Well, this raises the classic Paladin issues: does being evil but not actually doing evil make you a target for prosecution?

How long does it take for a crime to 'fade' and no longer be detectable by the spectacles? What has to be done to wipe a sin from you?

Also, what is a grave sin to one is an amusing antic to another - for example, gay sex or blasphemy. If they detect solely crime, which law system do they use?

What about making the depictions of the spectacles dependent on the general perceptions of the wearer? So a very lenient person will not see minor sinners as demons, just as humans, while an intolerant one would find himself surrounded by the vilest fiends.

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Ok idea, but naively presented, has some serious issues (see my above comments).

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Well, the author states they're mostly large denominations, and I think it's good as it is. Sending 20 000 gp would be as tedious as it sounds, prompting the payer to make a personal delivery. You'd have a large stash of unenchanted currency, and a smaller for distance payments. Go to Comment

This is so unique and hillarious that the short description provided is truly sufficient.

I'd add but two things:

*Traceability of the coin: can mediums or the like trace where a coin has been?

*Interception of the coin: I echo a previous comment: could a thieving Potter clone snatch them from mid-air to enrich himself? Sure, their enchantment needs to be temporarily suppressed, but perhaps... perhaps catching them is something only a few extremely dextrous individuals could do, making Falcon Coin theft a way of living for a few, while ensuing most transfers are safe.

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Ah, the vote.

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This is "so DnD" - the lore is decently written, but the whole "weapon made to stop the greatest foe" approach has been used too often and is made only slightly better by having been made by two working in unison.

Also, it's a sword. With a dragon inside. That turns you into a dragon. I know Dungeons and Dragons is supposed to be about as much about dragons as it is about dungeons, but overdoing it with the dragons may lead to diluting their dragony awesomeness and making them less special (been there, done it).

This said, the sword can be a good McGuffin; I'd have included a limiting clause though or some sort of drawback which makes players less inclined to keep it after they down the Big Nasty.

Another note: the bargain Lord Brax struck with the dragon could have actually borne the seeds of his demise - you write he had the power to claim the soul of the dragon - so the dragon in turn should possess the "power, strength, endurance, and knowledge" to defeat him, in turn. Hence, the dragon-turned-blade could indeed be fed a stream of thought betraying the villain's plans or next strike in that battle (knowledge), drain him of vigor feeding its weilder and striking true as defensive enchantments woven by Lord Brax fail miserably to deflect this one weapon.

Also, welcome to the citadel.

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You could go with a spring mechanism, with a winch to draw back a hideously strong metal coil... or you could make it a Gauss crossbow, propelling the bolt along the barrel with whatever technobabble strieks your fancy.

Also, I don't think fletching per se has to impart a spin on the arrow, it ensures that the arrow does not tumble.

As it is, the technological solution does not make too much sense.

On a different note - you can really go way out there: what if the bolts are magnetic - and coincidentally, the magic used to enhance the armors of the cavalry improves all the properties of the metal, including attracting magnets, disproportionately so?

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Ok, so no magic then.
The two bows are still more of an image thing, though. Because: you are aware that bows do come with various amounts of pull? The weak ones can be bent with little force, and likewise exert as little force on the arrow. The strong bows exert over 200 pounds of pull.

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Actually, yes they would combine their strength in this case. When a car hits a wall at 30 mph, the wall hits paradoxically back with the same force. Hence, it's as if two cars collided. (damn you, Newton!)

In the case of the bows, it's very much like trying to bend two sticks at once - they're more difficult to bend than one stick. By their powers combined, the bow-handgun is the bow-handgun.
What I am worried about is the homogenous transduction of force from two bows to one arrow. And also the consideration: why the hell would I use two bows when I can simply use a stronger one?
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Hylandpad: epidemic or pandemic; endemic means limited to a region.

Alas - I would love to have a CGM quest. Go to Comment

It's somewhat similar to Dragon Age's approach - spirits being drawn to open minds and either invading, or coexisting.

Also, check spelling and grammar, please.

All in all, it might make for good story material.

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This set-up leaves little room for adventuring, though.

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Given the nature of this particular hell, it may be difficult, but methinks this lacks ... something... to make it really stand out.

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Indeed, the part about entering the Non is what sets it really apart.

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Reminds me of a tale by... Gaiman, methinks. Anyways, exceedingly well written. The sole objection is that the Judge's punishments are a little literal.

You might want to edit out a few mistakes, such as the second plot hook lacking "hero" in the first line (A great ... has been etc.)

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A well-deserved 5, I'd say.

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A little limited, needs to be expanded methinks. Also: add room for adventure, lest it is but a piece of color.

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It's rather interesting, this one!

Perhaps slightly altered, you could leave with something of *true* worth, but not with stuff collected out of greed.

Also, if PCs bother to research a little, they may leave their equipment behind, stored, sail to the Avaricious, and reclaim their stuff upon return! If they don't inquire... well, they should have!

The trash golems and the pale keepers need to be elaborated, though.

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SHort and simple, but nicely written. Echo approves.

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Well, isn't this basically how DnD since the 3rd edition portrays halflings?

(hence why I suggested to post first in the forum, to polish it before it makes front page)

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Simply put, this is an elaboration on the basic DnD setting, which cannot be blamed for excess ingenuity. Don't take this the wrong way, but I'd like to see something new, special... and the basic DnD halflings have their own chapter in the... Races of... Destiny? Or races of the Wild, or whatever. So, my 0.02$ would be - if you write them up, you may as well make them something special. As for a race/culture write-up in general, go to greater breadth, depth and allocate space to topics according to story potential and importnace. So far, you may consider it a finished product, but not one I'd a) use b) rate highly.

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