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7 More Reasons Why Not Everyone is a Magic User
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 03:32 PM
It would be helpful if you put up a link to 30 Reasons why Not Everyone is a Magic User so that ppl aren't contributing duplicates. I've tagged this in my fav folder and will try to contribute 1 or 2 items to the list but I need to know the original 30 reasons so that I'm not doubling up Go to Comment
Xen'da'rik
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-05 07:10 PM
A very comprehensive sub on a location. The formatting is good and makes it extremely easy to read thru despite the length. I think the Legend, the Persons of Note and Plot Hook sections are done very well but I like the other sections quite a bit less. In particular, I have the following issues with them:
1. Recent History: it's still well-written but I would have appreciated more sign-posting (i.e. tell me to refer to persons of note section for the personages). Currently, the various names mentioned in a short paragraph has a slightly overwhelming effect on me
2. Culture: currently, the majority of the section is concerned with what garb ppl of this city wears. I agree that's one part of culture but I would have appreciated sth more in-depth on cultural aspects. You did go into mindsets of the ppl and beliefs in after-life later but I guess what's bugging me is the inbalance b/w the more 'shallow' aspects of culture (what they wear) and these more in-depth aspects.

Overall, a high quality sub that achieves its purpose of describing the city very well. Go to Comment
Alexandra Stacja
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-28 05:57 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Excerpt from Lockwhistle’s Adventurer’s Companion for Beginners
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 04:01 AM
I found the format used to present this idea appealing- reminds me of the Forgotten Realm books starring a travel novelist as the main protagonist but written a notch better. Maybe you could revisit this and turn it in a proper sub when you have some more snippets along the same lines and then you can change the title to Excerpts rather Excerpt. Or maybe you could turn this into a Wiki if you can't seem to let it go as a stub (Wiki Duo at it again, what is it with me and you together? It's becoming like every second correspondence b/w us involves a Wiki somehow) Go to Comment
The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 10:12 PM
The comment I have is that I would like to know more but you did say this is a building block sub so I will await future subs. Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 04:27 AM


Now that I've read the sub, it does seem the tattoo part is sort of secondary to Reposia as a location. I agree tattooing is somewhat a central part of their culture but now like you, I'm a bit uncertain whether this belongs to the quest or not. So I guess we'll wait for the next person/persons to decide.



Quite solid sub but need to ponder a bit before voting.

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The Azul Deck of Shadows
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 06:00 PM
A very complete set of cards with a good legend attached. good work. Go to Comment
Subdermal Monitor
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 06:21 PM
I'm also leaning towards what Val said. I'm seeing this as more fitting stub material. Go to Comment
The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 12:14 AM


11. The Soft Paradise aka Forbidden Pleasure



A potion that helps a man fulfill his wildest and most lusted after dreams and more…



Materials:



  • 6 strands of virginal hair from the female victim

  • 6 drops of blood from the male beneficiary

  • parts of a plant that has aphrodisiac properties

  • soil with Zomorrod powder mixed in



Instructions

Grow any plant known for its aphrodisiac properties (the stronger its aphrodisiac properties, the stronger the effect of the potion will be) with the Zomorrod-infused soil. Extract the relevant part of the plant at midnight of a solar eclipse day and grind it to dust (or make it into liquid form if it’s a flower or fruit). Mix in the six drops of blood from the male. Remove six strands of virginal hair from the woman by root and put them into the mix.

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The Tome of the Mad Lich
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-28 12:16 AM


12. The Potion of False Pregnancy



A potion for ruining fame, a potion for exacting revenge, a potion for obtaining freedom… a must-have potion for women that suits any contingent situation



Materials: (note: incomplete)



  • remains of a stillborn baby, preferably fresh or at the very least, not older than 3 months

  • menstrual blood from a woman straight after her pregnancy

  • web strand made by

  • a hematite stone

  • potion of



Instructions

coming soon

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10 Magic Tattoos
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-18 10:16 PM
A good 10, up to your usual high standards. Might want to give the sub once over though to check links eg. Orthacarium was in suggested submission but no link to it in main text; Likewise, no link for Darkwater. Go to Comment
CatBee
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-07 10:02 PM
Pretty good re-work on the "young children vs old witch" cliche Go to Comment
Shrinkstools
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-08 09:53 PM
Short and sweet. I also like the monster attraction part, adds a kind of realism for me. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 12:32 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Sparrow Oak
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 02:36 PM
Short and sweet Go to Comment
Ratwood Tree
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 02:41 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Dragon's Wake
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 12:24 AM
What others said already, a great legend. Go to Comment
The Forgotten Cemetery
Locations  (Area)   (Plains)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-15 11:14 PM
Like Gossamer, I quite like the sword tombstones as well. Overall, a solid piece. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Sentient)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-12 06:56 PM
I'm normally not a fan of infernal themed subs, but this one is a nice surprise. I like how the boons and curses linked to each of the books is relatively 'minor' in a sense.

btw, you can and probably should link back to your own scroll on Ngama Ngama in 30 Devils by using the syntax {sub_id#comment_id|Ngama Ngama} where you replace { with [. The sub_id#comment_id can be found when you go back to the 30 Devils sub and then click on the eye icon on your scroll on Ngama Ngama. Not sure whether you know abt the syntax or not so might as well write it down here. Go to Comment
Quedoths Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-03 06:44 PM
Still a solid piece however this one has some typos. For example, in the first section, 3rd paragraph, 'through' has become 'though'. In the last plot, 'they' is typed as "then". Also, in the title, the apostrophe has been eaten up? Go to Comment
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