Ah, again you have hit the nail on the head. To be honest, I'm finding that I might have gotten Bortai's future wants a bit muddled. I've told you how I write by subconscious and at first as I wrote it Bortai just picture having another happy life with Temujin, that was back in Chap 9 when she first recovered her memories. Then in subsequent chapters as they 'adventure' together on the Steppe, Bortai had a vague sense that she wants to help with his unification of Mongols/Crunalans (I need to go back and read previous Chaps to confirm whether I got this across, I did not have character motivation really pegged down from section to section when I was planning for the book, character motivation in initial planning was one-liners in dot-point form supplanted with a 10 by 10 character grid, it seems that I've overplanned for events and plots and underplanned for characters). Now (as of end of Chap 15, I'm currently at the start of Chap 16 and a little stuck) I have Bortai a little torn over what she wants.
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I will post up incomplete Chap 14 (I skipped over the last big action sequence b/c I felt I'm hopeless at action scenes in the first place and second b/c this crazy woman decided to write a big Mongolian wrestling scene totally out of her element so just procrastinating basically) shortly. Thinking that I will leave the skipped part for the end, found link to Mongolian wrestling match online but procrastinating and haven't watched it yet. Anyway, this wrestling sequence doesn't affect the story much, mostly character development for Temujin. I played with removing it entirely but after sketching out the events, plots and side-plots of this book on palm cards, decided to keep it as it is a good conflict scene. Just thought I will mention this.
Thanks Axle, I didn't mean that I will avoid the all-seeing perspective, merely stating that I think that I have do more work on this area to make it have the effect it should have. I don't see you as "picky" at all, I actually want my readers to be "picky". That's why I posted here as opposed to one of these places like Wattpad or Booksie (haven't interacted with the community there yet but seems like platforms where massive amt of fiction is posted and everyone can subscribe and read so I'm thinking the readers won't be as picky. I read Internet fic in my native tongue and I know they are quite low quality on average but I didn't mind so much cos just entertainment value).
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What you said about the spotlight is very apt description of the current trouble I have with this perspective- part of it is my stream-of-consciousness writing habit and I find it's hard to get this spotlight thingy right for a newbie like me without putting conscious thought into this aspect. Also, when I do my edits later, I'm very good at picking out spelling and grammar mistakes and small non-clarities but not any big thing like your feedback is providing me. I really need time to chill down so that I can switch mindset to perform a quality review of my own work. So yes, this moving b/w character perspectives will definitely go into my checklist for priority aspect to fix for the second draft.