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Bareka
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:03 AM
Just so complete a sub. Also, I find the whole Ouzquin Dremorix setting fascinating. Go to Comment
The Broken World
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-16 01:04 AM
I think the write-up pretty good in general but I see a few things in the current version that are a bit unclear and prone to mis-interpretation:
1. "Terraforming on the scale of continents, nigh-unlimited fonts of sorcerous energy, the technology to reconstitute entire extinct species. One must wonder: were these People, or Gods? One thing is certain, though, the aforementioned Interlopers were confirmed to be of the latter category." I'm sort of confused by this particular sequences of sentences. Are the terraforming etc. part referring to the Eldest or the Interlopers? I know they are both "God-like" beings. It's really this the Eldest-SuperPowers-Interlopers sequence that I find leads to the mix-up.
2. When you talk abt the Interlopers' flaw, you say they cannot manifest on objects w/o sufficient mass which I take to mean they cannot appear in a physical form on objects w/o sufficient mass. This, however, does not by itself preclude the Interlopers using their powers on objects w/o sufficient mass. But then you seem to say this does as they cannot bring their minions across also b/c this flaw. I found this somewhat too wide a logical jump in the write up. Also, I'm sort of unclear on whether my interpretation on this is correct. If not, you are welcome to correct me but regardless, I do think this particular section needs to be gone over to improve its clarity.

Hope these comments are helpful. It's a good start, I look forward to the additions of the 16 species. Go to Comment
The Broken World
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-16 06:00 PM
Ah, got it now. As for the reason why the Moons can't move closer, I would personally go for the Automated Defenses. I'm sort of mediocre at Physics but I thought gravity is something that works within a planet, not b/w. And anyway, unless you are very physics minded (and it doesn't sound like it in your response b/c you said gravity nonsense), I would say there's just heaps more explaination you need to give if you say that the Moons can't move any closer due to some kind of magnetic field stuff (I think that's more appropriate than gravity but then I'm not 100% sure) and I don't really know why you should bother. It doesn't add much to the story, it's just sth complex at the background of your world (unless of course, you are trying to make this a sci-fi setting and you really wanted this complex bg stuff). Go to Comment
The Broken World
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-16 07:39 PM
Ah I see, well, from what you've written so far, I kinda thought it might be one of these cross-genre settings that have elements from both fantasy and sci-fi and I was sort of unclear on which direction you were going. Personally, I understand fantasy settings much better- like you said, I don't necessarily have to delve into how magic actually works in a world but with sci-fi, I keep feeling like someone's taking me on a tour of some "awesome technology" and is just yapping on abt technicalities that I can't wrap my head around. No offense to any sci-fi fans out there, this is just how I feel. Go to Comment
The Eye Of Winthorp
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 02:58 AM
I quite like the write-up for this slightly revolting item. At first, I had some issues but the viability of this item concerning the likelihood of it being picked up by normal PCs but after thinking abt it some more, now I'm okay with it on this pt. Go to Comment
The Eye Of Winthorp
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 06:06 AM
Hmmm... must be some kind of novelty factor at play. Anyway, I was thinking a PC who's a thief would want to pick it up. Go to Comment
Creeders Magic Dentures
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-11 12:10 AM
A quite amusing silly item, bonus marks for leading me to learn what an affliction pica is. Go to Comment
Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 03:53 AM
Even though I'm not personally into pets, I do find the idea of this sub likeable. However, I don't quite get why govts. want to get their hands on some unkeyed Pet Cubes. Is it sth like the Pet Cube can capture any species in the whole universe and so they can store even humans in a Pet Cube if they wanted?
P.S Will add some to the Creature Dex when I have time and some ideas. Go to Comment
Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 05:46 PM
Well, yes, I can't tell (until I looked it up just then), Pokemon is sth I know the existence of but never got into it (I had practically outgrown cartoons by the time it hits) Go to Comment
Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 08:34 PM
4) Nine-tailed foxes

Physical Description: Fox-like creatures that are kitten sized and with a face resembling Alaskan Malamutes. Depending on their growth phase, they have up to nine tails and come in a range of (pure) colours

These cuties are popular with the ladies as they have a tendency for snuggling up against owners and especially enjoy being stroked on their lustrous tails. Unlike their namesake in Chinese myths, these creatures are common domesticated pets on their native planet and do not have any supernatural abilities. They are also vegetarians. They have much longer life spans compared to a human and this has given rise to a new trend of these creatures being passed down from mother to daughter as a keepsake.

