This is very good, you should be getting paid for this. I love the teaser text, drew me right in. A few things though;
1) Spell Check etc
"more fluff here" (remnant or reminder?)
"experience life through observation. It was initially thought that the machine mines would use the electronic systems of the structures"
"The machine has decided to make them it's next target, but rather than showing itself, it sends more proxies against them"
"At first everyone was pleased, the autistic and the non-functional members of society were able to become healthy and useful members again."
If this was written from a machine's point of view, then alright I guess. But it does come across as quite offensive and cynical.
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The 3 Laws of Robotics were pretty much made obsolete not long after they were created, by Asimov himself. As he explored the philosophical quanderies in his books and came to the conclusion that the 3 laws had loopholes and just didn't cut it. While most people still believe in them, people involved with robotics or robots themselves should be aware of this, so to even implement them in the first place would be like building a boat with a hole in the bottom and hoping it won't sink. Maybe just add the word revised to it, keeping it vague.