Update: Fixed the issue with the hawk being fed bread. Changed the valiant sight line to make it not as long and uncomfortable.
One or two lines are still a bit clumsy; obviously feel free to find better lines!
@Gossamer: Thanks for the comments! Any rhyme that has to back up and explain that by Cock one means a bird is not well crafted; you are definitely correct. "Hawk" rhymes pretty well with "rock," so everything is good. Go to Comment