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Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:08 AM
Thanks. I appreciate the comment on my choice of tense. Fair warning, a LOT of my subs use this tense. I know it's not one a lot of people like to use, or read. I like it because it gives a sense of being more part of the scene. For me anyway.

I should maybe not admit this, but I tried to do a thing where all the past scenes were in past tense, and mixed my tenses horribly because I'm so used to writing in present tense. Need to fix it ASAP. :P Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:09 AM
Heh. Where were you when others were talking me into splitting Legacy into parts. :P Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:38 AM
Update: Fixed some mixed tenses in the flashback scenes. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:39 AM
Don't worry. Part three is in editing now. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:48 AM
Also, sorry for the confusion. The intent was to begin vague. No-one has names and the scene is very... impressionistic. I bring the names in later, but perhaps that was an unwise choice.

The characters met thus far are Kevin Baxter, great grandson and namesake of Major Baxter; and Jenny Sanders. It's Kevin and Jenny in every scene in this part. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 11:54 AM
Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. I was feeling cheesy about splitting it up, but I realized this morning splitting it up also lets me get part of it done sooner, instead of holding back the entire piece. There's merit in that, I think. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-10 05:37 PM
Thank you. Of course you also have a little extra insight to Jenny. But you might know know Kevin. Go to Comment
Legacy, Part I - Goodbye
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-16 01:43 PM
Thank you for that. Go to Comment
H.M.A.A.
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-08 11:39 AM
I like the idea. I guess I can't complain that it seems short since it was a 100 word challenge. :P Go to Comment
30 Alien Races
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-29 03:57 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
30 Alien Races
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-29 04:00 PM
30 Alien Races
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-10-29 04:01 PM
So good, I guess I voted twice. Stupid, non-responsive button. Go to Comment
Burly Bill's Beautiful Beverages
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-05-02 06:57 PM
I like it. It's a bit on the short side, but it builds a nice picture in my head. I'd like to know more about Humanity First. Go to Comment
Longspeak's comment on 2014-05-02 01:03 PM
I also can't wait to see Evie figure out Jennifer's abilities. :P Go to Comment
New Personal Best
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-05-02 11:36 AM
To be honest, I have no idea what happened. I've idly considered what form Peyton's expression might have taken, but... it's not the story so I never gave it a lot of thought. :) Go to Comment
New Personal Best
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-05-06 03:18 PM
I like that perspective a lot. It wasn't what I was going for, but I think that could make an interesting, non-Delta Factor twist. Deus Ex: ESPN Edition.

:P Go to Comment
New Personal Best
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-05-22 11:24 AM
I was actually sorta shooting for the other way around. :P Sharing ideas through the tales. But as long as both came through... :D Go to Comment
Longspeak's comment on 2014-04-28 12:07 PM
Still depressing. Well done. But depressing.

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Longspeak's comment on 2014-04-24 11:49 AM
This one is all Sil, all heavy background. Depressing as hell. Go to Comment
Yarnuks
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Longspeak's comment on 2014-04-21 11:35 AM
Interesting. I'd have liked to hear more about these cities in the deep, and the society they've created, but I can easily see this appearing in a seagoing Everway adventure. Go to Comment
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