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30 Vampires
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-17 06:30 PM


Can't say I like it. The writing needs improvement, much so - remove word repetitions, correct grammar, punctuation and spelling. Also, several of the vamps could use a total overhaul.


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The Tower Shield
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-23 04:46 AM


It's ok.


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The Fallen
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-08 07:50 AM


This gives a whole new meaning to "giving somebody the finger."



I am absolutely uncertain what to think of this :D



Must ponder.


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The Chair of Malicious Truth
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Cursed)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-06 03:49 AM


Actually, this would find its way into the courtroom after the first incident, if it survived.



"Sure you murdered him - and two others; you also like the smell of manure, and spit into others' drinks."


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The Keep Beneath the Dusky Star
Dungeons  (Mountains)   (Rooms/ Halls)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-02-03 03:31 AM


Legen-awesome-dary, if I dare so say.



I'm gonna HoH this like no man's business.



Also, consider it stolen.


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30 Starship Air & Maintenance Duct Problems
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-16 04:31 AM


Actually, we had a 30 with this theme....



Only, it got to 101.



http://strolen.com/viewing/101_Problems_with_my_Spaceship



What about simply adding these to that list? (Also, some of these are duplicate of problems on Scras' list).



Minor issue: legionnaire's disease is caused by a bacterium, not fungus.



http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Legionella

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30 Starship Air & Maintenance Duct Problems
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-16 12:01 PM


They're well written, and some quite inventive.


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Things Are Not Always As They Seem
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-17 05:30 AM


I can't help myself, but I'd have welcome a more extensive sub, with more misconceptions aliens could have about us. Luckily, it is a scroll.


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Things Are Not Always As They Seem
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-17 05:39 PM
Not necessarily the "girl-eating-girl" theme, but generally ways human behaviour could be misunderstood by various alien species. Go to Comment
30 Bardic Tales
Items  (Art and Music)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-13 04:27 AM


This is pretty good!



There are some issues with punctuation, and especially with meter in the poetry passages, but it's a worthy addition.


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30 Bardic Tales
Items  (Art and Music)   (Non-Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-13 03:02 PM
Ok, now I'm curious - have you actually made musical versions as well, or did you just think "there might be a melody that could be good with this" ? Praytell :) Go to Comment
The Sanguine Mist
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-10 03:01 PM


With the right kind of players, this can be an interesting plot hook.



Though, the mechanism of wish-granting could be subtler in some instances - at time it reads like a marketplace ("What does a leg get me?"); also, I can envision it sticking longer to one wishing person who has a great dream, helping him but consuming him in the end.



Plot hooks are good.



All in all, a good sub.


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The Keeper of Dark Dreaming
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2011-01-01 04:18 PM


Hm, intended this for the last quest, but did not post it in time.

 


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Megan Sharwan
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-24 04:41 AM


It's allright, a good piece.


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Ithyqonian Frost Giants
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-22 05:43 AM


Rather than painting a picture, it throws up questions.



As for their dimensions, they'd have to be disproportionately thicker than a simply enlarged human, as strength of bone increases with its cross-sectional area, but the burden placed upon it with the volume of flesh. Hence, why elephants are so stocky.


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Kain-1
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 04:54 AM


While quite single-minded, with a sole purpose, sole course and thus sole dimension, this is a very tragic character - and may even be suitable as a protagonist if one adds a desire to combat the madness and goals beside killing.



What you might add are details of his schemes, how he goes about his quest for vengeance, for personally hunting a cult spread amongst the stars is stylish, but ineffective.


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Sentinent Trickster Bush
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 04:23 AM


Well, DnD is full of trap-creatures like mimics, man-eating walls and floors and pants that are basically defeated by one roll to "sense whether there is something amiss" - if you don't you're screwed, if you do, the trap-creature is a sitting duck.



Thus, I suggest re-making the bush into something more original. Keep the name, but perchance... what about a sentient labyrinth of shrubberies, for example?



So far, a 2/5.


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30+ Dwarven Gifts
Items  (Other)   (Heroic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-18 10:42 AM
"How are goblins like mushrooms?"
"Dunno, how?"
"They grow from poop, smell funny, and a hungry dwarf with a fork can finish a hundred of them!" Go to Comment
Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-25 02:50 AM


While it's nicely written, I think of it more as a piece of background color, an one-time purely descriptive encounter, not something one would build an adventure around.


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Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 04:08 AM


The monster is interesting, the introduction quite difficult to read, though - and most of it does not pertain to the topic.



I echo Black Jack: a group of possible explanations is better than just one answer.

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