It's the classic berserking sword; a thumbs up for the back-story.
But really, the idea of a sword fuelling your wrath is so old. If it offered you the choice, again and again, and by making the wrong choice so many times, you'd succumb to wrath... that would be cool.
A welcome refreshment in a genre ripe with emo highschoolers and mopey goth poets.
Write up is good and to the point, my sole objection is that it's more of a template than a full writeup. I'd welcome giving more character to the once characterless Jane.
Sadly, the maddest and most self-assured of egomaniacal villains are exceedingly difficult to judge by this artifact. But then, perhaps nothing else can stop a certain nefarious antagonist except the black sword of the crown?
I can think of something to add - a note of how the willpower "test" is affected by circumstances: so may the life-giving judgment be more difficult as time passes from the death of the one to be restored. The more powerful the life-force of a target, the more difficult it is to snuff out with the black flame. Etc.
Less enthusiastic than Cheka, I must criticize - there are several gods that are just... templates. The Crafter, the Wren musician, barbarian river and storm god. What's new in those? What about the goddess that's simply a non-descript mother to other gods? Does she deserve her own 30-entry?
Also, consider always when making a pantheon: will it cover all the divine roles said culture needs to fill? If not, something's missing.
On the bright side, some like the Unnamed God who fights himself and all others too is brilliant. Caylin the Moon is also a beautiful idea. Make more on the level of those!
A good item, especially considering the expansion potential. Personally, I'd add very a intricate steampunky control panel to the back of the amulet; it's an experimental item, and thus requires lots of professional input - perhaps for activating anything besides the basic four forms?
Having had the honor of reading numerous of Cheka's 30s, I think there is also another kind of duplication - you repeat themes common in many of your previous submission.
I echo Dragonlordmax - some of these are really nifty, but some are redundant, and many quite mundane - to the point where they hide the good ones scattered amongst them. Really, it does not require inspiration from a Strolen's post to think of a female vigilante taking down sex offenders.
Go, and put a twist on them, I say. Make them special. Make the feminist an ex-guy, an avatar made of aggregated female essence, a shapeshifter who is learning what it's like to be female, a reformed demon or whatevs.
Also, the racist guy. You have a stereotyped evil evil racist in so many posts, it's quite boring.
Anyways. Give them one or two sentences of explanation. Give them spice. Kick out the bouncer and other filler characters.
Thumbs up for the Thinner, the Mage and Billy, though :) Also, I'd say something good about the servant of Mathom, but I'm too lazy.
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Shamelessly promoting my stuff :) Will add content, too.
I love the concept of a fractured North America as the playground for empires; do you have miore about that setting?
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Also, what axlerowes said - what drives this man beside a Rincewind-esque survival instinct? (now that I think of it, they do have a fair share of common traits)
Okay, do I understand this correctly? The corpse bud animates dead people and makes them... hump other dead people?
If it's so, it's too much for me, and you should put up a warning in the post header. This thing is on the front page, and Strolen's is not marked as 'mature'.
Ok, most of them are annoying as hell, but would be excellent for a silly campaign :)
I like the Conservationist most: "You want me to strike a Half-Fiend Feral Elder Manticore? Do you have any idea how rare they are? Let's study it instead! Hey, Manticore, can we study your mating habits?"
The Racist and the Sexist could use an edit, though.
Namely, imagine, even non-white people can be racist (a novel thought!) - so its ideology should be based on the creator's. Also the whole "white people are racist" issue is so overdone to the point where one has to triple check what he's saying just to avoid being politically incorrect, to the point where almost anything can be turned into a race argument. Hence, this needs a little more thought.
Also, a sexist is not necessarily violent against women, so it rather should try to humiliate, disarm and spank female opponents rather than actually hurting them. Of course, lewd comments on female party members and derisive on any females outside a female role should be very frequent. For a spin: it may even be exceedingly gallant, courteous and proper around females who accept the traditional female role.