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Things Are Not Always As They Seem
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-17 05:30 AM


I can't help myself, but I'd have welcome a more extensive sub, with more misconceptions aliens could have about us. Luckily, it is a scroll.


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Things Are Not Always As They Seem
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-17 05:39 PM
Not necessarily the "girl-eating-girl" theme, but generally ways human behaviour could be misunderstood by various alien species. Go to Comment
30 Bardic Tales
Items  (Art and Music)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-13 04:27 AM


This is pretty good!



There are some issues with punctuation, and especially with meter in the poetry passages, but it's a worthy addition.


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30 Bardic Tales
Items  (Art and Music)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-13 03:02 PM
Ok, now I'm curious - have you actually made musical versions as well, or did you just think "there might be a melody that could be good with this" ? Praytell :) Go to Comment
The Sanguine Mist
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-10 03:01 PM


With the right kind of players, this can be an interesting plot hook.



Though, the mechanism of wish-granting could be subtler in some instances - at time it reads like a marketplace ("What does a leg get me?"); also, I can envision it sticking longer to one wishing person who has a great dream, helping him but consuming him in the end.



Plot hooks are good.



All in all, a good sub.


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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-01 04:18 PM


Hm, intended this for the last quest, but did not post it in time.

 


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Megan Sharwan
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-24 04:41 AM


It's allright, a good piece.


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Ithyqonian Frost Giants
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-22 05:43 AM


Rather than painting a picture, it throws up questions.



As for their dimensions, they'd have to be disproportionately thicker than a simply enlarged human, as strength of bone increases with its cross-sectional area, but the burden placed upon it with the volume of flesh. Hence, why elephants are so stocky.


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Kain-1
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 04:54 AM


While quite single-minded, with a sole purpose, sole course and thus sole dimension, this is a very tragic character - and may even be suitable as a protagonist if one adds a desire to combat the madness and goals beside killing.



What you might add are details of his schemes, how he goes about his quest for vengeance, for personally hunting a cult spread amongst the stars is stylish, but ineffective.


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Sentinent Trickster Bush
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 04:23 AM


Well, DnD is full of trap-creatures like mimics, man-eating walls and floors and pants that are basically defeated by one roll to "sense whether there is something amiss" - if you don't you're screwed, if you do, the trap-creature is a sitting duck.



Thus, I suggest re-making the bush into something more original. Keep the name, but perchance... what about a sentient labyrinth of shrubberies, for example?



So far, a 2/5.


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30+ Dwarven Gifts
Items  (Other)   (Heroic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-18 10:42 AM
"How are goblins like mushrooms?"
"Dunno, how?"
"They grow from poop, smell funny, and a hungry dwarf with a fork can finish a hundred of them!" Go to Comment
Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-25 02:50 AM


While it's nicely written, I think of it more as a piece of background color, an one-time purely descriptive encounter, not something one would build an adventure around.


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Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 04:08 AM


The monster is interesting, the introduction quite difficult to read, though - and most of it does not pertain to the topic.



I echo Black Jack: a group of possible explanations is better than just one answer.

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Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 09:27 AM
Evil floating skulls in a blizzard, that eat people and scare puppies? Sure as hell is a monster in my book ^_^ Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-24 03:49 PM
Updated to accommodate some suggestions, corrected a few mistakes. Added appearance of papa demon, and details of his demise and the Saintmakers' birth.

As for their appearance, I think it's more naturalistic; shapechangers that revert to a half-molten mass that browses through shapes when they are exposed have been done before. But when the king changes into a bloody piece od demon-belly with torn edges, dripping goo and flailing at you with guts, tentacles, half a pancreas and things which you'd have to look up in a issue of Abyss-pr0n just to fathom what their use might be, well, that is kinda more scary in my book. Go to Comment
Corpsefall
Locations  (World)   (Desert)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 03:56 AM


I love the idea, and its twisted simplicity.



I will let you expand and refine the sub before voting.



Thumbs up.


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Harvester of Eyes
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 03:03 PM


I likewise would have preferred a madman to a cultist of elder gods, but Brent is allright, methinks.


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Memory Moths
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 03:12 PM


Most evil and devious; my only objection are the names of existing Nordic gods - or rather, a raven in once case, a goddess in the other.


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The Starspawn
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-09 05:39 AM


Well, I like the back-story - though the telepathy thing takes a lot away from the possibilities. What if it had to resort to human senses to find out the murderous scum? Stalking, observing, judging, analyzing, before deciding to move away or in for the kill.



It could even improve its effectivity by instructing others to follow its path, a cult leader of sorts, or the founder of a philosophy...



Lots of potential, but much of it untapped.


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NAS Autopsy Report 14
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Water)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-07 05:57 AM


Well, a nest of them seems to be worth the nuke, a single one, as written, appears in the flamethrower-plasma grenade-HEAP missile range;



Unless the demon part inside gives it more resilience and strength than anatomy would suggest, and as it appears to be able to hide in sewers, hence, is not huge, I'd place it as a threat like, for example, the Starcraft Hydralisk: can rip up an armored car, a tank will shoot it to bits.


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Every now and again, the region encounters a dense blue fog. Every now and again, things disappear into the fog never to be seen again and things appear out of it from other places or world. It seems the fog is the material form of some minor diety charged with moving things around the universe to balance cosmic forces.

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