It is wonka-ish. It has wonderful visuals, but I am having problems with application of it in a game. Heck I am having issues trying to find uses for it in a Changeling like game.

I am afraid you will need to take up by the hand and lead us.... Go to Comment

And Moon, on his contact sugar high, forgot to vote. Go to Comment

This is a lot of fun. It should be used for a pirate game. Go to Comment

And only two months late this year. Next year, it will be on time Bullwinkle. Even if I have to use the Waybac machine. Go to Comment

Yes. I have been hitting more DnD orriented boards recently. This all seems to be novel to them.

And those are general rules to live by: Play nice with others and make sure they have a reason to play and enjoy your game. Go to Comment

My three source materials on icebergs say they hide 7/8ths. 12% vs 10% exposed after doing the math.

Either way, the metaphor holds. Most players will not see (or notice) the majority of the prep work you will do for your world if it is a functional world. That "undiscovered world" will serve as a foundation for any development in play you will need to do. Go to Comment

As for this idea, it is really not "done" at all. It stands as a declaration without any work done on it.

It needs examples. Even if it does not have specific examples, it needs general ones to illuminated. Then it needs one to three of your spell lists.

As it is right now, it is a 1. It is not well written, it is not well defined, and there is not enough material here to raise it beyond that.

Oh yes, can you capitalize the title?


I am also wondering what system you are used to looking at? Not that you need to stat thigns that way, but to give us a point of view. Your declaration is not stunning or innovative for most of us, as we are not used to Vancian magic or Locked spell lists. Go to Comment

In some ways, this should of been two submissions - one with Slyven Sallind and one with the Blackbirds.

So why prison wardens? What special power do they have other than they have some mutual contact with each other? And how many prisons does this land have?

Why not military nobles, or clergy, or ???

Well you get the idea. Go to Comment

A nice 30.

I liked that there were many interesting ideas and that there were links to other submissions. The creative aspects of the submission were top knotch. Some of your better pieces.

I disliked that there were links just to complete submissions (14-20). Many of these could of been expanded into full submissions without too much additional effort. I wish you had done that then linked them all together as a codex. Go to Comment

Nicely done. Nicely execute. Some hooks which work. Go to Comment

I don't see a lot of Medusa with her. I find a wonderful blind priestess that could be any species.

How did she become trained in 3 section staff?

How did the church come to accept her?

I am wondering about the stoning abilities and why they are negated by her blindness. Go to Comment

It is a nice little set of quirks. Of course, one has to wonder where this wonderous truth came from? And how are they exactly going to impliment this one?

Of course this could be made dangerous if the Church/ City has some "law" or "edict" against "mind control magics" or "non church sanctioned magics". Yes, they manage to "get their man", but they have to be careful with it. Otherwise, they could find themselves in a gallows or their own jails. Go to Comment

First you can add the 30 tag to it, you have earned that. It is an "Other 30" if you want that book keeping. Now that aside.

My well known dislike for anything worthy of the silly tag means I am going to be another lower vote and a hard sell for anything better.

I never hold short against a submission, as a submission is complete when it provides all the information needed to use it in a game. And it is a scroll, which means we can add to it. The question we ask is... why?

Maybe I am old,(Okay, I am...),but I don't see the utility or the real humor on this one. It sounds like your game takes dying in innane ways like a bakka hammer in an anime. It doesn't really happen, but it is just a gag visual. That might work for you, but for the rest of us.. we are all going "huh?".

Too many whys for me. There is not enough reasoning for it. And the real killer, it is not funny enough. Go to Comment

There are things to be said for the classics. And hand it to the Greeks to be ... inventive. Go to Comment

I do not find the +1 modifier to be that distracting. In general, most table top gamers, can translate that tiny mod into their own system of choice in their sleep. (The +3 for the warden's weapon, that might of been better explained than numbered.)

I did not find the "assasination attempt" motivation for a motivation to need any explanation. The assassin came in, the guard's weapons either broke or were ineffective in the environs of the castle (like if the guards were all using traditional great swords or pikes, which were effective in the battle field or protecting the outside of the building, but really not very useful inside the building. History is filled with these kinds of mistakes.

The Falcon explanation would be nice. And a better set of phrases revolving around the best weaponsmith of the land (at the time) would be nice.

Still I like this kind of submission a great deal. Go to Comment

I have linked it to the Interesting Weapons- Non-Magic, where it will find like friends. Go to Comment

Really, he is not a lifeform, so to speak. This is an NPC. I guess the unofficial difference being sentience and that he started as a person.

You are a bit rusty. It is a bit hard to read in spots and could use some spacing and formatting. (And yes, the linking would be nice.) Edit it through and it should be fine.

Other than that, classic you. Lots of story, interesting idea, and generally interesting. Go to Comment

The update is better. It is oddly hard to read in stops, as the text gets dense or awkward (alternatedly).

The Blood Beast section needs more information for me. Amended. I put in the Strolen's links to your in works Blood Beast submission. My question is how did this bow generate the magical blood beast transformation? Since The Blood Beast and its descendents exist, how did they "get into the bow" or how did this Corran bind one/ duplicate the magic.

The Blood tied bow is interesting in general though. It could use a bit more description for me and a bit more tie in to a world (a way to work it into a world). Go to Comment

A generally cursed being.

The questions left unanswered...

Is he staying in and around the water or is he staying in civilized areas?

How are the pitchfork and torches crowd dealing with him?

How actively is he searching for the wizard? Go to Comment

A finely crafted blade with expert metal work. I would assume that the Smith made other weapons of fine make. Thus , would could have another fine smith NPC as defined in Swords. Why does it always have to be swords? such as LLorryn of The Singing Steel or Nial Ironspirit.

I like weapons of repute with minimal to no magic. In Runebearer ( www.runebearer.com / http://www.cs.cmu.edu/~tpope/bostonia/frameset.html and a shout out to Chris Magoun who is a member here), weapons gain in power as their stories/ legends grow and wielders learn more of the item's history.

However spellish magic is not required. It is all about the reputation here. And that can be the greatest magic of all. Added to Interesting Weapons- Non-Magic While it is not a "class of weapons" as normally is the case for that submission, it is clearly appropriate.

This weapon, even if you don't use it directly, serves as a great example for your own world. It shows the power of reputation. Go to Comment