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Cataphract Assault Platform
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-13 05:53 AM
My first comment is just a trivial grammar issue, one that I note throughout your subs - you confuse its and it's.

Its = belonging to it ("The Cataphract focused its terrible weapons on the arcology.")
It's = it is ("The Cataphract opened fire upon the arcology. It's terrible!")

Another is spelling of foreign words. As above, this applies to multiple articles. Sometimes, it's an established word like "centripetal" that's misspelled. Here, the internet or a spelling checker can help.
At other times, it's a word that is part of a novel composite made up by you. Here, it's up to you to check the component words for optimal spelling.

Hope this helps. Go to Comment
Cataphract Assault Platform
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-13 05:57 AM
An idea: from the above, I understand that the Cataphract finds itself often in combat with anti-gravity vessels. It could have a weapon that shorts out anti-gravity drives; this device, while highly efficient at damaging the drives of modern warships, it is never mounted on one, as it would damage the drive of a ship firing it as well, even more so than the target's.
So, there would be quite the irony that the anti-gravity ships that made the Cataphract obsolete are highly vulnerable to it. What do you think? Go to Comment
Cataphract Assault Platform
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-13 01:37 PM
I like the idea of something so huge being out of sight; of something useless suddenly being a thorn in someone's side. It resonates well with the mecha and kaiju genre, and is right up there with the heli-carrier when it comes to absurdity. As for the imagery, my brain delivered something akin to a Borg cube on tracks, with a huge gun on top - dunno whether that's what you intended. Anyways, solid. Go to Comment
The Gromgrom Bush
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Mountains)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-10-25 09:37 AM
Yup, players would simply use the causality paradox to mess with bushes, and by proxy, with the GM. A good idea, but as said, most useful for fiction unless their prediction is not infallible.
PC: "I cut down a non-blooming bush for firewood."
GM: "Really? >.<" Go to Comment
Terraforming Megastructures
Locations  (Other)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-11-08 05:38 AM
a) you ma like the Terraforming Mars board game
b) you manage to turn everythign dark, including the noble endeavour of terraforming (this is a compliment)
c) any thoughts on how a mundane-tech version of the cooling tower may work? Or some other tech that would fulfill its function? E.g., solar shades? Go to Comment
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-02-10 04:26 AM
I actually used a similar idea a long time ago.
> I shuffled land cards and laid out a country.
> I shuffled enchantments and artifacts and similar cards considered suitable, and drew a plothook.
> I shuffled creatures to get a BBEG and mooks. Go to Comment
Asthedrir
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-02-08 05:00 AM
Actually, I'd argument that the Asthedrir are quite dissimilar from the Melniboneans - they are pragmatic, secular, and do not give in to hedonism easily (except for some noteworthy exceptions).
What I catch is a Clint Eastwood vibe - "Get off my lawn, goddamn humans."
They are realists. In all but the most naive of fantasy settings, reality has some severe flaws. They are too smart to delude themselves - they take flaws at face value. Which explains their grumpy attitude. I don;t think them angry - rather, they are cold, critical, scathing and abrasive (except towards the rare few who actually deserve respect).
Stimulants, research and work are ways to feel alive, and drive away existentialism.
The above would also explain their cold and uncaring attitude. Let's face it, in the grand scope, a vast majority of humans are replaceable and interchangeable, and the individual matters to those few close to him. So why should the Elves care?
They do not have religion - I can imagine an Asthendir soul being a conscientious objector to the afterlife, refusing to pass the pearly gates (or to whatever form of afterlife).
One trait I would give them is immense willpower, and a lack of need for pink glasses. They can take reality without becoming depressed.

