I liked Sacras' Gems of the Underworld and I like this sub derived from it. In particular, I like the mechanic aspects of how the negative power of the rings are increased as more of them are wore at the same time etc. Go to Comment
Update: I was originally going to include a section on the ranking system for government officials in the Qing dynasty in ancient China (the one ruled by Manchurians) which has a very clear ranking system but the formatting is really driving me nuts so now I've decided to make that into a spin-off sub by itself. Also, I actually haven't finished tidying that section either but it will wait... Go to Comment
I see that the pic is taken from some Chinese kung-fu movie and actually this reminds me of that video game on PS2 where you can choose from a bunch of characters based from the period of the Three Kingdoms in China and in it there's a guy that uses 2 sticks as his weapon, sans the feathers of course (don't know the actual name of the game but the character you control can Mosou periodically which is charged up by doing combo moves and then you Mosou which releases a big attack thingy) Go to Comment
As a reader, I don't have problem with its current length. As a non-fan of sci-fi and your Cosmic Era setting, I still think it a solid article that goes thru in a concise way the purpose of screenery. Go to Comment
Like the other Moon, I like the way you turn the pic around too and the poem format is indeed lovable. And finally, cheers for 2nd sub for the Art Quest. The Moons collaboration are working to come with the 3rd but let's see.... Go to Comment
Overall, I liked this story about a son's love/hate relationship with his father. While the transition between the father telling of the story (the here and now) and the protagonist recollecting of his time with his father might be a little abrupt at places, I think the essence of the relationship between father and son and its dynamic evolution (from the son's perspective anyway) came through well. I like the mirror effect between the story about father and son that the protagonist's father is telling and the main story itself but a bit of complaint I have is that for the full mirror effect to be appreciated by the readers, they need to first know a little more abt the Sabatallee society than written down in this story itself (in particular, I'm thinking abt the three phases in life they have), can more of these cultural aspects of the Sabatallee society be worked into the story, maybe where the protagonist is delivering a value judgement on his father's blood? Go to Comment
Well, I guess I have in mind that he would be famous among the martial arts world but in terms of everyday citizenry, not really. A good logical extrapolation on the foster care system :)
Nope, totally hopeless at drawings I am. I just browsed deviantart.com for a Chinese male and used the first thing that suited my purpose. Also, now that you mention the teaser, I did not make up the excerpt (I sometimes do but not in this instance). Li Bai is an actual poet in ancient China, in the Tang dynasty. Just want to make that clear.
Haiku about the sword? Not in the right mind for doing it right now but if my muse comes back, I will come back and add one. Go to Comment
I like v1.2 better than v.1, I think, mainly cos it actually explains each category. I had a vague idea of what each of the 5 category is about previously from your actual comments but didn't know how exactly you defined the 5 criteria. I also like that now you give the author a choice of whether he/she wants to receive your detailed breakdown. You know, me, you and some others love it but there're others not crazy about such feedback. Go to Comment
For me (if I had to vote on the winner for the 500 word assassin challenge), I would pick either this or Dozus' sub. I liked Dozus' sub because of the background of double worship whereas this is definitely more character centred. Good work. Go to Comment
When running a new party, get around the question of plot density by having the first discovery to be a deck of fate, or whatever you call it. If you use a real deck, you should definitely stack it to have the desired outcome, which is to curse the party to attract weird things to happen and involve them. This should not be told to the players at the time, so that they won't just up and try to get themselves 'decursed'. Though quite why they would want to is beyond me.