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The Square Of Heroes
Locations  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 06:44 AM
A good 100 word sub though I would have liked an explanation on what the Carnival de Culture is actually about. Go to Comment
Onyx Guardians
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-30 05:49 PM
Kassy, just had an idea that floated into my head on this sub. I think what you've written so far would make a great start to the Tales of Adventure format. All you need to do now is to add the 3 possibilities on why the sailors are in a panic to get the figurines back. Go to Comment
Onyx Guardians
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-31 06:10 AM
I probably got the sub name wrong, it was a Codex by Wulfhere if I remember correctly. Okay, I just did a search, the Codex is actually called Tales of the Road (Tales of Adventure is the format and I got mixed up). 

Well, usually the three scenarios will make the sub into a sufficient length since each will be an independent scenario on its own. While it is clear from your summary that these figurines came from a looted temple, I can't, for the life of me, guess the motivations for these pirates wanting the figurines back based on what was written down here so far (well, not 100% true, prob a curse or sth, but still no idea at all abt nature of the curse since you can take it so many ways) 

And I just had more thoughts on turning this into a Tale of the Road. I know this is for the world you're building and you've revealed the cause of the curse but was thinking that as it currently stands, it doesn't explicitly says that the pirates were the ones looted the temple (although very likely that it's them) so was thinking in your 3 scenarios, could possibly include whether they were the culprits and if not, how they came into contact with the culprits. 

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Venettos Soup Spider
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 05:35 AM
As a blending of random sub exercise, this is great. The two subs are seamlessly integrated together. Go to Comment
The Helmet Of BEES!
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 09:49 PM
An item that's sort of whimsical (as in a normal item but somehow became silly thru chance). Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 06:44 AM
What the score says. However, I really wish you would de-100 this sub. Seems like their creation story would be an interesting one. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 05:49 PM
Ah, good to hear your plans for this sub. Personally, I always use the 100 word format for "abandoned ideas" or sth that came to me on-the-fly and didn't fit into the more serious stream of pieces that I write. But I know what you mean by getting sth out first. Go to Comment
Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 06:40 AM
Well, you can vote anyway you want, there's no standard voting practice for scrolls if that's what you mean. Personally, I will judge a scroll based on the underlying concept and the quality of the scroll entries and I think most ppl share this.

Right, it is short at the moment, I will be adding one scroll entry tmr. Go to Comment
Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-27 09:57 PM
“There’s a crown, made of Fools’ Gems” 

Rumour 1: “And so King Fedroas ordered a Fool’s Crown to be made out of Fools’ Gems, as befitting such a fool of a king as Crohatus, and gifted it to him before sending him away on exile on a remote island” 

Rumour 2: “This is the Crown of Fools, the heirloom left by the First King of Sydknon. As the one who has accomplished what was deemed the impossible task of uniting all of Sydknon, he commissioned a crown to be inset with Fools’ Gems, to remind his descendants that with persistence, the most plain will shine one day”

P.S. I should really thank Muro's comment for inspiring this particular entry and hence the whole of this scroll. 


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Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 08:02 PM
I see what you mean with the game-specificness, esp. if you want to use this scroll to be in accordance with Shadoweagle's suggested usage. When I posted this, I was actually thinking of these being more background material (as I'm wont to think of them, given that I'm a non-gamer).

Your idea on someone posting the seed rumour and others contributing replies would be fun. I guess in that case, I would turn this into a Wiki. Okay, I think I will do it, makes this scroll more useful and fun. Go to Comment
Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 08:07 PM
Update: Turned this into a Wiki based on comment from Dossta. Updated instructions on how to separate seed text and accompanying rumours Go to Comment
Planted Madness
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 05:11 AM
This rounds out the reasoning for the Everlife Dungeon occurring nicely. However, I have one small quibble. I found the following sentence mighty hard to comprehend: "The result can be a constant burden to endure until a solution is found with the constant danger of succumbing to the Tree's power (in the case of the knight) or a source of power to draw upon, that has to be kept in constant check unless it tries to draw back (in the case of the necromancer/magic user)." I get the main gist but it's just an ultra-long sentence and some of the wording seems a bit off. Go to Comment
Ife And Eath Governors Of Existence
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 04:48 AM
Like others before me, the concept of Eath tiring is intriguing and I also love the voice that this piece is written in. It was confusing to read at some places but then this confusion also adds to the flavour of this piece- a nice paradox. Go to Comment
Everlife Dungeon
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 04:38 AM
A very complete explanation for a unique dungeon ecology Go to Comment
30 Members Of The Players Cult
NPCs  (Extras)   (Religious)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-22 08:39 PM
I think the formatting of this is brilliant and I do think this 30 rounds out the Player Cult nicely and adds great depth to it in terms of the inner intrigues that're going on. However, I do have to say modern is just not my thing so I sort of stopped reading halfway through the Puzzle Gamer section (I did jump ahead and read Exodus and thinks that gives a very good reason for the Death Bringer Guild arising within the Player Cult).

I'm not voting on this particular piece b/c I think I might do it an injustice. I wouldn't change a single thing on it (which according to what I revealed abt my voting practice should be a 5) but if someone really force me to vote on it, my gut feeling would tell me to vote a 4. And yes, I did mention (when I revealed my voting standard) that I will refrain from voting on subs that are just not my 'cup of tea' regardless of their quality. Go to Comment
Friars Weed
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-19 07:12 PM
An solid idea, solid write-up. However, do a proof-read and fix up your affect/effects. Also, the following sentence "It also, when it comes time to reproduce, its creates a strong odor that encourages mosquitoes to come to it" just has repeated wordings. Go to Comment
Helstone Treasures
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Villanous)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 11:39 PM
A great extension to Scras' work on the Gems of the Underworld. Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-12 11:28 PM
Update: I don't know where I'm going with this sub. The content is a jumble of references to previously subs and some kind of unexpected association of societies and their emblems/weird shop signs. I'm probably just the wrong person to do this sub since I'm not artistically inclined. Anyway, I'm looking for advice on the general positioning of this sub and whether content need to be re-structured (and if so, suggestions on how)

I've locked this sub for the moment (against user-submitted ideas) b/c of the specificity of where I need help with. When I've determined that I'm happy with the positioning and structure of this sub, I will open it up. Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-15 06:22 AM
Update: Unlocked this sub and did some formatting changes.
Now open to new additions! 
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30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-15 05:18 PM
Yes, this is for a fantasy setting. I'm an avid fan of fantasy and doesn't really cross into other genres. But symbols for a modern setting could also be fun. So I've added a header now to separate symbols under different genres/settings.

It is in meta-voice which I presume you mean I'm writing this up in third person tense and not in the voice of a NPC/PC. Anyway, I changed this to a Wiki now cos if ppl add their inputs as user-submitted ideas, it will look very messy for the sub.

I really like the first title you suggested. Unfortunately from v.3 of the Citadel onwards, title changes need to be made by admins. So unless I get massive amounts of input beyond a 30, I don't think I can be bothered asking Strolen to change the title for me. Go to Comment
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