Creepy and disturbing.. I like the way this complements the rest of your Repahtian setting. The constant allusion to the obvious human origin of these abominations serves as a stark reminder of the depths to which humnaity is capable of sinking.
I've got a question. Do Repathians use prisoners-of-wars captured in wars against other cultures to replenish the breeding stock required to spawn more variants of their twisted live-stock? Go to Comment
I apologise for the lack of bold headings. It seems that whenever I try to highlight a few words in bold or italics, the entire text turns out that way as well. And as Muro observed, I do not own a reliable spell-checker either, meaning that my editing resources at this point are somewhat limited and rudimentary.
As for the odd name, it was meant to highlight the planet's seeming irrelevance. yes,xx is most commonly employed as a place-holder. This is an entity so unworthy of humanity's attention, that it has not even been given a real name.
I should probably have taken more time over this submission, but my schedule is so tight that I had less than a day to get the whole thing together. Again, my apologies for making this such a trying read. Go to Comment
A nice, solid submission. I do have a question though. Seeing as how they're nothing less than human souls trapped in the twisted shells that once served as their bodies, how do they prevent themselves from going insane? This being a horrific fate for most sentient beings, I'd worry for their emotional and mental stability. Go to Comment
The Pan-Kor Society/ Organizations (Ethnic/Cultural)
It was my intention to have simply enclosed the preceding creation myth in italics, not the entire text. Every time I try to enclose a certain portion with bold or italics tags, it's the whole thing that gets affected for some reason. Go to Comment
The concept is solid, but perhaps a little more description about the process that birth them would be great, as would the greater elaboration into the numerous beliefs that humans have formed about them. Go to Comment
Interesting. I like the way you've elevated he from being merely a goddess of revelry, to one who actually employs carousing as a way of weakening the fires of strife and hate. A seemingly minor deity of disreputable priests that play a very important role in keeping all-out war from breaking loose. Go to Comment