The problem with this way of splitting things is that one is left with the feel of detachment from something that will be happening soon at the same place, and reactions of the people and story of the place are given before it happens. It's a sense of discontinuity. I guess Valadaar liked the second part more, because it described the intended plot and its resolution. Yes, it was building on the information here, but in general you could go without this information, instead improvising the reactions and characters based on what you got from the plot description. It is good to have, but it's just a complement to the plot, not a general (truly general) description of the place.
All that said, I like it and will proceed to read the second part now :). Go to Comment
Again, a lot of work is put in all this, but I have reservations of my own and will explain the lower mark. I like reading (and writing) stories. This is an excerpt from a RP adventure book, a perfect DM complement, but leaving nothing for the DMs imagination. Descriptions and scenes are preset, and though nothing is mandatory (the Golden Rule of RP), it leaves me with a feeling for a manual that tells me how to tell a story. To be honest, I liked the first part more, as it contained more detailed descriptions of people and the place where everything takes place.
Again, the feeling of detachment is here, letting me know that there are also huge other things happening elsewhere in the world, to which I have no access at the moment. Which, mostly as a result of my own mindset, bugs me. I cannot get a feel for the completeness of the adventure, it's just a drop in the ocean, inseparable form the rest. Go to Comment
The profile and journal have the most potential as story drivers, both for a group and for the cult. This whole cult idea could turn into a setting if there are constant occurrences that keep the party wondering if the Cult is actually right about the Game. Or a campaign at least. Go to Comment
It looks like the text will give a better impression if it wasn't broken up in piece. Then it could be a whole mythical story and not several pieces that feel unfinished taken away from the whole. It can be made into an old script describing the race of the giants from the perspective of the writer, and then it will not sound so unfinished. Go to Comment
Only changes the colour. The hair (or beard) may seem less greasy as it eats the fat but if you don't care about that enough you'll never know you have it until you look in a mirror. Or someone comments on your bright purple hairdo of course... Go to Comment
Actually no. If I thought about plausibility when creating an interesting life form I'd get nowhere. Also, if we could conjure plausible biological species on a whim, we'd be gods by now.
The truth is that Nature is so diverse that it is actually possible to encounter something like that in the real world. My biology knowledge on the other hand simply drives my interest in interesting living things, and makes it possible for me to speculate IF they would even be possible, or HOW. Go to Comment
First, I took it as a compliment, do not worry about that! :)
Second, I said I could speculate about the plausibility of a living thing AFTER (and only AFTER) I have thought it up. Thinking about it beforehand would make the creation very difficult or impossible.
Finally, I said that I could speculate, but this does not mean that the thing IS actually plausible. All I meant is that it MIGHT be (due to the diversity in Nature).
Thanks. I was wondering if the authors of the Minotaur sub will feel that the environment was presented properly, so one less thing to worry about :) And I don't see anything simplistic, but maybe that's a hole in my command of the English language... Go to Comment
I'm happy to spark your interest in our guild! I tried to make the name along the lines of names from the original sub, but it can be changed to fit in a world where minotaurs are named differently. Go to Comment
Interesting description of a being that eats demons. I wonder if the demons are as easy to catch as humans, or if their souls are comparable in nutrition value. Can the FlickerWikk starve, and possibly lose its power? Go to Comment
How about a dragon how cheerfully rules over a kingdom; his people all know him for what he is, and dragons are looked upon as wise and benevolent creatures. Dragonslayers from other kingdoms coming to free it from 'tyranny' are likely to get beaten to death by peasants with cast iron skillets.