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Stuffy Dinner Party Guests
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-09-09 07:05 AM
While the length of the submission itself isn't nearly adequate, the idea is just wonderful, and the many contributions elevate it to a full score and HoH from me. Go to Comment
Oscar the Uplifted Octopus
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-11-22 02:27 PM
Short, but it's such a weird idea that it deserves an extra .5. I had to read it like 3 times before I got that he was an octopus though. Go to Comment
The Red Fortress
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-04-23 09:23 AM
Merely nitpicking, but you used it's when you should have used its. I also counted 101 (not counting the faulty ones), but meh. :p Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-29 05:12 AM
When you write family, even though you use a capital letter to derive them as a separate group. It is a bit confusing. First I wondered, why would his family drug him and then sentence him? Then I read it again and got it. You may want to name this Jixden family, to avoid confusion.

You also mention that when the group dug the hand up, it allready had unique properties. How? Was it blessed by a god or what?

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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-29 01:07 PM
Nope, haven't seen that show. Hmm, that's not really how I view true justice. But point taken. Of course that would require a world which allowed such artifacts to spontaneously form then. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-30 04:59 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Talari Eggs
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-03 02:45 PM
The names Shalari and Talari are a bit too similar without a plausible explanation why, as to feel lazy. And I was a bit disappointed to learn that the insects just look like honeybees.

And this: "Talari are annoying insect like birds, unusual in size being a flying insect." Are they insects or birds? Or some strange mix?

It's a nice provocative idea though, with some polish it could be really great. Go to Comment
Talari Eggs
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-04 10:46 AM
Okay, but an insect like bird and an insect the size of a bird, are two very different things. And the guy letting that freaky bug sit on his hand is insane. O_O Go to Comment
The Perils of Envy
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Mini-Campaign)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-04-29 11:11 AM
It needs to be divided into sections to make for an easier read, as it stands it's just a huge wall of text. Go to Comment
Corran's Cooking Set
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-03 02:12 PM
xD The lid of the chamberpot.... Ahrm, do they have a distinguishing look to them, or do they just look like normal utensils? And if so, how would one know that they've acquired them? Through cooking only? What material are they made of, can they be destroyed? Go to Comment
Wobble jelly
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 11:35 AM
If it has a somewhat predeterminable reaction to stumuli every time, calling it Chaos Gum might not be so appropriate. A name for something that expands and gets hard....Hmm. Nope, can't think of anything. :P Go to Comment
The Magic of Food
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-10-24 06:48 AM
Going into this, I wasn't sure on what to expect, but it managed to deliver in many different ways I couldn't have imagined. From the simple things like globs of liquid floating freely(that one was just awesome, I'll definately be using it), to conjuring up images of evil culinancers specializing in gutting people, magespice and the various inherent dinner shows a magical dinner could entail.

In my Campaign I'm adverse to replacing technology with magic, because in the end they might as well be interchangeable, some of the points you brought up highlighted this, like refridgerated food and what not, and I will remain cautious, but perhaps there is room for a little bit of culinancy there, even for me. Great stuff, full score and Hoh. Go to Comment
Larry the Sock Puppet
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-04-28 07:02 AM
This was a great submission, I had no problem reading it from start to finish. It kept my attention all the way through. The one thing I would object to though, is the feel what it feels kind of thing, that's a tad redundant since it's just a sock you wear on the hand. And if it works when you don't wear it, then you'd constantly feel trapped if you keep it in a box. I'm not seeing that mentioned, but like I said, if it only works when you wear it, then that abbility is redundant in my mind. Other than that, great! Go to Comment
30 Assassins
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-13 04:53 AM
I can't find a single thing wrong with this submission, nor can I think of any way to improve it, that and I know how hard it is to make a 30, so this is a full score from me. Also, I quite liked finding some optional plot hooks interjected. Go to Comment
The Secret Invitation
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Side-Quest)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-18 09:13 AM
I knew there was something wrong when I read, a lean dwarf. :P Really nice idea, I like the little red herring part inherit in this one as well. Go to Comment
Deaders - a different take on Zombies
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-04-17 07:58 AM
A beautifully executed submission. The only thing that is giving me pause is; by coating the undead in asphalt, you are removing all visual aspects that would identify them as undead. And so they might as well just be golems, why use dead bodies in the first place, unless golem technology is unavailable in this setting. Go to Comment
Tallyorans
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-09-09 07:24 AM


The little details really made this sub for me, like how the drug pushers take pride in their stuff, in a kind of Coca-cola-ish way. And how like the introduction of the car, the side effects are ignored for the greater gain. Plus, a viable explanation for humanoid reptilian mammaries, in fact I might use that for some of my dragonborn.

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Your money's no good here.
Plots  (Mystical)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 06:05 AM
Very useful. Here are some typos;

recipient of any form monetary compensation acquire

this curse herself and knows it’s affects firsthand

between her house and the PCs could benefit of them both.

While the Baroness lies with no way to see if the PCs learn Go to Comment
30 Merchants
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Mercantile)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-27 05:43 AM
Weird that this is back on the frontpage, but that reminds me I haven't voted on it yet.
Full score from me. Go to Comment
All Flesh Must Be Eaten
Society/ Organizations  (Natural)   (Area)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-11-21 10:44 AM
Nice. A poetic reseprentation of a simple religion. If I ever try GMing Redwall I'll use these. Go to Comment
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