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Megan Sharwan
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-24 03:41 AM


It's allright, a good piece.


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Ithyqonian Frost Giants
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-22 04:43 AM


Rather than painting a picture, it throws up questions.



As for their dimensions, they'd have to be disproportionately thicker than a simply enlarged human, as strength of bone increases with its cross-sectional area, but the burden placed upon it with the volume of flesh. Hence, why elephants are so stocky.


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Kain-1
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 03:54 AM


While quite single-minded, with a sole purpose, sole course and thus sole dimension, this is a very tragic character - and may even be suitable as a protagonist if one adds a desire to combat the madness and goals beside killing.



What you might add are details of his schemes, how he goes about his quest for vengeance, for personally hunting a cult spread amongst the stars is stylish, but ineffective.


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Sentinent Trickster Bush
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-28 03:23 AM


Well, DnD is full of trap-creatures like mimics, man-eating walls and floors and pants that are basically defeated by one roll to "sense whether there is something amiss" - if you don't you're screwed, if you do, the trap-creature is a sitting duck.



Thus, I suggest re-making the bush into something more original. Keep the name, but perchance... what about a sentient labyrinth of shrubberies, for example?



So far, a 2/5.


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30+ Dwarven Gifts
Items  (Other)   (Heroic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-18 09:42 AM
"How are goblins like mushrooms?"
"Dunno, how?"
"They grow from poop, smell funny, and a hungry dwarf with a fork can finish a hundred of them!" Go to Comment
Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-25 01:50 AM


While it's nicely written, I think of it more as a piece of background color, an one-time purely descriptive encounter, not something one would build an adventure around.


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Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 03:08 AM


The monster is interesting, the introduction quite difficult to read, though - and most of it does not pertain to the topic.



I echo Black Jack: a group of possible explanations is better than just one answer.

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Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 08:27 AM
Evil floating skulls in a blizzard, that eat people and scare puppies? Sure as hell is a monster in my book ^_^ Go to Comment
The Saintmakers
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-24 02:49 PM
Updated to accommodate some suggestions, corrected a few mistakes. Added appearance of papa demon, and details of his demise and the Saintmakers' birth.

As for their appearance, I think it's more naturalistic; shapechangers that revert to a half-molten mass that browses through shapes when they are exposed have been done before. But when the king changes into a bloody piece od demon-belly with torn edges, dripping goo and flailing at you with guts, tentacles, half a pancreas and things which you'd have to look up in a issue of Abyss-pr0n just to fathom what their use might be, well, that is kinda more scary in my book. Go to Comment
Corpsefall
Locations  (World)   (Desert)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-22 02:56 AM


I love the idea, and its twisted simplicity.



I will let you expand and refine the sub before voting.



Thumbs up.


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Harvester of Eyes
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 02:03 PM


I likewise would have preferred a madman to a cultist of elder gods, but Brent is allright, methinks.


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Memory Moths
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-15 02:12 PM


Most evil and devious; my only objection are the names of existing Nordic gods - or rather, a raven in once case, a goddess in the other.


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The Starspawn
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-09 04:39 AM


Well, I like the back-story - though the telepathy thing takes a lot away from the possibilities. What if it had to resort to human senses to find out the murderous scum? Stalking, observing, judging, analyzing, before deciding to move away or in for the kill.



It could even improve its effectivity by instructing others to follow its path, a cult leader of sorts, or the founder of a philosophy...



Lots of potential, but much of it untapped.


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NAS Autopsy Report 14
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Water)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-12-07 04:57 AM


Well, a nest of them seems to be worth the nuke, a single one, as written, appears in the flamethrower-plasma grenade-HEAP missile range;



Unless the demon part inside gives it more resilience and strength than anatomy would suggest, and as it appears to be able to hide in sewers, hence, is not huge, I'd place it as a threat like, for example, the Starcraft Hydralisk: can rip up an armored car, a tank will shoot it to bits.


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Gauntlets of Strength: A detailed analysis
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-04 03:12 AM


Echo likes. Now think up a similar item for other attributes!


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Romantic Love
Articles  (Character)   (Players)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-02 07:41 AM


It is good that you brought the topic up, but generally, I found applying dice modifiers to love unnecessary - players who care about the characters and NPCs enough to be bothered by the concept of love will act it out - and sometimes deliberately fail rolls; likewise will they succeed without rolling against fear and the like when their loved ones are in danger; often these scenes will be entirely roleplay and no system.



So, good idea, but approach it from a different angle.


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Romantic Love
Articles  (Character)   (Players)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-11-02 09:19 AM
Ah, makes sense now.
Thus, perchance a more powerful, confronting wording may be in place!
"What can challenge the boldest knight whom a dragon's claw cannot touch?..."
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Blast Cane
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-10-25 08:24 AM
Why? Do you often encounter the need to turn people into mush? Go to Comment
Blast Cane
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-10-25 08:25 AM


A decent sub, simple and useful.


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30 Tieflings and the Gifts they bestow
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
EchoMirage's comment on 2010-10-25 02:11 AM
We'll be like the 30-Brigade, Cheka, piling up useful 30-whatevers in the Citadel. Get working on those 30 elvish gifts! Go to Comment
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