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The Books of the Holders
Locations  (Establishment)   (Other)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-09 08:02 AM
The books, I would never use, simply because they would require so much more work on my part. The library though, I liked. But I would also want to see more content before I vote, you're off to a good start though. Go to Comment
Raven Feather Wand
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-07 07:12 AM
While a generic idea, the devil's in the details. At first I thought it was going to be terribly unbalanced, but you seem to have got that covered, even though not all systems use Hit Dice, in fact maybe you nerfed it a bit too much with that last section. If say a party of 5 found the wand, would they get 5 kills then, or just the one? Go to Comment
30 Items You Need
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Non-Magical)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-06 08:42 AM
I agree that the descriptions added a lot. You seem to do most of your work through edits. Still, I wonder if these hadn't been better if you had done more comedy style objects like the 11' pole. Some of these can be found in any player's guide, so they feel kind of done.

Also isn't a Dutch oven that thing that guys do where they fart and push their partner under the covers? :P Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-04 07:21 AM
"The hammer holds an enchantment that can be used once per battle, or every five minutes or so." So maybe if it's a long hallway. =) Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-05 04:04 AM
It could be used in good effect against creatures with damage reduction for one thing. But I like the idea of the damage building up. It's just a question of how that would work. For 4E, I would say a 5 damage per tier increment per round would be plenty, but it would need to be a bit more generic than that since not all systems use turn based combat. I'll mull it over, see what I'll do, suggestions are welcome.

The idea came first, I changed some of the description based on the image I found. Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-15 05:40 AM
Thanks! I'm mixing a bit of Polish and Russian in there, I feel that it makes it sound a bit grittier than the overdone Scottish bit. Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-19 06:36 AM
Geez, still you guys want more power? You do have a point there though, about that artifacts can get away with a little more...well oomph. Those are some pretty good ideas, I think I'll use most, if not all of em. Thank you for your input. Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-09-21 03:30 PM
What do you mean fluff? You've got your history and physical description, what else do you want to see? Go to Comment
The Crossroads
Locations  (Area)   (Any)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-27 08:12 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Dragon Mines
Locations  (Area)   (Mountains)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-27 08:09 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Vartanadel Royalty and Nobles
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Country/ State)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-27 08:04 AM
Drow-like and chaotic. There's an added bonus in that any history records are expected to be flawed, so if you make a mistake, you can just play it off.

This part though;

Lorintand’s Guarshan posed no threat, they were above the petty disputes of the Noble Houses so their allegiance and honor remained intact as long as they served faithfully till the end. This was the end of the Noble House Lorintand and their oath would move to the best offer.

I don't get it, how are they supposed to serve faithfully till the end if they don't lift a finger to protect her? Serve the city then? Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-22 11:17 AM
Nice. Some more background info and motives for Lazarus was the one thing I felt missing. Go to Comment
30 More Gladiators
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-20 08:33 AM
What happened to the original 30? I feel like I've seen at least number 1 before, but if these are all truly different from the first 30, then that is pretty gosh durn impressive. Full score. Go to Comment
The Forgotten Cemetery
Locations  (Area)   (Plains)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-15 01:16 PM
I like the imagery of this one. Swords as tombstones are awesome, even though they would rust. I thought about the caretaker, there ought to be at least two alive at all times, in case someone just ups and kills the present one. The recipe for Coca-Cola is only known by two people for instance.

There's a few good pictures that would go great with it, like this one; http://clockworkrealm.files.wordpress.com/2010/11/konachan-com-67488-fate_stay_night-unlimited_blade_works.jpg Go to Comment
City Image - Triastu
Locations  (City)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-12 01:58 PM
This really got me thinking, specifically about the holy trinity of christianity. No matter how fanatic they have been in the past and present, they've never once (to my knowledge) built a triangular city. And it doesn't take much thought to understand why, I'm no math-wiz but I calculate that approximately 50% of the space is lost in a triangular walled city as opposed to a square one. Not to mention, that if you were to expand the walls as the city grows, you would have a much harder time doing so in a triangular city.

Don't get me wrong, I like the novelty of the idea, but it's not very logical and speaks volumes about the level of fanaticism and stupidity needed for anyone to build it.

This was a hard one to vote on, while the sheer length of it deserves recognition, the content feels a bit bland. I'm missing some really outlandish locations to go with the novelty of the city.

Since you don't seem to appreciate when I correct typos, I will refrain from doing so. But since you misspelled alleys as allies twice, I felt inclined to at least point it out. Go to Comment
City Image - Triastu
Locations  (City)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-12 02:46 PM
Well you wouldn't necessarily run into the same issues with a castle as with a city. Sometimes castles are built on very narrow hills and what not, in order to make them better defended, so not all castles have the room to expand, or for that matter, the room to build in a more traditional shape in the first place. Go to Comment
City Image - Triastu
Locations  (City)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-13 01:17 PM
Even in a world of magic or hyper advanced technology, a triangle is still a triangle. That's not outside logic, that is an essential truth.

There's nothing wrong with the idea, it would just suggest that the followers of Trianarism are fanatical beyond anything we've seen on Earth (which isn't saying a little). But I would argue that secular interests (expansion being one) normally comes first, usually to the benefit of the religion, after all, a bigger city means more pilgrims, more wealth, more impressive statues and what have you.

And there are ways to work around this fanaticism, as I would presume not everyone living there are so deeply religious, but more practical at heart. For instance the city could expand beyond the initial city walls, or even build secondary city walls. All this without having to suspend belief. That's just my preference, I enjoy logic, it makes things so much easier. Go to Comment
ApoCalypso Entertainment Group
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-12 02:22 PM
I know that apocalyptic wasteland scenarios generally exist to show everyone how good life is right now, but I gotta say, I for one am looking forward to a time without censorship and a return to gladiatorial death battles. Though I doubt It will happen during any of our lifetimes.

Also, Marcellus Washington. Wink, wink. Go to Comment
ApoCalypso Entertainment Group
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-12 02:42 PM
Uh, no I just thought you made a Pulp Fiction reference. Guess not. :P Marcellus isn't exactly a usual name. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Sentient)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-07-10 05:08 AM

Very nice, I especially liked the raven book and this part; "Ahlgru made a great hullabaloo!" That made me smile. When you made your library sub I was hoping you would make the books as well.

As for typos, I really shouldn't even bother in a text that contains words like "dids't". :P
But there were two that broke the pace of the text;

whoever you touch fall alseep instantly (depending on saving rolls).

If you speak this to the doorman he will let you though, but if you try to force or trick your way in

I assume the one in the flavour poem was intentional.

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