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Exalted Mother
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-08-13 01:29 PM
I think these feel very Post-Apocalyptic to me. That is, I can more easily imagine a giant stone statue of Marie Curie coming to life to kick some ass in a Thundarr the Barbarian type game than in the more seemingly Cyberpunk Anime vibe I get from the Cosmic Era (not that they don't fit the CE).

Also, I gotta say: when you have a giant statue named Venus, I just instantly assume that she has no arms. Go to Comment
Digital Angel
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Cyberspace)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-08-05 09:49 PM
I really like this one. There's enough here to give an idea of the setting, but I also think that angeloids are potentially generic enough to fit into a lot of different settings with virtual reality. The premise of VR police is, I think, a strong one, and I think that making them angelic is a nice touch. It's interesting to imagine that these might come from societies with certain cultures, and other entities might have their own "angels" with different presentations.

Lot of good food for thought here. Go to Comment
The Valley of Shifting Shadow
Locations  (Other)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-04-22 10:02 PM
I like it a lot. I think it works well as a maddening, terrible location, for one thing. But I also rather like the notion of connecting the south pole (or just the antarctic), where every direction is north, to somewhere where every direction is back in time. That's very cool, and is an idea that I think could be extended toothier concepts, too. Go to Comment
The Shade of You
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-04-22 09:54 PM
Not a bad bit of petty. I like the, uh, I think "cadence" is the word I'm looking for.

From an RPG idea perspective, I don't get too much out of it, thouh. Go to Comment
The Shade of You
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-04-22 09:54 PM
That should say "poetry", not "petty." Sorry. Go to Comment
Brass Man
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-03-25 05:57 PM
Oh yes, and I meant to say that you have to actually give it the robot freetext! That's part of the point! Go to Comment
Brass Man
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-03-25 05:55 PM
I agree with Strolen that I like the visual. I might be inclined to make it technological undeath rather than requiring a spell, but that's an easy adjustment.

I also find the eye/ear/brain thing interesting, in that it to some degree suggests different vulnerabilities for a brass man than for a normal human. Sure he has no heart, but maybe if you cut his ear off.... Go to Comment
Infernal Forge
Locations  (Other)   (Underground)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2016-01-22 01:39 PM
Makes a nice piece of interesting dungeon dressing, or perhaps a source of power for someone. I like what's here, but I think it feels a hint unfinished.

I do like the idea of finding a desolate town with an underground, Centralia-style fire caused by one of these. Go to Comment
Archery in the Cosmic Era
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-12-25 05:33 PM
I think there's a lot of good stuff in this entry, in particular, I like the analysis of what might make a bow useful is good, and the fancy arrows are neat. I do think that they're kind of strange in connection with each other - Federation implies a big organization, and it seems odd they'd put so much effort into arrows. Maybe they have a lot of use for assassins and saboteurs? Go to Comment
Egomorph
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-12-11 09:25 PM
This one brings a whole new meaning to talking to yourself. I agree with Dossta about liking the idea of a limited clone, but what really grabs me is the idea of it being a copy of your mind at a given time. I can imagine a busy scientist, say, working on a number of different projects, each with an egomorph of himself with a different train of thought associated with it. Go to Comment
Sabanto-Meido
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (Regional)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-11-24 07:46 PM
In the Cosmic Era, this sort of finishing school seems almost mundane (though the execution here is nice), but I'm intrigued by the idea of seeing one of these introduced in a more modern environment. I think it's easy to imagine someone like Bond or Batman having to bring down such an institution.

Of course, in its rightful place, you could do something similar, but perhaps with more street level individuals. Go to Comment
The Last Submission About Voting and Commenting
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Citadel Help)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-08-29 07:01 AM
Concise and gets the point across, but I'm not sure how useful the advice is.

Also, it's not 100 words. ;) Go to Comment
Goat Belt or Belt of Minor Levitation
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-08-21 10:32 PM
I like the goat connection, which is a nice place to go with such a magic item. Functional, not too amazing. Nothing against it. That said, I agree with the others that it could use a bit more something. Go to Comment
The Many-Changing Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-08-14 06:06 PM
It's a good twist for an ordinary cursed weapon. Not terribly exciting, but solid and functional. I agree with Mageek that I could imagine using such an item in a game. Go to Comment
Spirit of the North Road
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-08-14 06:01 PM
Do you mean dawn till dusk, or dusk till dawn?

Either way, it's an interesting idea. I wonder how, given that the road throws obstacles at you if you move quickly, e road speeds you up if you go too slowly. Someone offers you a ride? A tornado picks you up and drops you off at the far end?

And since you mention that it points to an abandoned castle, it makes me think that it could also work well as a way to send low level PCs to a dungeon. Guaranteed to get there in one piece and in a reasonable length of time. Go to Comment
Queen Llaewyn Reborn
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-02-08 05:01 PM
I think this one still needs a bit of work - the style is good, but there's no substance. It's kind of like the trailer for a movie.

What I mean is "What's the plot here?" There was a woman, then her father died, then she cast some kind of spells, and now she was reborn? You make ominous references to her rebirth, but you haven't developed her or the event well enough to make them ominous.

Is she going to take over the world? Try to resurrect her father (and would that be bad)? Restore the apparently bad rule of the Mage-Kings? Is she a really powerful wizard? A goddess? A sign of the apocalypse? Go to Comment
Buluc, death priest of Rope Woman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Religious)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-02-08 05:16 PM
Personally, I am intrigued by the notion of filling the gap in voluntary sacrifices. Unusual religious practices are always intriguing. Perhaps Buluc talks the depressed into suicide during the day and dreads those times when he must go out and fill the void. Perhaps he does the opposite, helping people in the name of one god and murdering them in the name of another. What if the law turns against honorable suicide - does that leave more of a gap to be filled? Go to Comment
The Last Mind Flayer
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-01-23 10:04 PM
This is a great sub. It seems at first to be a whole bunch of fairly disparate elements, but they all come together to make a very strong plot. And while it's written for fantasy, I think you could pretty easily carry this forwards into modern times. I'm particularly fond of the take on mind flayers, which I think is a great alternative to the hives we normally get.

If I were running it, I think I might be inclined to not reveal Illah until a bit later in the adventure. Ideally, I think I would want to try to push it from appearing that Rodchenko is exploiting random attacks, to his working with some wicked partner, to his working with something that he's a fool to believe he could possibly control. Go to Comment
Hobbit Chair and Eat Racing
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-01-16 05:33 PM
I like it. It's got a nice hobbit feel to it and makes good background flavor for a game. Perhaps PCs meet with their contact at a race, or have to hijack a rig to catch another one loaded with poisoned food. Go to Comment
The Holy Hovercraft of The Ice Bears
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2015-01-09 09:25 PM
There is some great visual appeal to this post, and I think that there is a good idea here, too, but it's bit difficult to parse.

I think that a list of plot hooks or something might fit nicely. There are plenty of places to go with this, but it could stand to be a bit more clearly stated. Go to Comment
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