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Wishmaster
Items  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-25 07:55 AM
Sounds familiar. Right away, this sounds like a potential game destroyer. Wishes were never meant for PCs, at least not granted ones. Unless it is used as an absent plot device, found only in the end game. Of course, if the villian(s) get their hands on it, they would have to be idiots not to eradicate the PCs with it. If it truly does grant wishes that is.

Typo:

Crafted each of the three first races. Go to Comment
Ife And Eath Governors Of Existence
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-23 06:34 AM
At first I thought it a bit cheap to name them thus. But your reasoning makes a lot of sense, after all, why do we call it life? Though I'm sure there's some answer in latin, or a language derived from the same, it is still an interesting question to pose. And the idea of Death tiring, would make for a very interesting(albeit chaotic) campaign setting, no doubt.
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Everlife Dungeon
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-23 06:20 AM
Oh, you're quite welcome! =D Go to Comment
Everlife Dungeon
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-22 07:30 AM

A very nice read, it would be interesting to know what created that spark in the first place.

Useful, quite original. No obvious spelling or grammar mistakes, reads easily. Nicely done, full score.

Here a few typos I found;

Apart form total annihilation of its physical form

Or the players are send to tend the garden of a mage

plant in the heart of the dungeon, nothing can stop it from dieing when it's life cycle comes to an end

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Friars Weed
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-20 08:24 AM
Shouldn't it be; "They're coming", rather than, they were coming?
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Friars Weed
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-20 11:12 AM
Keep it up and you get a zero. :P Go to Comment
Friars Weed
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-21 12:05 PM

Voted. Here are some more typos;


the barbaric races that trying to kill him.

(Besides the forgotten word, I would change, the barbaric races to just; barbarians).


result in the victim sitting down, lieing down


coating the tips of an archer's corps arrows.

(Not sure about this one, but I suppose you meant like a division of Archers? Meaning it should be, archer corp's).

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Helstone Treasures
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Villanous)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-19 09:04 AM
A spear that gives you syphilis... Crikey. Go to Comment
The Forgotten Brand
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-20 11:21 AM
It's a good hook. But right away I wonder, how exactly was the symbol "scratched" into the baby? O.o Sounds painful. But maybe that was intentional. If so, poor baby. Really want to bash some cultist heads now hmm. Go to Comment
Etherleaf
Items  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-20 11:17 AM
It doesn't give out a lot of detail. I know the format and all, but it feels like a real tease. Though I'm sure it can kickstart some ideas with what is there. We'll have to fill in the blanks simply. Go to Comment
Dwarven Sapper
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-15 12:05 PM
At first I was about to bang the big gong of herecy, after reading about beardless sneaky dwarves, but this makes a lot of sense. I don't think I would use it, my dwarfs only bicker with drow, but it did make me think. No obvious spelling errors, neatly divided. Nice one. But the city of Umberhulk...the Necromaster...Really? Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 07:45 AM
Each to his/her own. I find that when you have that many random bold words, it breaks up the text and makes it harder to read. Putting them at the end or beginning was intended as a way to balance the text. The human eye preferes it that way. Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-14 05:17 AM

Well, I think it does look kind of messy as it stands. You're off to a good start though by dividing them into categories like Shop signs, but maybe make the Headers for the categories bigger.

I would reset the count though, for each category. And you might want to skip the quote box, it breaks up the flow of the text a bit too much.

All of those linked submissions create a disorganized pattern as well, maybe wait until the end of the text, or the beginning and add the links there, so it looks more uniform?

Edit: Meant to say, until the end of the sentence.

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30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-15 05:10 AM
I didn't say skip the links altogether though, I meant you can put them at the beginning or the end of the sentence, that way it won't be bold text all over the place. For example:

4. Seer, Orphan A Seers’ Stick on a starry background- emblem for the Seers’ Association whose founder is a orphan raised up by a shepherd. The Seers’ Stick is an ornament hung on a chain and worn around a Seer’s hips.

or

4. A Seers’ Stick on a starry background- emblem for the Seers’ Association whose founder is a orphan raised up by a shepherd. The Seers’ Stick is an ornament hung on a chain and worn around a Seer’s hips. Seer, Orphan

When you have one or two links total, putting them inside the text isn't a problem, but when you have so many, it easily gets messy otherwise. In my opinion at least.

As for it being a 30. I would say that since you have two or more categories, it makes sense to reset the Count for each category, but as long as the total have a potential of one day reaching 30, I see no problem with it. There are plenty of 30s out there, that stopped at a whole lot less, or went above and beyond for that matter. And as for a unifying theme, they're all signs/emblems after all. Which is kind of the same thing, no? Go to Comment
Bareka
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-09-20 09:05 AM
What can I say, another great one. Full score. Go to Comment
The Eye Of Winthorp
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-12 05:50 AM
PCs will pick up anything they can carry, in my experience. :p Go to Comment
The Eye Of Winthorp
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-20 12:54 PM
This submission was saved from the void. Hopefully everything is still there. Go to Comment
Creeders Magic Dentures
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-11 09:02 AM
I thought it was going to be a real sub from you this time, but apparently you just forgot the 100 Word label again. Go to Comment
Creeders Magic Dentures
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-11 09:44 AM
Yeah, but all your others have a little comment below the heading so one can spot em from the front page. That's what I meant. Go to Comment
Creeders Magic Dentures
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-12 05:45 AM
Sooo, post graphic is you can no longer tell them apart from a normal sub on the front page? Ah, progress. :p But I won't nag, just sayin. Go to Comment
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