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Sigh Inc
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-02 09:15 AM
Maybe toss in a few Npcs related to Sigh Inc as well as their goals. Go to Comment
The Dragon And Its Nine Offsprings
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Specific)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-02 09:03 AM
There are a lot of names, but not a whole lot of information about them. Think I'll revisit this later.

Typos;

the Dragon and the Phoenix were said to have been died

Zhi Pao- Zhi Pao has the head of the Platpus
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The Dragon And Its Nine Offsprings
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Specific)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-03 09:11 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Crawling Giants
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-01 03:15 PM
This is a very strange sub... If one were to put these giants into a world, it would probably have to be at the cost of the more normal kind of giants to make some sense. Otherwise, why can some giants support their own weight and these cannot. Not really sure what they are made of, but they put me in mind of the Moai Statues somehow. Maybe that part about the earlobes. May I ask where your inspiration came from?

Here's a typo;

Unless he can get exhume his legs quickly Go to Comment
Specialized Fungus Cultures
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-01 07:17 AM
A nice use of your biology background. Bet most of these are plausible, except the beardbane. Go to Comment
Specialized Fungus Cultures
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-06-01 08:51 AM
...What? Those two statements contradict eachother, first you're saying I'm wrong, then you go on to tell me I'm right? I wasn't being ironic or anything, I was trying to pay you a compliment. I think you misunderstood either my intentions or the word plausible. O.o Go to Comment
Dreams-of-beauty Minotaur Bard
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 05:26 AM
Nice. I can just imagine her standing on that hill mooing. This started a whole bunch of questions in my mind, mostly related to milking... O.o But seriously though, not trying to ridicule your piece, it was creative and all, as my score reflects. Do you play 4E? Go to Comment
Dreams-of-beauty Minotaur Bard
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 06:17 AM
No, was thinking about D&D 4E. They've got minotaurs as a playable race. Go to Comment
Flickerwik
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 06:14 AM
I like it. Simple but with a lot of uses. Now, don't bite my head off. But I have a few things to say about grammar(even though it doesn't affect your score);

Terrified, the young man turned to run, but as more of those tendrils lashed themselves onto his body (I think you meant latched here).

During the daytime, it's powers are largely dampened and it's Shadow-Servant melts away

•While travelling the swamps in the daytime, one of the PC's

•The PC's have been asked to the Princes name-day celebration

As for all of these, think about "it's" as an abbreviation of "it is". So anywhere it is doesn't fit, use its instead. As for anything else, the apostrophe is used to indicate ownership. With that last sentence, the apostrophe in the PC's should be moved to the Princes instead. The Prince "owns" the name-day celebration, it is his celebration, but the PCs don't own have been asked. This is also true when used in names, e.g. Bob's car. It also holds true with names ending with an s, such as Dennis's car. Hope you take this as it is intended, in a friendly manner. Go to Comment
Flickerwik
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Swamp)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-31 10:44 AM
Alright, I wasn't aware of whether or not you knew, since you had repeated the mistake throughout and in another sub as well. I meant no disrespect. But honestly, people who choose to be offended, those are people I probably would have fallen out with sooner or later anyways. I've allready ranted about this in the chatbox, so I won't repeat it here. I'm generally pretty laid back, but when it comes to submissions, I feel like it is a good idea to try and help eachother out. Because some of the people on here, might become writers one day, and if they've got it down before they start on that novel, it will be so much easier for them. Of course not everyone on here wants to become writers, and if they disapprove, I will back off. But I'll tell you one thing, I hold myself to as high a standard as I do everyone else, and I'm not even a native English speaker. Go to Comment
Valus Longflower
NPCs  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-29 08:00 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
A Noble Rest
Locations  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 08:53 AM
I'm just going to assume that Carly, is a guy. With makeup. And if anyone mentions it, he will floor them. Go to Comment
Onyx Guardians
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 08:49 AM
Feels like I'm repeating myself, it's a good plot but I would have wanted to see more. Go to Comment
Venettos Soup Spider
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 05:33 AM
I really don't like the technomancer aspects some credit the Gnomes or Dwarves with, my dwarfs are a primitive lot. That being said though, there's nothing wrong with this submission. I can't seem to dislike anything dwarven for very long. And a nice tie in with those other submissions as well. Go to Comment
Venettos Soup Spider
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-28 08:08 AM
Say what??? No dwarves? -0.5. :P Hmm, must have just been me assuming then. It had the dwarven feel to it, y'know. Go to Comment
The Helmet Of BEES!
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-25 08:28 AM
I was a bit uncertain whether or not this fell under Magical, since it technically has no innate magic, but since it repels it, I figured what the hey. Go to Comment
The Helmet Of BEES!
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-27 02:40 PM
Thank you. I think I'll add those first things you suggested, when I find the time. The penalty for weight however, I'll leave up to the realistic DMs. After all, there are plenty of adventurers swinging around huge bastard swords on an everyday basis. Otherwise it should be restricted to flavour text. "You take off the cumbersome helmet and feel like the world has been lifted from your shoulders, your hair is dripping with sweat and your neck is aching." That kind of thing.

The honey and splitting the swarm up parts seems rather complicated though. I wouldn't want to keep track of such things, I don't know if a lot of others would. But naturally that could also be used for flavour, by all means.

And no, I'm not applying. Not yet anyways. :) Go to Comment
Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-27 05:38 AM
I didn't know that that excercise was called that. But I think it's pretty common knowledge that all rumours work this way. So this very short submission didn't really offer much, for me at least. In order to avoid being a total party pooper, I will abstain my vote on this one, especially since I don't know the voting practices regarding these "scrolls". Go to Comment
Chinese Whispers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-27 07:47 AM
Ah, in that case I'll revisit this one day, when it has gotten more content then. Go to Comment
Planted Madness
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-05-26 11:49 AM
1) " as a kind of pledge to a woman he once knew." This part seems a bit strange. He pledged to her that he would become immortal? That he would become a tree? Why?

2) And why did the villagers see him as a demon if he could hardly move?

3) Isn't the tree of decay something that eats all life all around it? Then what has that got to do with the everlife dungeon coming into existence? I've read it several times by now, but I feel I need it clarified. Go to Comment
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