Nicely done. I really like the way you've added some Sumerian mythology to create a dramatic backdrop for this sub. I also enjoy the touch about the Dumazid infiltrating the dreams of a tomb robber. Out of curiosity, does it slay him in in his dreams? Go to Comment

This is quite a well-written sub. I especially like the way that Jade attained her ambition of becoming a ruler in her own right, albeit in a very sinister manner. Does she regret the destruction of her people's entire culture or did she always revile it as backward and sexist? Also, does she realize that she is just a puppet ruler who must answer to the male Captains of the Company? Go to Comment

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That's a good idea for a plot hook as AG said. I've decided to add that as a potential side plot so as to make this setting more gaming friendly. Go to Comment

That's a great suggestion, Muro, but do you know how exactly I'm supposed to go about doing it? I apologise if I'm asking a rather silly question, but formatting has never been my strong suit. Thanks Go to Comment

This is a pretty neat beastie. I would love to use a being like this, if only for visual impact alone. Would it be possible to reduce this glass golem to smithereens by hurling large boulders at it? If so,what happens to the spirit animating it? Go to Comment

Update: This is a new sub. Go to Comment

Do you have any suggestions as to how I could smooth it? I've resolved the spelling errors but I take it that are other mistakes that I've overlooked? Are there any punctuation or grammatical errors that currently mar the sub? Sorry if I'm asking a stupid question here, but I'd just like to know the type of problems that need to be resolved. Thanks for commenting by the way. Go to Comment

Point noted, AG. You're right, this sub was a bit lacking when it comes to suitably dramatic elements. I'll have to rectify that for my future subs. I'm afraid that it might have something to do with the fact that it's been barely a month since I stopped churning out academic essays. :) Go to Comment

I don't have much to add except to say that the rich layers of detail given to the principal characters would certainly make this an interesting and enjoyable plot to employ. Well done. Go to Comment

One of my first ideas to be birthed on this site, I guess that for the Eshal, some major refurbishment would be in order. Points understood and noted, my fellow Strolenites. Go to Comment

Update: The Brave People revamped for 2009. Go to Comment

Good question. A glitch maybe? Go to Comment

I should probably look into that. Does anyone know who I can see concerning a matter like this? Thanks Go to Comment

I like it. A quirky little plot suitable greenhorn PCs expecting expecting the usual hack-and-slash routine. Nicely done, Go to Comment

AG is right. Your tales set in the Kingdom of Mus would be entertaining to most adults and it goes without saying that children would overwhelmingly find them enjoyable to read. Cinderpaws is a nice example of creating a well-told story based on an extremely simple theme. Go to Comment

I really like this character. Among all the vampires that have appeared on this site, Alexis is probably one of the more interesting ones that have been created. A religious zealot trapped in an accursed, undying shell and doomed to roam the world until his god decides to offer him slavation. Add the fact that he is a bona fide vampire slayer in his own right and you get a character who could interact in mnay interesting ways with a PC band of vampire slayers. Go to Comment

What sverigesso and Muro said. This is a unique sub and as far as were-villains go, Ianna is bound to be one of the more interesting characters that the PCs will meet. I'm sure that with her begining to abuse her gifts for her own selfish purposes, it would only be a matter of time before she becomes a bona fide villian. Oh and just for the heck of it, I'd love to pit her against one of Muro's were toads. The PCs might find it interesting to see a man sized toad attempt to swallow a dog sized mosquito. :) Go to Comment

Good, practical item with an elven touch. I like that part about having to meditate on the fluid grace of the plant, which strikes me as a typically elven thing. I'm guessing that this plant derived armour is mostly invulnerable to fire? Go to Comment

It is quite a neat item. Something that a low to mid level adventuring party might find both fascinating and useful as long as it dosen't get them into scrapes. If you could conceal it well enough, you could even use this to publicly disgrace a powerful and influential enemy. Go to Comment