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The Plane Of Zardikan-Anther
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-09-14 05:25 AM
What are the origins of the two powers? What are they like, beside hating each other and one being evil for evil's sake and one being good beyond reproach (pure good and pure evil are incredibly shallow, by the way).
You also do not explain who sends the mages there to that plane, and why Zardikan never tried to use the connection to assault the other side.

Also, check the spelling, and break up huge blocks of text into paragraphs to make the text more legible. Some of the sentences are incomplete, too.
'A millennia' is wrong, as the singular is 'millennium', etc.

Plus, please finish one thing instead of dumping a dozen in-work ideas.

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Unthar, the Sun of the Dead
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-09-04 01:38 PM
Hm - shall I add a passage describing the world under Unthar from the eyes of a denizen? Go to Comment
Unthar, the Sun of the Dead
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-09-05 04:57 AM
Also check out
Sol Niger...
The lyrics "that what never was shall always be" are quite fitting.

As for the visuals - yes, Unthar will be a disc of nothingness, surrounded by a swirling nimbus of chaos, undoing and mad possibility. Go to Comment
Unthar, the Sun of the Dead
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-01 04:23 PM
There is no !space! reality behind this one. There indeed was a divine womb from which sentient "suns" sprang forth, beings that happen to roam the sky, shed light for creation, and at night, they actually go home, dim, cool down and drink tea with dad.

This being a "fantasy" sub, it is about a world where this is reality. There is no orbit, there is but the sky, and in it three suns. They fly because they are divine. They shed light for the same reason. You could measure the power of the sun, but the reading could be "317 milliJesus" or something like that. It's just that in that world they never heard of our savior, they have their own.

So. Unthar is an undead divine entity. Those do not fly in elliptic paths around anything. It is locked in a real sub-dimension that is the Houses of the Dead, where you could sneak in and chat up your dead grandpa. It has a mind.

So. Suspend disbelief, there's lots of stranger subs than this one inthe citadel. Go to Comment
Unthar, the Sun of the Dead
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-04 04:45 PM
It can be a fold in space.
The N-th dimension above mundane reality.
The lint in the navel of the Vogon Lord of Poetry.
A computer simulation.
The inside of an effed-up bag of holding.
The biggest holo-deck ever built gone haywire.
An existence created by the eternal dream of Bakuki the Slime Prophet (you can enter it by getting stoned on a joint dipped into his mucus).
It could be a reality before our time, before the universe was remade into what it is now.
An alternate reality.
On the other side of a black hole.

Being open-minded does not make the brain fall out.

Also, the fact that a submission does not fit into one setting does not mean it requires a compatible explanation, nor is it a flaw of said submission if it comes without such a compatibility pack. Go to Comment
Unthar, the Sun of the Dead
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-09-13 08:31 AM
I did not give Unthar a motivation per se - it's a stillborn undead sun, an aberrant force of nature. But the room for an actual agenda is there - the dead sun may want something, and its escapes may have meaning (with the true horror being revealed once the consequences are understood).

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Lytharian's Luminescent Orbs
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-09-07 07:51 AM
I'd like a more original origin story, with, say, a tale of inspiration, more poetic than "I needed it, I made it".

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Painted Minotaur Room
Dungeons  (Any)   (Puzzles)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-08-10 03:29 AM
While simple on its own, it sparks some ideas of my own right away.
Thumbs up. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-08-11 04:03 AM
Actually, the Braggu would deem the Niyott to be greedy midgets, for sure! Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-08-11 04:03 AM
Also, Ink Drinkers and Niyott would compete for the same finite resource, not? Go to Comment
Mug of Blood
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-08-04 05:55 PM
The garage sale from hell is alwys welcome.

Note: the thing will be especially unpleasant and hard to explain if spilled.
Getting blood stains out of clothes and carpets is quite difficult and evokes suspicion, after all. Go to Comment
Halls of Dancing Flutes
Dungeons  (Mountains)   (Rooms/ Halls)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-29 04:54 AM
Players may for example have a magical servant or golem (imagine a steel golem with an organ on its back... dude, gotta write >this< up!) play the instrument 'till kingdom come. Go to Comment
I Know You’re Out There Somewhere
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-17 04:56 AM
Crew member abducted, get him back? Well, never would have thought of that.
But you do get a plus for the ship baptism. Go to Comment
I'm Just A Singer ...
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-17 04:53 AM
It's not only Firefly-inspired, but also within Firefly spirit. Simple but alright in my book. Go to Comment
Cantara, the Voice of the Dragon
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-22 04:04 PM
You know, I wonder why nobody bothers to comment as well. I know she's not perfect, and input would be welcome. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Underground)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-04 08:15 AM
I find it cool that you write up the basic elementals, when I think of something, all I get is the top of the elemental hierarchy. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-07-01 01:43 PM
The sub has two great elements - the description of the chase, and the idea that the Mordanfey's abilities are limited when it's being watched.
As for the unicorn, methinks it was always kinda neat, but this is an interesting twist. Go to Comment
The Grand Order of the Reef
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Area)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-06-11 04:23 AM
A good one!
What I'd welcome in addition: rites, a patron, perchance exceptional members, something peculiar to set them apart besides being aquatic. Go to Comment
Amulet of Cuteness
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-06-11 04:14 AM
Well then, this is straightforward, a wizard made it, and it's really not novel. As it stands, I'd have to give it a tentative 2. Go to Comment
Non-Combatant Mecha
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-06-08 04:30 PM

Yay! A Curie mech!

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Under the sewers of a large town ancient burial chambers are discovered. If the PCs investigate they fill find that a pale white flowers grows amongst the graves, in the dark.
How do they survive without light? What is their origin? Why in a burial chamber and not just in any old cave?
Can they be sold or do they have any special quality at all? It is up to the PCs to discover.

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