The logic behind this is flawed.
a) humans treat cows as animals, as cows show no evidence of intelligence not culture, just a herd. You specifically state that Yothats breed out intelligence from their flock, hence are aware of that trait.
b) As described, Yothats lack the capacity to stand against humanity for long. Sure, they are big, but organized into tribes 50 strong - which will fall one by one; their social structure does not support acting in unison for any extended period of time.
c) societies with units of 50 will not have bankers, or even guilds. These rely on a large number of individuals living in a society to support their existence. Go to Comment
I'd really suggest having unfinished 30 (Whatever) in the Forum and posting them here when they hit the mark. That will also serve as a sorting process: those that don't hit the '30' are apparently not interesting enough to go on front page anyways.
By adding the re-education during cryo, you made cryodetention actually meaningful.
A difficult thing is that writing up a prison facility places logical necessities and constraints on the author, making it difficult to get the 'I wish I had thouhgt of this!' moment.
A solid post, no less. Go to Comment
As this is written for DnD, and given the nature of the maker of the Catbook, perhaps the book simply suffuses the cat, and by petting it, you are instilled with the knowledge it contains (random fragment if by accident, the piece you want if intentional).
This makes accidentally unleashing the power more likely than if people simply open the cats. Go to Comment
Added a little about their mind, and more flavor to the Guardian - to use substances or elements, these must be tainted with abandonment and loss.
Also, added some more madness ad blasphemy, because why not. Go to Comment
As you might have noted, there's no way to bestow a suit upon an adult.
If you prefer a greater availability, then, for example, it may be possible for just the Guardian to sire a child, so that the mother may wear her child - or for a female Guardian to conceive, birthing the father a young Guardian. Go to Comment
Take a glance at the usual extent and detail of submissions posted on Strolen's.
Look at the Hall of Honour / Golden submissions, and consult one of the elder authors.
To get a good reception and provide something of value to the GMs who frequent the site, a submission should be more than an idea - a full write-up with useful original detail. Don't go below an A4, in general. Go to Comment
While I seriously doubt it would be ever possible to reconnect the 500 000 nerve fibers of the optic nerve of a removed eye, the rest of the writeup is pretty deep, and unless you get a nitpicking neuroscientist in your group, almost flawless.
Ah, I have to nitpick anyway.
Especially with the brain stem, you have monoaminergic nuclei which, especially in the case of the locus coeruleus, innervate all of the telencephalon. Their input is vital for cortical activation, mood, memory formation, wakefulness, etc. Its input is, methinks, impossible to replace with prosthetics.
The raphe nuclei of the brainstem supply vital serotonin.
The frontal lobe has the nucleus basalis Meynerti, which sends acetylcholine throughout the cortex. Same problem.
So - total replacement is not feasible. Replacement of some portions, while leaving vital structures intact, is more the way to go. Some handwavium may help to get over the inconsistencies.
The reward centers of the brain are well known and easy ti stimulate. Rats given the choice between stimulation and food will starve.
While you don't want your employees to spend their life in orgasmic bliss until they die, a certain push towards happiness and 'doing the right thing' is a very desirable feature for the employer.
Some less than ethical corporations will implant the tiny chip, well hidden in the cranial base, wired usually to the visual cortex and the hypothalamus.
Referencing the individual's work-to-do, the chip will reward him with a subtle contentedness, bliss and feeling of work well done when he submits that report, or finishes a task.
Reward may be delivered after listening to motivational speeches of the management, etc.
As unethical as this may be, far more sinister uses of the reward chip can be conceived; malfunctioning ones are also horrible. Go to Comment
An alright idea - except for the nondescript monster, and the splatter. It could use far more Lovecraft horror.
Also, what about fighting the monster? Players will come in, and get murdered by the anti-god monster? Go to Comment