.

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The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 01:16 AM


12. The Potion of False Pregnancy



A potion for ruining fame, a potion for exacting revenge, a potion for obtaining freedom… a must-have potion for women that suits any contingent situation



Materials: (note: incomplete)



  • remains of a stillborn baby, preferably fresh or at the very least, not older than 3 months

  • menstrual blood from a woman straight after her pregnancy

  • web strand made by

  • a hematite stone

  • potion of



Instructions

coming soon

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10 Magic Tattoos
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-18 11:16 PM
A good 10, up to your usual high standards. Might want to give the sub once over though to check links eg. Orthacarium was in suggested submission but no link to it in main text; Likewise, no link for Darkwater. Go to Comment
CatBee
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-07 11:02 PM
Pretty good re-work on the "young children vs old witch" cliche Go to Comment
Shrinkstools
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-08 10:53 PM
Short and sweet. I also like the monster attraction part, adds a kind of realism for me. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 01:32 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
School Of Banewrights
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-01 07:25 PM
Like everyone else had said, a good background piece to explain the number of 'cursed or dysfunctional items' going around.

Something I don't quite get is the following line: "They do not produce weapons except as a trap for their user, for there is a shred of honesty in the bare blade or flying arrow." It's probably prose but I don't get how conventional weapons are inherently more 'honest' by nature or am I misinterpreting this whole line? Go to Comment
Sparrow Oak
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 03:36 PM
Short and sweet Go to Comment
Ratwood Tree
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 03:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Dragon's Wake
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 01:24 AM
What others said already, a great legend. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Trans World)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-05-24 02:38 AM
I'm with SE on this one, I actually like its light touch on actual practices and dogmas though that was more a constraint of time rather than author intention. And like Val, I love the evolution described here. Go to Comment
The Forgotten Cemetery
Locations  (Area)   (Plains)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-16 12:14 AM
Like Gossamer, I quite like the sword tombstones as well. Overall, a solid piece. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Sentient)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-12 07:56 PM
I'm normally not a fan of infernal themed subs, but this one is a nice surprise. I like how the boons and curses linked to each of the books is relatively 'minor' in a sense.

btw, you can and probably should link back to your own scroll on Ngama Ngama in 30 Devils by using the syntax {sub_id#comment_id|Ngama Ngama} where you replace { with [. The sub_id#comment_id can be found when you go back to the 30 Devils sub and then click on the eye icon on your scroll on Ngama Ngama. Not sure whether you know abt the syntax or not so might as well write it down here. Go to Comment
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