Added a little about their mind, and more flavor to the Guardian - to use substances or elements, these must be tainted with abandonment and loss.
Also, added some more madness ad blasphemy, because why not. Go to Comment
As you might have noted, there's no way to bestow a suit upon an adult.
If you prefer a greater availability, then, for example, it may be possible for just the Guardian to sire a child, so that the mother may wear her child - or for a female Guardian to conceive, birthing the father a young Guardian. Go to Comment
Take a glance at the usual extent and detail of submissions posted on Strolen's.
Look at the Hall of Honour / Golden submissions, and consult one of the elder authors.
To get a good reception and provide something of value to the GMs who frequent the site, a submission should be more than an idea - a full write-up with useful original detail. Don't go below an A4, in general. Go to Comment
While I seriously doubt it would be ever possible to reconnect the 500 000 nerve fibers of the optic nerve of a removed eye, the rest of the writeup is pretty deep, and unless you get a nitpicking neuroscientist in your group, almost flawless.
Ah, I have to nitpick anyway.
Especially with the brain stem, you have monoaminergic nuclei which, especially in the case of the locus coeruleus, innervate all of the telencephalon. Their input is vital for cortical activation, mood, memory formation, wakefulness, etc. Its input is, methinks, impossible to replace with prosthetics.
The raphe nuclei of the brainstem supply vital serotonin.
The frontal lobe has the nucleus basalis Meynerti, which sends acetylcholine throughout the cortex. Same problem.
So - total replacement is not feasible. Replacement of some portions, while leaving vital structures intact, is more the way to go. Some handwavium may help to get over the inconsistencies.
The reward centers of the brain are well known and easy ti stimulate. Rats given the choice between stimulation and food will starve.
While you don't want your employees to spend their life in orgasmic bliss until they die, a certain push towards happiness and 'doing the right thing' is a very desirable feature for the employer.
Some less than ethical corporations will implant the tiny chip, well hidden in the cranial base, wired usually to the visual cortex and the hypothalamus.
Referencing the individual's work-to-do, the chip will reward him with a subtle contentedness, bliss and feeling of work well done when he submits that report, or finishes a task.
Reward may be delivered after listening to motivational speeches of the management, etc.
As unethical as this may be, far more sinister uses of the reward chip can be conceived; malfunctioning ones are also horrible. Go to Comment
An alright idea - except for the nondescript monster, and the splatter. It could use far more Lovecraft horror.
Also, what about fighting the monster? Players will come in, and get murdered by the anti-god monster? Go to Comment
I know why he never looked it up!
Being raised nice and proper, he had strict parental controls set up on his computer - so strict that even 'vulva' did not pass :D
(to keep all the smut from the internet and hackers out, of course)
Or - he looked it up and considered it a prank by some evil jock agency that plays pranks on nerds. Go to Comment
If I were to suggest anything - rolling on a table and applying results is... boring.
*roll* haha, George is green!
*roll* haha, Fred grew a tail.
*roll* haha, I died. I better make a new char.
Well, does it make for a good story?
No. Because stories should be about heroes making choices.
If you want to improve it:
a) make it thematic - all the results are in the same general direction (mutation, mental quirks, elemental effects).
b) give it an use in the story beside applying mindlessly a random effect (the cult of Fnord wishes to taint the water supply!)
c) make it seemingly random, but get some genius to actually draw up some very complicated puzzle that allows you to predict the next effect.
d) make it about choice - say, a character may choose to accept or refuse the bottle's boon, but if he refuses, he may never drink from it again and forgoes any of those awesome boosts. Go to Comment
You come upon a ruined building in the back section of a city park (or other out of the way area of the city). The ruins are fairly overgrown. All that is really standing is a doorway and its frame. If you pass through the opened door, you travel to a different world. If the door closes, there may not be a doorway back to get you back.