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Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 09:01 PM
5) Soft-shelled turtles

Physical Description: Identical to normal turtles in physiology except for their shells being somewhat soft, much like a soft-shell crab. Up to five years in age, young soft-shelled turtles are, however, completely indistinguishable from normal turtles, even to the hardness of the shells.

Every five years, soft-shelled turtles shed one layer of their shells and regrow one that is partially of the exact same colour and tone as the layer it just shed and partially of a random colour and tone. Unlike normal turtles, soft-shelled turtles have a much shorter life span. Usually, it is able to accompany a single owner for all of his/her life and then will be quite close to the end of its own natural life.


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Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-20 06:47 AM


12) The Sharalacs

Physical Description: A bolt of fibre-like material, velvety to the touch



Popular with those required to make frequent inter-galactic travels, the Sharalacs are prized for both their high utility and low maintenance costs. These creatures are basically used as easy-to-carry (they can be rolled up just like a bolt of cloth without adverse effects to them) multi-dimensional storage devices with automatic sorting and instant recall features (that activate on telekinetic command). They do not feed on anything. Rather, they grow with their ‘usage’. The more and varied the content and the more frequent and complex the recall requests are, more of a stimuli if provided for these creatures’ growth. In particular, Sharalacs’ growth are characterised by them physically becoming thicker and taking on more characteristics of an intelligent being in their telepathic communications with their owners.

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Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-29 11:58 PM
14) The Spiny Quilts

Physical Description: Creatures named for their wide rectangular multi-segmented bodies that are not only warm to the touch but also feels really smooth, like one is stroking a blanket made of down. The Spiny Quilts have a flat head that otherwise resembles a crocodile’s and a tail that contains a split down the middle and is rounded on the edges (much like a fish’s tail) but covered up with its shell.

A popular pet choice among families with young children, as Quilt youngsters have a habit of undertaking afternoon naps on a daily basis. Coupled with their size (they are about as long as a normal human child’s height and of sufficient width to double up as a ‘blanket’ for kids), they make perfect ‘napping’ companions for children. The Spiny Quilts can eat a mixed diet but usually prefer fish-meat or earthworms as their main food sources. 

 
P.S. The inspiration source for this: Gossamer’s uploaded pictures on what centipede people could look like plus I was in bed wrapped up in nice and warm blankets when this idea came into my head

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Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-15 06:31 PM
8) Whirling Cocktails

Physical Description: Spinning vortexes of viscous liquid

They range from being thumb-sized to being about half a human in height. Little maintenance is required for the Whirling Cocktails. There is no need to clean their droppings for they leave none. Their diets are also simple (any gas, liquid or oil would do). Despite their liquid form, the growth in Whirling Cocktails is not proportional to the volume of material fed to them. Also, besides a growth in volume, the Whirling Cocktails will change in colour, viscosity and spinning speed according to the material fed to them. They ‘eat’ only periodically (usually about once every 3 months). They will emit a clanging sound as if cutleries coming into contact with one another whenever they require feeding and purr with a light ‘ting’ sound once their appetites are sated. If they are fed material indigestible to them i.e. any solid materials, they will emit a thin wail and quickly spin away from such offending materials. Keep the Wailing Cocktails well out of reach from human toddlers, youngsters and other addled members of this particular species- while accidental ingestions of the Whirling Cocktails leave the creatures themselves unharmed, this will cause severe vomiting and diarrhea for the humans who swallowed them.


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Petdex
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 08:45 PM
13) The Crystalings

Physical Description: Robotic creatures made of a crystalline material that range in outlook from common and mythical beasts to various humanoid forms to completely alien and indescribable forms. Sketch out your own Cytstaling if you are not happy with the existing range of variations and we will make a custom one just for you!

