Thenestre is asking to have his little bubble burst.
The funny thing: as an illusionist, he'll likely get away with it.
Echo approves. They're all useful, some of them quite original too. I especially like 26 - the Fear Scabbard, and 9 - the Tattletale Scabbard.
Still, it could use a little work-over with a thesaurus and a look at the grammar (>it's< means >it is<, >its< indicates possession by it; etc.
Echo likes. You captured the despair of a failing empire well, the faded glory too.
I noticed a few spelling errors, but nothing crucial. A well-rounded submission, ready to be used.
I like how every one of them is actually a plot hook or several; it's well-written and evocative. Even one of them may start off a campaign.
A good one.
I will echo (haha) the previous comment: it feels more like a stub; hence, I won't vote yet.
Give it some love, for what I read so far could grow to be great!
It's very... RPG-like. Like it was made for a computer game, or for a set of characters in pen-and-paper.
Also, why wasn't it looted in the 4000 years before?
I like the prose, though.
The plot hooks section is quite slim, especially with the mischief and outright disaster an anti-magic banner can wreak.
Also, I'd suggest adding some quirks and more personality a) to the known banners b) to the banners in general. So far, they're indestructible anti-magic banners. Woo.
It's okay, I guess.
I'd have welcomed alternative uses - so far, it's pretty straightforward.
> Blood beasts, in making all blood as one, could serve as universal transfusions!
> They could be distilled into healing agents!
> A colossal blood beast, stuck in a magical trap, could leak and feed a debased tribe with a fountain of unholy blood!
Echo likes.
Your description led me to the truth of Nortelbean swiftly and without force, even before you stated the truth. .
The sub leaves me hungry for more, though - after the aperitif, a chunk of meat should come.
Care to add?
Please do ;)
I noticed several spelling and grammar errors, and the prose could use some smoothing out.
Other than that, the plant on its own is OK, the background how a healing herb brought down a city is quite original as well.
I'm withholding the vote for now.
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Thank you Cheka for summing up so many important aspects so concisely.
I just read this, and will read it a few times more.
As for the gift sub - methinks it may be something taking place in another player's setting, a story involving another's submitted NPC, or ...?
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