Hitler's suicide was not suicide. Was he killed because he was a mindless dupe to this same dark power? Or did he shoot himself to complete the ritual which ensure his own dark spirit would remain to infect the world for decades to come? Go to Comment
Spectre uses his ability to merge with shadow and travel between shadows to get the drop on criminals, who he beats senseless. You might think he's a hero, and sure, he's helped a bunch of people. But he also takes their stuff, and isn't shy about using excessive force.
The Fury was drugged and they thought she was dead. They disposed of her body by putting her in the buildings incinerator. That's where she woke up. On Fire. She's criminally insane, usually failing to distinguish between friend and foe, and burns so hot it should have consumes her long ago. She doesn't talk; only howls in rage and pain and hate. Go to Comment
I like this one. A power that seems pretty minor, but depending on how easily usable it is, it could be incredibly powerful in a fight. Switching places with someone can really mess them up, put them out of position, facing the wrong way, all sorts of trouble. Go to Comment
Aramax, I challenged this one. If you feel the need to make a comment preemptively defending the sub, that should tell you something. The potential here to offend outweighs any utility. This is something that could be pursued, but it needs to be handled to care and sensitivity, and I'm sorry, but that didn't happen here.
In addition, there's two other issues which were not challenge-worthy, but which I think deserve mention.
First, this isn't a 100 word sub; it's a stub. I haven't had a problem with your short format before this, but an idea touching on such a topic deserves more thought and consideration than trying to fit it in such a short word count.
Second, run this through spell check and grammar, or have someone proofread it. I typo like mad and I know it, so I don't expect perfection, But some effort to clean up a post would be nice. Go to Comment
Thanks. I appreciate the comment on my choice of tense. Fair warning, a LOT of my subs use this tense. I know it's not one a lot of people like to use, or read. I like it because it gives a sense of being more part of the scene. For me anyway.
I should maybe not admit this, but I tried to do a thing where all the past scenes were in past tense, and mixed my tenses horribly because I'm so used to writing in present tense. Need to fix it ASAP. :P Go to Comment
Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. I was feeling cheesy about splitting it up, but I realized this morning splitting it up also lets me get part of it done sooner, instead of holding back the entire piece. There's merit in that, I think. Go to Comment