^ The above is head canon now. Go to Comment
Yet More Magic Swords
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-02-07 05:34 AM
Some of these could use further thought:
> 4: that's not how parrying works
> 15: as written, the Shieldmaiden would have to sleep with the sword on her belt, and similarly would need to retain the sword mid-coitus.
> 18: why would anyone ever want to use this?
> 19 & 20: speaking from personal experience: even in a tight shield wall formation in a choke point, you move *a lot*. Thus, both are horribly bad.
> 22: the power level of this is over the top (this may be intended, but I still had to note). Same applies for 26.
> 27: seems forced, in the vein of "swords have to be able to do everything"
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The Butcher Boys
NPCs  (Extras)   (Domestic/ Craft)
EchoMirage's comment on 2017-01-27 07:52 AM
I feel honoured :D
If I were to suggest, it needs more hot sauce and poison! Go to Comment
Cybernetic Skull
Items  (Armor)   (Campaign Defining)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-10-30 04:32 AM
Me gusta.
One problem this does not address is the brain's vulnerability to impact that does not pierce the skull (currently working on CTE, had to ask).
Basically, impacts that do not damage the brain still cause concussion, and more severe blows can cause immediate damage (brain contusion, coup- and contrecoup injuries) and delayed damage (CTE, dementia pugilistica).
Can we think of some physical principle that would prevent short-term shutdown of the augmented individual after a head blow, and permanent brain damage from non-penetrating trauma? Go to Comment
Cromwell Chassis
Items  (Armor)   (Campaign Defining)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-10-30 04:42 AM
Or golems! Go to Comment
8/30 Cathexes
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-10-30 05:04 AM
Slotted into mechanical bodies, Ghost OS can be rather unpleasant.

I'd add a psychological note - the OS could replace an authority figure for the purpose of removing responsibility for one's own actions, such as in the Milgram Experiment. I'm looking at you, Fury. Go to Comment
Voodoo Reinforcement Learning
Dungeons  (Swamp)   (Puzzles)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-10-30 05:13 AM
There's actually quite a few experiments to measure a patient's mental flexibility with games with hidden rules. Haven't encountered this one yet - but I love game design that operates with hidden information. Go to Comment
Voodoo Reinforcement Learning
Dungeons  (Swamp)   (Puzzles)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-10-30 05:13 AM
There's actually quite a few experiments to measure a patient's mental flexibility with games with hidden rules. Haven't encountered this one yet - but I love game design that operates with hidden information. Go to Comment
Gargatias
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Space)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-08-11 04:53 AM
An interesting idea, for sure.
I'd recommend running a thorough language correction (grammar, spelling) though to make it more palatable. Go to Comment
Circlet of Cerberus
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2015-03-21 02:06 PM
It's short, but covers all essential topics.
I'd just suggest a read-over, there are some spelling and syntax issues (e.g., "thru" instead of "through" in the introduction) Go to Comment
Inemuri Salon
Locations  (Establishment)   (CyberSpace)
EchoMirage's comment on 2014-11-22 04:51 PM
I'd expand on the Puppet Master.
> Brute control is crude. For a twist, the AI might just help them to catharsis, to understand what's wrong in their lives... and suddenly, they abandon the Zaibatsu, or see their sins and dishonor, and kill themselves. The AI may even be well-meaning.

And, I'd add The Prophet.
> A wise man died during his dream session - but he persevered in the dreamscape, and speaks to dreamers. He may even attract a cult and following. Go to Comment
Inemuri Salon
Locations  (Establishment)   (CyberSpace)
EchoMirage's comment on 2014-11-22 04:53 PM
A worthy addition to the Cosmic era, and helps illustrate the culture of Nippon well.
I like how the idea of dreams for sale exceeded the established trope of addiction and withdrawal from reality, and became an artistic experience. Go to Comment
The Sundered Fields
Locations  (Other)   (Plains)
EchoMirage's comment on 2014-11-22 04:59 PM
Well, this really could use expanding with notable landmarks of the fields (e.g. a burned temple, some anomaly that may have been the source of the plague) and notable NPCs or monsters.
You also could add the explanations you provided in the comment to the main text.
Also, plot hooks! Go to Comment
Myzrym
NPCs  (Major)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2014-11-22 05:07 PM
I like cheese, and this is a very cheesy treat indeed. My favourite part is the soul gem placement though.
I know that old-school often had no motivation for villains, but what is she using all that power for? Or is she evil for the sake of evil and power? Go to Comment
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