Why does the combination of a toxic waste spill and a species nearing extinction result in a magical effect that's beneficial to humanoids? Is the god of nature (who is, I assume, not fond of toxic waste spills and extinction) not in control of his own power?
Why does a swarm of millions of bugs need to charm a deer into doing its fighting? If a humanoid can get buried under thousands of bugs for a beneficial effect, why aren't the swarm's enemies simply swarmed and devoured?
Do the local humanoids know that the beetles are (sometimes) helpful, or would injured people panic when the swarm starts gathering around them?
If they're normally encountered in swarms of thousands (enough of them to cast spells) and they routinely congregate around humanoids throughout their vast habitat, how does this effect the swamp's ecology and nearby humanoid settlements? Is there room for other adventures in the area? Go to Comment
This is good, mostly. I like the idea of a creature that isn't inherently dangerous but that's just too annoying to let live. I really like the idea of tasteless rich people and senile wizards inflicting them on their hapless neighbors, necessitating a search-and-destroy mission -- that's comedy gold, right there.
The punctuation and formatting do need work.
The borrowed idea works well enough in comedy -- it might be even funnier that it's an annoying cartoon bird -- but in more serious subs it's better to disguise it. (On a side note, kudos for not posting the Aflac Duck, which would require the GM to be wearing full body armor during play.)
Speaking of body armor, the "man in plate mail" line clashes a bit with the Citadel's no-stats, system-neutral style (it's a noticeable reference to Armor Class). Worse, it implies that the bird is hard to hit because of some inherent toughness or thick hide, and not because it's small, fast, and nimble. Go to Comment
Possible motive alteration: Instead of dark obsession and boredom, maybe the good doctor was frustrated at patients who consistently ignored his advice and stumbled onto his "unconvential approaches" in his desperation. This could add a new layer of condescension, contempt, and Why-Me-style self-pity to his personality -- after all, if his patients would just listen to him and do the sensible thing, he wouldn't need to control them, and it's such a burden on him...
And: "Also remember to smile a lot, since this makes them feel safer..." Except when it creeps them out, which he might not notice. Go to Comment
Spelling, punctuation, and grammar: it's really distracting, but a good enough sub could overcome that. However... there isn't much of an idea there, I'm afraid. So it's a concealed weapon. Okay. And it's green, "for reasons that are unknown," which is the most interesting detail in the sub.
By the way, your thieves' guild was looking for a stealthy, concealable weapon. Sonic attacks are not stealthy. The evil wizard needs to go back to the drawing board. (Is it possible to put a "silencer" on a sonic effect, or does he need to use some other form of attack?)
By the way (part 2), about the evil wizard: Sure, he's working for the thieves' guild, but there are enough non-evil thieves and thieves' guilds in fantasy that making magic items for one doesn't automatically make a wizard evil. This detail needs to either be defined or removed. Go to Comment
What many have said, with emphasis, plus a Cliche Busters Award.
I'd probably use manfred's plot hook, though. The false accusation could be almost anything, and she wouldn't have a chance of defending herself. After all, if even the Ostrobogs are too civilized for her, she has to be really, really antisocial. Go to Comment
The Game Articles (Humor/ Editorial)
The Heart of the Internet can't be destroyed. Instead of a heart, it has a wadded-up ball of hate. The Internet hates us, and thus it created the Game for the sole purpose of making our poor brains hurt.
"Um... excuse me, sir... you seem to have a furry bloodsucking parasite on your face."
So the Wizen Clinger interferes with how often you can cast magic, a hindrance which may by itself outweigh the power boost. Plus, it makes you hobble around and cough blood, you have to walk into the jungle and tempt death to find it, and, lest we forget, it's a PARASITE CLINGING TO YOUR FACE. Sorry, but no.
I think this really needs:
(a) to be more clearly defined as to how it's more help than hindrance, or
(b) to be more clearly labeled as something only the truly insane would go looking for.
As is, it moves the dusty hamster wheel I have instead of a brain (and seems to have inspired Manfred as well), but it's unusable (to me) without a near-total overhaul. 3.5. Go to Comment
Ven Cred Articles (Character)
(Gaming - In General)
The "to be continued" part should include:
1. Who the mystery man is, and why he's handing out Vampirizers.
2. What Van is going to do with his new undead-ness. The love of his life is dead, he's as close to immortality as it's possible for a human to get... now what? Go to Comment
Non-mammalian sentient species might cultivate the whisperweed around their homes, villages, and lairs as a defense mechanism. Sure, it might annoy the nearby humans, but it's not like the humans will stay awake long enough to attack them.
If the non-mammalians are generally hostile, they might start planting small, hidden patches of the stuff next to roads, then rob and/or eat the victims. If they're sneaky about it, they might encroach on a village with stands of whisperweed, incapacitating the villagers or driving them away... Go to Comment
15. The Singing Purple Dragon
This emissary from the infernal planes travels from village to town, using his innate mind-controlling magic to gather the local children to him. Once he has gathered a crowd, he starts to lead them in singing, dancing, games, and lessons. This would be harmless (if annoying to adults), except that the dragon's songs, stories, and teachings are carefully crafted to lead the children into demonolatry and other foul practices.
Something about the Purple Dragon's mannerisms tempts adults to beat him mercilessly. More than one village has been inadvertently spared from a plague of demon-worship when the citizens chased the dragon out with bludgeons and torches...
(I'm sorry. I figured it was inevitable and decided to get it out of the way early.) Go to Comment
I'm sorry, but this doesn't work for me. Half of it is a brief overview of the historical assassins -- VERY brief, and used often enough to be a cliche. (Kuseru Satsujin's reply gave some more historical info.) The other half of it is directly (and admittedly) ripped off from a video game. It's borderline plagarism. 2/5.
I'm hesitant to suggest this, because it involves non-borderline, egregious and blatant plagarism, but it would be more useful from my perspective if you posted Altair. I haven't played this game, and (assuming that there's something unique or interesting about him, as opposed to another assassin cliche) he might make a passable NPC.
I did notice the reference to "The Assassination Bureau," possibly the most underrated assassin comedy movie of all time. Go to Comment
He might work as a short-term menace for low-level village heroes. You get bonus points for an alternative to the stereotype "following the heroes around with a measuring tape" undertaker. More bonus points for a villain who isn't diabolically intelligent.
There's something lacking in the execution, though, and I can't put my finger on it. 4/5 Go to Comment
The villages around the capital have a strange new disease cropping up. Spread by a fungus (much like ergot poisoning), it causes its victims to be very sensitive to sunlight. Hundreds of peasants are hiding from the sun, only coming out in the darkness to labor in the fields. Unfortunately, rumor makes their behavior sound more sinister and secretive than it really is.