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Seeking Vengeance; Adventurers Needed
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-26 09:07 AM
I couldn't find the passage SE mentioned, so I'm guessing you edited it since then. I don't know about rushed, it has plenty of content at least. I especially liked the rumours, very flavourful. You seem to have covered a lot of things, though no scenario in which Jacob Latris dies, I noticed. Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-16 09:06 AM
Well they're rather large for a pest so even though they would normally be encountered in packs, I would say each should be treated as an individual. But then again, you could have tiny swarm clouds of proto-lice accompanying the adults whom just end up being as potent as mosquitoes. That's actually something I overlooked, the various stages of growth. Will be adding that in later. Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-17 11:52 AM
That is an awesome image, I need to work that in somehow. :D Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-17 11:59 AM
Good question! I suppose I figured it was enough just to make em squishy without any armor. While they're certainly ferocious, they aren't all that tough. But I didn't imagine them as delectable enough for any predator to wish to feed on them either... I suppose they are self-regulating, when a swarm grows large enough not to get enough prey to share, they start eating eachother. Besides even if spiders give birth to large broods, supposedly only a few of those survives. So their small brood probably falls prey to a lot of things, especially since the adults don't really register anything cold blooded, so ordinary fish could be eating their babies without them caring. Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-21 06:59 AM
Sure! They breathe air after all, a short excursion for some particularly hungry specimen could always be arranged. Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-24 08:39 AM
Edited. Clarified certain aspects and added suggestions. Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-27 06:06 AM
Considering that they're self-regulating that's a bit harsh, they're a step above sharks when encountered in groups but other than that they're not meant to be a threat to the enviroment, for one thing fish could actually benefit from a colony of drowner lice as they would keep some of their natural predators away.

Maybe you want to read this part again:

"from whence hatches swarms of tiny proto-arachnids, most of which will never see adulthood, due to predation from cold blooded fish, other hungry lice and many other natural dangers present underwater. For every brooding, the female lays about 800 eggs. About 2 out of every 100 survives this stage into adolescense, and fewer still onwards to adulthood." Go to Comment
Drowner Lice
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-16 07:06 AM


A rather short one, not really sure what else to put in it. Suggestions welcome.

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Oh Give Me Wings To Fly
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-17 02:24 PM
I've had at least two flying dreams that I can remember, but in none of them did I ever need wings. I would never allow them for my campaign, except possibly in potion form.
For this to work in a campaign, it would probably be wise to introduce everyone in the party to some form of wings at the same time. Maybe in a floating world setting, they could start out with some simple wings with limited charges/range or something.

Isn't eagle a weird choice for fastest wings? I dunno if eagles are all that fast, Hawks on the other hand.

When I reached wings of the tinker, I had to doublecheck to see if your sub wasn't listed as silly. Pontoons and crossbows and rocket boosters, oh my! That's why I hate traditional gnomes. I'm imagining a godawful version of batman standing on pontoons.


Typos

You got some bad parsing in your first quote box.

"It does not grant any particular affinity with dark powers - the origin of the aura is plain them." Go to Comment
The Esgol Dwarves
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-15 08:25 AM
It's a great sub, but these aren't dwarves. They could just as easily be replaced with human barbarians, there's nothing there to mark them as dwarves, though I liked the speckled beards.

But that part about lazy dwarfs being caught unprepared, that was darn well near blasphemy right there. :p But an interesting role-reversal though. Go to Comment
The Esgol Dwarves
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-16 05:09 AM


I wasn't referring to the lack of stereotypical dwarven traits, but rather the lack of values that I would dub as dwarven. It simply didn't feel dwarven to me. And I still stand by that if you take every instance of the word dwarf in this sub and replace it with the name of a barbarian tribe, noone would point to this and say, oh hey they seem like dwarfs. It's all fine and good to create your own version of something, but like I've said before, there comes a point where you simply have gone so far from the original that you might as well use something else instead. Instead of hammering in screws, use a screwdriver. Respectfully.



Boy, I really got you riled up huh. =)



PS. knowman, I've never played Dark Sun, so I wouldn't know.

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Gallinippers
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-14 02:28 PM
Best Oekaki I've read. Very professional layout, good content. Go to Comment
Spiritskin Drum
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-13 12:40 PM
I love that you came up with this during a session of RP and just wrote it down, I really envy you that ability. Really cool. Go to Comment
The Burning Cult
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Local)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-15 08:10 AM
Okay, starting with the bad. Sometimes the syntax in your sentences seem somewhat backwards or strange, and it can be distracting at times. For instance:

"The government saw instead of the improvements that the towns were causing but a threat to itself."

On the other hand, I see it as a bit synonymous with your personal style(perhaps it's even intentional), and I don't know if you're a native English speaker or not either. So I dunno, acquired taste maybe.

I liked the story with the bandit and the Carcer bit and how you combined the burning effigy with the inherent logic of your demons. So overall an interesting read. Go to Comment
Efeterthrop’s Pyrus Patch, Toll Gate
Locations  (TransWorld)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-11 12:16 PM
Let's see if I get this straight, it's basicly a big invisible pocket dimension in the desert that is smaller on the inside, which would allow for faster travel? And if you exit this pocket dimension in the wrong place you are ejected somewhere either just outside this bubble/sphere or somewhere far away from it? Go to Comment
Maw of the Daemons
Locations  (Other)   (Underground)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-11 12:08 PM
Everything has been said already, a nice fight setting that could be adapted anywhere. Go to Comment
Alicia 'Mad Alice' Napier
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-18 06:47 AM
I also see the rectangle. Anyways, the visuals described in her apartment was my favorite part, that and the plothooks. Go to Comment
What's Come to the Fair?
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (Regional)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-11 12:19 PM
And I would add some more flavour text as well, beef it up a bit. Go to Comment
The City of Efeterthorp
Locations  (City)   (Mountains)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-11 12:37 PM
I like this city, the original small details is what does it for me, the spire and the agriculture in the sewers, though I have a hard time understanding how a city mostly made out of slums can afford to sell so much merchandise. The sub itself could do with a proof-reading, and the plot hooks were somewhat strange, other than that, original and likeable. Go to Comment
The Children of Ssstakhana
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-09 11:32 AM
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