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Organi
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Maggot's comment on 2009-12-01 09:38 PM
Do you have any suggestions as to how I could smooth it? I've resolved the spelling errors but I take it that are other mistakes that I've overlooked? Are there any punctuation or grammatical errors that currently mar the sub? Sorry if I'm asking a stupid question here, but I'd just like to know the type of problems that need to be resolved. Thanks for commenting by the way. Go to Comment
Organi
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Maggot's comment on 2009-12-02 08:18 AM
Point noted, AG. You're right, this sub was a bit lacking when it comes to suitably dramatic elements. I'll have to rectify that for my future subs. I'm afraid that it might have something to do with the fact that it's been barely a month since I stopped churning out academic essays. :) Go to Comment
Claws of the Emperor
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-25 11:54 PM
I don't have much to add except to say that the rich layers of detail given to the principal characters would certainly make this an interesting and enjoyable plot to employ. Well done. Go to Comment
The Brave People
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Maggot's comment on 2006-11-28 08:06 AM
One of my first ideas to be birthed on this site, I guess that for the Eshal, some major refurbishment would be in order. Points understood and noted, my fellow Strolenites. Go to Comment
The Brave People
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-20 01:25 AM
Update: The Brave People revamped for 2009. Go to Comment
The Brave People
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-21 08:59 AM
Good question. A glitch maybe? Go to Comment
The Brave People
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-23 01:58 AM
I should probably look into that. Does anyone know who I can see concerning a matter like this? Thanks Go to Comment
Despatching A Were-Swan
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-13 11:03 PM
I like it. A quirky little plot suitable greenhorn PCs expecting expecting the usual hack-and-slash routine. Nicely done, Go to Comment
Cinderpaws
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Maggot's comment on 2009-11-27 01:36 AM
AG is right. Your tales set in the Kingdom of Mus would be entertaining to most adults and it goes without saying that children would overwhelmingly find them enjoyable to read. Cinderpaws is a nice example of creating a well-told story based on an extremely simple theme. Go to Comment
Alexis the Vampiric Priest
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Maggot's comment on 2009-09-27 02:38 AM
I really like this character. Among all the vampires that have appeared on this site, Alexis is probably one of the more interesting ones that have been created. A religious zealot trapped in an accursed, undying shell and doomed to roam the world until his god decides to offer him slavation. Add the fact that he is a bona fide vampire slayer in his own right and you get a character who could interact in mnay interesting ways with a PC band of vampire slayers. Go to Comment
Ianna the Were-Mosquito
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Maggot's comment on 2009-09-24 08:34 AM
What sverigesso and Muro said. This is a unique sub and as far as were-villains go, Ianna is bound to be one of the more interesting characters that the PCs will meet. I'm sure that with her begining to abuse her gifts for her own selfish purposes, it would only be a matter of time before she becomes a bona fide villian. Oh and just for the heck of it, I'd love to pit her against one of Muro's were toads. The PCs might find it interesting to see a man sized toad attempt to swallow a dog sized mosquito. :) Go to Comment
Battleleaf Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
Maggot's comment on 2009-07-26 09:19 AM
Good, practical item with an elven touch. I like that part about having to meditate on the fluid grace of the plant, which strikes me as a typically elven thing. I'm guessing that this plant derived armour is mostly invulnerable to fire? Go to Comment
Staff of the Zythumancer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Maggot's comment on 2009-07-26 08:47 AM
It is quite a neat item. Something that a low to mid level adventuring party might find both fascinating and useful as long as it dosen't get them into scrapes. If you could conceal it well enough, you could even use this to publicly disgrace a powerful and influential enemy. Go to Comment
The Many
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
Maggot's comment on 2009-06-06 11:38 PM
A solid, somewhat twisted sub. I like the way you've turned a prized speces of aqutic pet into a ravening horror. I do feel though that you could expand on this sub even further. As now sentient beings, these tangs are going to have motivations that go beyond vengeance alone. You could even make them into a distinct Acquan race with some work. Go to Comment
The Great Demon of the Ocean
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
Maggot's comment on 2009-06-05 09:13 PM
This is a beautiful and cinematic piece of work that could be inserted effortlessly into any oceanic setting. I love what you've done in going beyond the teachings of the Jovian Church, to demonstrate Ma-O's deeper origins are a creature that is the very emodiment of the ocean's fearsome nature. Go to Comment
30 Farmers
NPCs  (Minor)   (Agricultural)
Maggot's comment on 2009-03-21 08:57 PM
Very nicely done. It's a pity that these weren't released prior to the commencement of the 30's quest. I would have certainly used Hate. Go to Comment
The Steeds of the Dead
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Maggot's comment on 2009-03-13 09:41 PM
We should all do undead, demonic or just plain weird versions of live-stock, ranging from horses to chickens. That would be fun. Go to Comment
Quickfoot Quagmire
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mercantile)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-05 03:04 AM
A rather amusing character and the details about his numerous disguises and his penchant for employing magical boots add some colour to what would otherwise be an undistingushed, small-time smuggler. Not bad at all. Go to Comment
Lance-Lieutenant Hailland Vairs
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-05 03:11 AM
As usual, I enjoy your droll style of narrative writing. Moreover, I also like the personal quirks that you've added to this guy, as well as the ironic suggestion that he was expelled from the Univarsity precisely becuase he was a more competant mage that his fellow students and teachers. The only complaint I have, is that while giving him a demonic background was a unqiue twist on the orignal entry, it should merited somewhat more attention. After all, it's not an every day occurance for some hell-spawned fiend to bear a part-human infant. All in all though, this is a rather enjoyable sub. Go to Comment
Order of the Iron-Shod Boot
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Area)
Maggot's comment on 2009-02-04 08:13 AM
A well executed sub with a back story that adds great depth and gritty realism to their story. This tale actually reminds me of the American Civil War, during which armies of driven and motivated Conferdarate volunteers repeatedly beat back much larger but mostly demoralised armies sent forth by the Union. Go to Comment
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