The specters that frequent the most destitute parts of a city, preying on the poor and defenseless,eh? I love them for the unique flavor they would add to any city slum, interesting parts of the local setting that the heroes don't have to slaughter. (Unless they actually care for the homeless, which is unlikely). I could even see them fitting well into the land-scape of a modern metropolis. Which city doesn't have it's ignored population of the homeless?
On the subject of spawning, do their victims who succumb to the infected wounds inflicted by the Shambler, stand an increased chance of becoming one themselves? Go to Comment
Creepy and disturbing.. I like the way this complements the rest of your Repahtian setting. The constant allusion to the obvious human origin of these abominations serves as a stark reminder of the depths to which humnaity is capable of sinking.
I've got a question. Do Repathians use prisoners-of-wars captured in wars against other cultures to replenish the breeding stock required to spawn more variants of their twisted live-stock? Go to Comment
I apologise for the lack of bold headings. It seems that whenever I try to highlight a few words in bold or italics, the entire text turns out that way as well. And as Muro observed, I do not own a reliable spell-checker either, meaning that my editing resources at this point are somewhat limited and rudimentary.
As for the odd name, it was meant to highlight the planet's seeming irrelevance. yes,xx is most commonly employed as a place-holder. This is an entity so unworthy of humanity's attention, that it has not even been given a real name.
I should probably have taken more time over this submission, but my schedule is so tight that I had less than a day to get the whole thing together. Again, my apologies for making this such a trying read. Go to Comment
A nice, solid submission. I do have a question though. Seeing as how they're nothing less than human souls trapped in the twisted shells that once served as their bodies, how do they prevent themselves from going insane? This being a horrific fate for most sentient beings, I'd worry for their emotional and mental stability. Go to Comment
The Pan-Kor Society/ Organizations (Ethnic/Cultural)
It was my intention to have simply enclosed the preceding creation myth in italics, not the entire text. Every time I try to enclose a certain portion with bold or italics tags, it's the whole thing that gets affected for some reason. Go to Comment
The concept is solid, but perhaps a little more description about the process that birth them would be great, as would the greater elaboration into the numerous beliefs that humans have formed about them. Go to Comment
Animals have parasites and diseases, so do plants, there are even bacteria that cann dissolve oil spills or plastic or what have you - why couldn't there be a disease living off magic - a magic item could be infected, losing power and speading the plague to other equipment it contacts, while a magic user would slowly lose his powers and contaminate all he works with or casts a spell at...