I like these a lot. I especially like the line "and left Xai-Leng feeling wiser than before". I'd heard a couple them before, which is unfortunate. I liked the prostitute on the most, because it confuses it, but still makes a sort of half-sense. It bears more analysis than the others for that reason. Go to Comment
I like that there is so much culture in this article. There's tons, really. It's very well developed. Just the same, this reads like more of a description of a savage culture, or like Marco Polo's descriptions of the Mongols or something. It doesn't really feel "orcish", since it is so plausible for a human culture.
It was quite a surprise to find they are much cleaner than we would suspect. Go to Comment
Axlerowes: You're right! I forgot to mention how awesome the narrator was. The whole article is very good, and very usable.
Scras: I'm not sure how to make 'em more orcish (i.e. non-human). I just think that orcs should be more than strong humans who fight a lot, and dwarves should be more than short humans who live underground. But you are exactly right about not making them too different. If they're too weird, they stop looking like orcs.
You could make them orcish through biology: maybe the women are just as strong as the men. So despite being crude and aggressive (and stereotypically just being big bags of bad traits) , orcs actually have a strength-based egalitarian society that isn't sexist. Maybe the only non-sexist society in the world. (Picture a man telling his wife: "If you don't want to do the dishes, why don't you go join the orcs?"). Or mention that orcish muscles have extra attachments, or orcish muscles are extremely dense (and orcs would sink like rocks if they weren't such strong swimmers). Or that certain (old?) orcs suffer from a unique sort of dementia that makes them constantly angry--and these orcs are honored rather than reviled. Maybe anger is held to be the greatest virtue, and orcs make shows of how angry they are when something displeases them.
Or make it cultural and based on something that humans would/could never do. Maybe the chieftain is only chieftain as long as he can push aside the huge boulder blocking the ancestral clanhall. Or maybe their favorite sport is a horserace where the racer has to carry the horse the last mile (that would actually be awesome!) Go to Comment
Focused, well-described idea. I can tell it's a good idea because I can think of areas the sub can expand into. Are there other quality banks that compete with Mammon? What does the church do with its wealth? Go to Comment
I like Utopia, especially since it seems like a mixed bag. Some parts sound nice, some sound bad, and some just sound communist. However, pretty much everything in this article is lifted straight out of Wikipedia. It'd be nice to see a section about how to apply it to a DnD game (which Moonhunter put as a comment), or a few ruminations on utopias in general. Go to Comment
I think we all need to take a moment to picture what it would be like to be chased down and smashed by a poop elemental.
Oh, the humanity!
The cult should make the sewer their "thing" (instead of just their hideout). The stinkier you are, you higher your prestige. The cantrip should just mute it for a few hours, after which, the stench is released from its pent-up containment. Might even release upon the cultist's death, too.
I also imagine the different groups trying to use water flow as a weapon. The guards flood certain tunnels to drown the cultists in waste. But the cultists block the exit tunnel and soon poopamentals are shooting up the drains.
You know, if you extrapolate this cult of scatology thing out to its inevitable conclusion, you're going to have a very memorable, very disgusting dungeon crawl. Throw in a few giant albino goldfish, a few former tapeworms, and a really disgusting whirlpool trap and the party won't even notice when you throw a Weezing (the pokemon) at them. Good luck selling stuff in town when you smell worse than a poopamental or a cultist.
Guard: We've identified the cult they belonged to, sir.
Captain: Well, who is it? Vecna? Jubilex?
Guard: Uh, no, sir. It's the poop guys again.
Captain: Oh gods DAMMIT.
Guard: Should I check the tavern for "adventurers", sir?
Captain: On the double. I'm sure not going back down there again. Go to Comment
I like it! It's a way to inject videogame mechanics into DnD, which could be really fun if it was played straight. If you wanted to go for broke, you could make the front of the door a high score board (Conan got 22,000 XP in ONE run?) and give the players extra lives. And you could reskin sections of it to different themes (Greek, Aztec, Necropolis, Prehistoric).
Just the same, this is just an application of video game logic to a tabletop game, which DMs usually strive to avoid. Taking the opposite approach is kinda cool. Go to Comment
"Are you sure?" asked the angel. "The changes will be permanent."
"I swear it!" gasped the dying paladin. A steady trickle of blood oozed from beneath his armor, and his voice was beginning to fail. "Please, divine one, give me the strength to strike down the demon!"
"As you wish," said the angel, and the paladin was engulfed in divine fire. It purged him, burning the poison from his blood, closing his wounds, and searing his torn flesh together. When the paladin stood up, a moment later, his charred face was grim. The fires of heaven burned in his chest, and he was filled with an unearthly vitality. But he was disfigured. His skin was charred and black. He would never again be pleasing to look upon.
"Thank you," said the paladin, and the angel watched him wordlessly strap on his armor and walk from the temple. Go to Comment
There's no reason this thing has to be evil. It does what it's summoned to do, nothing more and nothing less. It's just our Saturday morning cartoon morality. We see spider, gore, muttering, and we think that this thing must be evil. Probably a tool of the spider cult.
Actually, reading this reminded me of real surgery. You should see the sort of stuff that they do for hand surgery. Not for the faint of heart.
And I suppose there's this conceit that the powers of heaven are freely given out to those who are worthy, while the powers of hell are earned by sacrificing something. I agree with Scras with that one. Unfortunately, this is also one of the reasons why hell is so much more interesting than heaven. Go to Comment
This is pretty great. You did a great job with description and storytelling. The idea of a place where gods go to be humble is very novel. Could use a little formatting. I like Azar's tree, too. Go to Comment
hey im new to this site but was here years ago w/ another name. anyways dont remember so im newbie by default.
Firstly, I am a sci-fi reader and I hope to meet success with my writing.
My favorite series of books are Larry Nivens RINGWORLD tetralogy (Ringworld, RingWorld Engineers, The RingWorld Throne, and RingWorlds Children)
For those that havnt read the ring world is the greatest artificial structere ever discovered.
A ring, its circumference equal to earths orbit, it is built around a sol-like star. Shadow squares halfway betwwn the ring and the sun provide 15 hours of night in a thirty hour day. 70 days equals one falan (one full rotation of ring world. The inner surface-the one exposed to the sun, is terraformed and is one millionkmwide cntrifugal force provides gravity, and rim walls 1000km high keep the atmosphere in. Population of RNH(ringworld native hominids)
estimated in the trillions.
The origins of who built it and why are too sticky to get into. But the ringworld , millions of years ago, was populated bt A race called Pak Protectors. Protectors are ancestors of all homo sapiens. they populated ringworld with homo erectus, but left no predators in the ecology. hence, hominids evolved into every ecological niche. (Vampires, Carrion Eaters, Giant Herbivores, Small Carnivores, some built great technologies and went interstellar. Oh, and ringworld is 300 million times the surface area of earth. post if youre interested, Ill elabortae on native species and alien vistors