Thanks for the feedback. Your comments highlight some issues I've had removing events and places from their game- and world-specific context to make them more widely useful. I need to think on that a bit.
The odd buildings were inspired by a piece of artwork. I tried to find a copy online to link to but could not. The building almost look like they were grown, not built.
Regarding context... You're right. This probably doesn't work in most settings. This was part of a story in Everway, in which there is a context for Dragons as... ancient beings of unimaginable power. Old Dragons were second only to the Gods in power, and in fact their legend is very similar to the stories of angels told today: First beings created by the Gods, perfect and powerful, favored of the Gods', The worlds men live in today were created by the Gods for the Dragons to play with. Not the Dragon's natural habitat, but a playground. Until one day they began to defy the will of the Gods'. There was a great war and all the Old Dragons were killed, or punished afterward. Modern dragons and many other monstrous beings are descended from those punished dragons, and much lesser in scope.
Into this setting I placed a legend, of an Old Dragon who was considered old by the other Dragons of its time. This Dragon spent all its time sleeping, and in fact slept through the entire war. When the Gods finally noticed it, they couldn't bring themselves to punish it. They set it down on a world and left it alone, to dream its dreams.
Everway is a setting of multiple words, and as the Dragon slept away the ages, its magic warped the worlds around it, changing how the gates worked, and even moving them so one set at its head and one near its tail. It also bolstered magic in the entire world. Men found their way there, marvels at the odd mountains, built a city, etc.
So, when the Dragon woke, it vanished, to go home. I have a sub in the works which further discusses this, too. I've been very lax about finishing my subs though.
As to the classification... yeah... I've waffled on that. Maybe this is more of an event after all. Go to Comment
I really like the "of course it works that way" attitude of the writing. It'd be a great encounter in a slightly tongue-in-cheek game, too. And... how did they get there? About half way into their journey, wouldn't they be "scaling the cliff" of the part of the world that's perpendicular to their normal environment? So many possibilities for strange fun. Go to Comment
There is a market for items and materials from the other side of the world. Since a pound of mass from the other side cancels a pound from our side, a skilled craftsman can build remarkable items combining wood, or stone, ingots of iron or steel, or other raw materials from both sides. Just imagine the possibilities, such as:
A sword or other weapon weighing nothing but still possessing the mass a proper weapon needs.
A sturdy pack which cancels the weight of items placed within.
A perfectly balanced arrow which fires further because gravity doesn't pull at it as strongly,
Heavy iron boots which make the wearer lighter on his feet. Go to Comment
I'll say right up front there WERE too many weird words for me, but that's a matter of taste and preference and doesn't detract from the quality of the sub.
This is a really good piece. For me, the best thing about it is the way it looks at Dwarves and looks at a major fundamental difference between them and humans. So many works fail in this respect, and you find yourself reading or watching short, grumpy, bearded humans instead of dwarves. They just don't get into the headspace of these alien beings. But works like this this help make dwarves more... real.
I'd love to see more pieces like this which help explore these differences.
On the technical side, it's very well written. Nicely detailed, well crafted and utterly worthy. Go to Comment
Novel? Not with this. These are scenes narrated from my game world, in which Sarah is a favorite NPC. She's been a cosmic power and a helpless hostage and several things in between. Lately she's been working as a Barista. :)
Thanks for the feedback. Maybe there's a better way to put the second escape to show my intent better. Hunter flees before she even learns what her new people will do. She never felt like she deserved this second chance and when she saw the soldiers come, she couldn't take the chance. So she fled, and she will continue to flee for as long as she lives unless something changes. Go to Comment
I'd planned to put up some NPC subs, but I've been working on a sub for Sarah for WAY too long. I'm thinking I might bag the NPC write-ups and instead introduce the characters through more fiction. Go to Comment