You're going to need to check spelling and grammar again, and a few details added would be nice. The basic idea is intriguing, but this seems more of a setting in which to create a plot, rather than a plot unto itself. Welcome to the Citadel, Brutus. Go to Comment

Not purposefully, no. Go to Comment

 I like it, though I do agree with others about the plot. It's not bad, but I think more of it would do better. Perhaps it was just the way the post was written, but it felt like the beginning and end lasted forever, while the middle flew by too fast to notice.

 Perhaps something in the beginning that required the players to dig up the information, instead of getting it from the Seer (being so close to death might blind him more than his disease). Others have pointed out some good ideas.

 However, I did like it immensely. My attention was kept by the whole thing and it made sense. It would benefit from being fleshed out, maybe given more complexity, but it's good and useful how it is.

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That's because you wouldn't have your hard earned gold dumped in a hole somewhere. Go to Comment

My favorite character was... Is Alduous Chalbringer. Alduous was a witchhunter in a homebrew game that I played once and then never again. He's your stereotipical gun-slinging guy in a duster and with a dark look in his eyes. Yes, quite a bit cliched, but I like it. Although I have actually played very little with him, I have transfered Alduous into a couple different game systems (including Call of Cthulhu) in the hopes that I will someday be able to adventure further as Alduous Chalbringer. Go to Comment

This is a good beginning. You address many thing that we need to know to be able to use this creature, but you might want to go into more detail. For instance, ranged weapons have little effect on Blood Beasts, but you don't say how. Do the projectiles pass right through them? As a liquid creature, can it just move it's body out of the way so quickly?

Also, in the background, you might want to add some descriptive flair.

But, once he had enchanted the foul beast, it rose up and engulfed him.

Something like that, maybe. Just one more thing, you might want to put in some plot suggestions. You know, a way for us to introduce these beasts in our games. Something like what Shadoweagle said, or a murder where the body has been dragged to the edge of town. Only the observant can see that the victim has no blood left in him, and that the trail actually leads away from the body, towards town! Go to Comment

I just looked up that game, and now I think I need to find myself a copy. To be sure, an already existing map would be easier to use than drawing all your own by hand for ZitH! You could even use city street maps for larger-scale games. Go to Comment

 You could always add in the further information on the end, in case somebody wanted to read it.

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 It's good, it's usable, and I liked the narrative introduction. I especially liked the image of the demons warming themselves on Sean's hatred.

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66. Perfect for creating paranoia in pirate captains. Simply feed your croc his hand, and you'll never have to worry about it again.

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I only added one, but I hope it helps you reach 101.

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A little short, it would be nice if you fleshed out the backstory a little more, also, it would be extremely interesting if you could describe the two factions in more detail. Go to Comment

I never can get enough rooms and puzzles. This one has the simplicity that it needs to work, but I can see the heroes getting caught up for a long time, trying to get past the puzzle all the wrong ways.
I am curious: Did anyone in particular create this puzzle? Is it usually found in labyrinths, hence the minotaurs? Do the other painted minotaurs have any sort of abilities, or are they just for decoration?

Good job on your first submission, Cressida, and welcome again to the Citadel! Go to Comment

I like it. You did a good job of giving us a good item to use, as well as some good tips on using it. The whole thing feels just a bit tongue-in-cheek, but in a serious way (that doesn't make sense, but don't mind.) Good job, Pieh. Go to Comment

I love it! These things are just threatening enough to pose an actual threat, without just being another baddie to send the part against. The idea for encounters could play through a whole range, and each could be different. Good job, Bly!

Also, I think that the Niyott should find The Ink Drinkers. Go to Comment

A good application of the Quasi-souls. Also an interesting goal for the party when they need some information. I would love to see what tidbits my party brings out to barter for what they need. Go to Comment

They seem a very interesting group of creatures. I would like to see more information on those Quasi-souls trying to purge their souls.
A couple of things stand out to me as being odd. First, the Quasi-souls prefer tact over overt combat when at odds with someone. Why? I don't know, but it just seems at odds with how I picture them. Of course, you would know better than I about this, it just confuses me.
Secondly, the Quasi-souls prefer to blend in to the background and stay hidden. Not only does this seem difficult judging by their form, but it also seems impractical. You said that Quasi-souls seeking to become Soulesses do horrible acts to get them nearer to their goal. Wouldn't the opposite also be true, that Quasi-souls seeking to become Soulfuls would try to do good deeds so as to get them to their own goal?

Also, a small note on typography: There are a few points where the plurality changes in the middle of a sentence. it isn't necessarily a problem, I just find it distracting.

And, at the tail-end of this criticism, I'll add that I do really like this sub, and I hope to see plenty more. Go to Comment

I like it. I could see this being given to some red-herring NPC by mistake, and then the party would start thinking that he was some evil necromancer/demon/lawyer that drinks the blood of the living for breakfast. Go to Comment

While interesting, this item has very, very limited use. Unless you party needs to get from one end of town to the other a number of times. Though I still do like the item. Go to Comment

Perhaps an entire town of Xarloccians that have killed off the normal townsfolk would need to go out and find people to kill, etc. Or would they be able to be generally nasty to each other every day just to keep from rotting? That could lead to an interesting town in which the heroes find an entire village of surly townsfolk that delight in tormenting them. Not in big ways, just pranks and disrespect. Go to Comment