I apologise for the lack of bold headings. It seems that whenever I try to highlight a few words in bold or italics, the entire text turns out that way as well. And as Muro observed, I do not own a reliable spell-checker either, meaning that my editing resources at this point are somewhat limited and rudimentary.
As for the odd name, it was meant to highlight the planet's seeming irrelevance. yes,xx is most commonly employed as a place-holder. This is an entity so unworthy of humanity's attention, that it has not even been given a real name.
I should probably have taken more time over this submission, but my schedule is so tight that I had less than a day to get the whole thing together. Again, my apologies for making this such a trying read. Go to Comment
A nice, solid submission. I do have a question though. Seeing as how they're nothing less than human souls trapped in the twisted shells that once served as their bodies, how do they prevent themselves from going insane? This being a horrific fate for most sentient beings, I'd worry for their emotional and mental stability. Go to Comment
The Pan-Kor Society/ Organizations (Ethnic/Cultural)
It was my intention to have simply enclosed the preceding creation myth in italics, not the entire text. Every time I try to enclose a certain portion with bold or italics tags, it's the whole thing that gets affected for some reason. Go to Comment
The concept is solid, but perhaps a little more description about the process that birth them would be great, as would the greater elaboration into the numerous beliefs that humans have formed about them. Go to Comment
Interesting. I like the way you've elevated he from being merely a goddess of revelry, to one who actually employs carousing as a way of weakening the fires of strife and hate. A seemingly minor deity of disreputable priests that play a very important role in keeping all-out war from breaking loose. Go to Comment
Wulf, your guess probably strikes closest to the truth. The way I see it, the loa would be so enraged by the devastation that they would send the Ignusho to wreck bloody vengeance on the human inhabitants until the latter finally realised their folly and put an end to all efforts to drain the swamp. The ignusho are much feared, and any mass attacks by them would terrorize most swamp villages into immediate compliance with the will of the loa.
Thanks for the plaudits by the way,guys. They're much appreciated! This creature was actually inspired by the existence of Murometz's Red-Eyed Crow, as well as the other dangerous creatures that were brought to life by the Swamp scroll. Given these numerous menaces, I thought a guardian of the swamps would be appropriate, albeit one that was no less sinister than the other fearsome monsters it is supposed to keep at bay. Go to Comment