Ever since the compatibility issues between the Crystalings and the r-Butlers have been solved (so that the Crystalings have all of the functions of a r-Butler integrated in), the Crystalings have become the first pet choice among most humans. The Crystalings operate on solar power only and are extremely energy efficient. They are also pre-programmed to recharge automatically on sunny days whenever they operate on less than a ‘full battery’. The Crystalings are more durable to blunt force/pressure than normal robots of human made. However, certain ultrasonic frequencies are known to cause the Crystalings to shatter.

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Kalimon - An Overview
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-06 12:42 AM
Update: This sub is mainly put out to clarify terms used in my Elementallion stub and of course, to fulfill requirements for joining the Weavers Guild. So, as already mentioned in the summary, this is not an exhaustive sub on all details on this setting. If there are particular aspects people would like to know more about, put down a comment and I will respond. Go to Comment
Kalimon - An Overview
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-06 06:14 PM
Strolen, you will get your post on the magic system in Kalimon eventually (I was contemplating writing one after I posted this) but I'm feeling Mathom's grasp on it. Go to Comment
Kalimon - An Overview
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-06 07:32 PM
I think I will expand Youlini section on this sub and maybe clarify the magic section a little more as well but in response to your queries: 
1. I envision the true forms of Youlinis being somehow 'inferior life forms' in terms of harnessing the magical elements (either their bodies benefit less from the natural flowing in of magical elements or they reach some kind of bottleneck not existent to the humanoids with the magical elements). So shape-shifting is their attempt to attain a better life-form/body. As to why one humanoid form only, it's a very hard thing for these life forms to transition into a Youlini, let alone being able to shape-shift into multiple humanoid forms. Also, given the history, I was thinking if they could shape-shift into multiple forms, it's nearly impossible to hunt down Youlinis unless you catch them at the spot and kill them there. Eg. if you find out human A is a Youlini, you try to kill it, it escapes and then it turns into a dwarf, how will you find it? But if it can only take a particular race form, then at least when you find out there's a Youlini masquerading as a human, you can narrow your search by looking for only foreign faces amongst humans. As to wording issues, by "varying their outlook", I mean that if a Youlini shapeshifts into a human form, then it could make it into a man or a woman, tall or short, fat or thin etc. according to their wishes (and subject to their power, of course). 
More details forthcoming in the actual sub itself else you and everyone else will go insane from the long paragraph I'm writing. I'm even going a bit insane now from writing such a long section in comments. 

2. Abt harnessing magical elements, I'm envisioning that these magical elements on Kalimon are like air on Earth. It will flow into and out of life forms on its own accord and provide some kind of very very minor benefits to the lifeforms when they flow past. (I envision all the lifeforms on Kalimon that have an Earth equivalent being somewhat stronger, healthier, more intelligent etc.) When intelligent beings (aka humanoids) harness them, they have to consciously make the magical elements stay in their bodies and control where the elements go. 

3. On locations of interest, unfortunately this part is absolutely blank at the moment. Maybe there will be some after I get some ideas on flora and fauna unique to Kalimon which are also blank sections on this world. Same goes for religions etc. 
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Kalimon - An Overview
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-06 10:43 PM
Update: As per request in comments, expanded the sub. Also, I just want to re-emphasise that this is still a fairly incomplete setting (the idea for the entire setting started with the world of Kalimon after Elementallion and I'm sort of working backwards in this sub here). But anyway, let me know how you think of the revised edition. I will provide further details if I have them to any comments put down. Go to Comment
Kalimon - An Overview
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-07 05:45 PM
No, not everyone/everything can wield magic in this world. For non-intelligent beings (common animals and plants), most cannot though a few might develop some kind of magic-like abilities. For the intelligent races, it depends on how they 'use' magic. In the section titled Kalimon, I went thru the two uses of magic and individuals can use magic in both ways. The issue with using magic for them is really to choose the ratio for how they use the two alternative ways of manipulating magic for their personal developments. Basically, if one chose to use magic just to strengthen body parts, then he/she is pretty much a warrior (unless the strengthening is all for the brains and then maybe the person wants to be a scholar or sth) whereas if they choose the external manipulation path entirely, then he/she is a mage and of course, ppl can choose to be somewhere in between these two extremes. I will eventually do another sub just on magic in this setting which will cover all the points you and others raised.

I'm thinking of doing a minor edit on the inhabitants and update with a very rough Location section. Anyway, thanks for the comment.

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