Thanks. I appreciate the comment on my choice of tense. Fair warning, a LOT of my subs use this tense. I know it's not one a lot of people like to use, or read. I like it because it gives a sense of being more part of the scene. For me anyway.
I should maybe not admit this, but I tried to do a thing where all the past scenes were in past tense, and mixed my tenses horribly because I'm so used to writing in present tense. Need to fix it ASAP. :P Go to Comment
Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. I was feeling cheesy about splitting it up, but I realized this morning splitting it up also lets me get part of it done sooner, instead of holding back the entire piece. There's merit in that, I think. Go to Comment