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Anaszti, Hands of the Blood God
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 03:10 AM


I'd like to know two things:



a) as Anaszt's descent into vampirism would make a fascinating tale for heroes to discover, how exactly did the switch from peacemaker to bloodsucker come about? (We all know how a poor description of a hero's fall can ruin the whole experience, see Star Wars: Revenge of the Sith)



b) what sets the Anaszti apart from normal vampires, beside the pyramid scheme of blood?


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Anaszti, Hands of the Blood God
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 09:43 AM
Not too original then, no?
(Also, you managed to strip them of all their vulnerabilities in the process - no mystical vulnerability, no folk remedy, and no death from the sun... I can imagine munchkins everywhere creaming their pants).

I don't mean to sound hostile, but this needs work. Go to Comment
Anaszti, Hands of the Blood God
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 07:31 PM
I gave it some more thought.

You know, the concept of the vampire was very different across cultures, times and legends. Why, I read about a kind of vampire that comes into being when a woman's head detaches and floats around with the organs and spine dangling behind, sucking blood of course. People put thorny branches into the windows so that vampires would get caught by their guts in them, and not be able to enter.
That's an actual legend, from planet Earth.

You have vampires that are little more than corpses, driven by eternal hunger. You have baroque socialites and weeping emo metrosexuals.

The sole common theme is blood. So. We Strolenites pride ourselves on being original. Proceed accordingly. Go to Comment
Meles the Tenacious
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Forest/ Jungle)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 09:38 AM
Yum, bugs! Go to Comment
Meles the Tenacious
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Forest/ Jungle)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-15 08:12 AM
You forgot to actually rate it ;) Go to Comment
Meles the Tenacious
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Forest/ Jungle)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-17 01:54 AM
Avatar of Pain
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-09 11:04 AM


Infiltraitor - what a combination of infiltrator and traitor :)



Am I not funny?



Anyways, I'd like more fluff here, even in Warhamster you get more fluff for units! Cpt. Penguin would have them be the vengeful spawn of the Murdered Child, who lies shackled and undead in the rotting carcass of its god-mother, sending out these abominations born of its flesh to hunt the rapist of its parent! Rrrrraaaaagh!



It needs more Rrraaaagh! I'll hold my vote until then.


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Avatar of Pain
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-15 04:47 AM
And what about the Rrraaagh! ? Go to Comment
Of Summons
Systems  (Mystical)   (Specific)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-08 06:28 AM


I like the basic premise, but the execution is ... incomplete. Especially from an RPG perspective.



Personally, I am all for named summons that a caster must actually gain through deeds, and not by learning Summon Fiendish Dire Weasel.



 


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Of Summons
Systems  (Mystical)   (Specific)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-08 06:28 AM
Of Summons
Systems  (Mystical)   (Specific)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-08 06:29 AM
Of Summons
Systems  (Mystical)   (Specific)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-08 06:30 AM
Le vote. Go to Comment
Wrathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 03:20 AM


It's the classic berserking sword; a thumbs up for the back-story.



But really, the idea of a sword fuelling your wrath is so old. If it offered you the choice, again and again, and by making the wrong choice so many times, you'd succumb to wrath... that would be cool.


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Chirotar
NPCs  (Major)   (Travelers)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-10 03:30 AM


Two thumbs up! As DD and D said - I have but a vote to add. Coupled with DD's input: very solid!


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Just Jane
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-05 03:32 PM


A welcome refreshment in a genre ripe with emo highschoolers and mopey goth poets.



Write up is good and to the point, my sole objection is that it's more of a template than a full writeup. I'd welcome giving more character to the once characterless Jane.


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The Crown of Seven Swords
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-12-01 11:24 AM


Sadly, the maddest and most self-assured of egomaniacal villains are exceedingly difficult to judge by this artifact. But then, perhaps nothing else can stop a certain nefarious antagonist except the black sword of the crown?



I can think of something to add - a note of how the willpower "test" is affected by circumstances: so may the life-giving judgment be more difficult as time passes from the death of the one to be restored. The more powerful the life-force of a target, the more difficult it is to snuff out with the black flame. Etc.


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30 Gods of Tirexia
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-11-29 05:17 PM


Less enthusiastic than Cheka, I must criticize - there are several gods that are just... templates. The Crafter, the Wren musician, barbarian river and storm god. What's new in those? What about the goddess that's simply a non-descript mother to other gods? Does she deserve her own 30-entry?



Also, consider always when making a pantheon: will it cover all the divine roles said culture needs to fill? If not, something's missing.



On the bright side, some like the Unnamed God who fights himself and all others too is brilliant. Caylin the Moon is also a beautiful idea. Make more on the level of those!


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30 Gods of Tirexia
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-11-30 05:47 PM
Well, they should be usable right out of the box.
So, if the Echo needs a god for a campaign and is not especially picky, he should be able to go to a 30 Gods post and steal, I mean get inspired.

As for To-Kah, that she had not real description in the Sumerian legends is one thing, adding your own touch and making her special another. Like, saying her belly is actually a huge rosebud that opens whenever a new godling is born. Or giving her a penchant for making mortals drunk with her milk, which angers another god to no end. A plant may be sacred to her, and that plant actually produces a powerful drug called ToKah's Milk.

A 2 minute effort (gosh, I should be less lazy and invest 2 minutes more often >.<).

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Red Armor Mk. VII
Items  (Armor)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-11-27 05:19 PM


A solid, useful design. Logical, much-welcome by police SWAT teams, excellent in areas with armed criminal gangs. I can imagine even important civilians (a judge ruling over a mob case...) wearing these in danger.


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Elematrix
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-11-13 06:50 AM


A good item, especially considering the expansion potential. Personally, I'd add very a intricate steampunky control panel to the back of the amulet; it's an experimental item, and thus requires lots of professional input - perhaps for activating anything besides the basic four forms?


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       By: ephemeralstability

The city of Nausopol is built on stilts. Lots of very sturdy stilts and butresses, of course, because it rises about five hundred feet from the ocean. Even the most terrific of storms is only heard in the city as a distant cacophony of blasts as waves strike the solid stonework fathoms below. It has never been attacked because of its isolation and impregnability.

It's not a place for the faint-hearted: vertigo and sea-sickness are not desirable traits. But when you are standing in the middle of the city there is no way you could tell that you were standing above an ocean, separated only by a gulf of air and a few stones.

A thousand steps lead down from Nausopol to the floating docks. These docks are pitch-coated wooden and can be raised by winches during squalls. Trade with other cities and countries is good: Nausopol is built over a sunken atoll whose minerals are still mined by divers, and it was from this that it originally derived its wealth.

But the principal method of getting to and from the city is by riding the giant sea-eagles which have been captured and bred for that very reason.

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