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Boots Too Fine for the Earth
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2006-07-12 07:10 PM
Why haven't I voted on this before? It's a beautiful story, and a fine item. Go to Comment
Strike Down Mother Earth
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-13 10:48 PM
The names are neat, though the item seems disconnected somehow. Effects are neat, if a tad overpowered. Go to Comment
The Jester's Loot
Items  (Transports)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-03 03:49 PM
I found the name "Binky" distracting, kind of took me out of the post. Is that a nitpick? It feels like a nitpick.

That aside, this is a somewhat amusing item. There are a number of spelling errors and typos, and there does seem to be some inconsistency, or at least ambiguity about what will inflate and what won't. I'd like to see it reworked a bit for clarity, maybe a few plot hooks thrown in. Go to Comment
Coat of Teeth
Items  (Armor)   (Heroic)
Dozus's comment on 2013-03-22 11:10 AM
I love the image of this armor, and its practical uses even more. Go to Comment
Sadist Dagger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-05 01:44 PM
I like the mild horror factor. For some reason I have minor trouble accepting that the rage of a cobbler who eventually killed his wife could make such a curse as this one, but such is the way of magic. Go to Comment
Flask of Many Liquids
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-22 08:26 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Box That Cannot Be Opened
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2009-03-09 05:48 PM
Whenever offered the choice of a thousand wonders or a mysterious closed box, always go with the box. Go to Comment
Canteen Stones
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-11 11:20 AM
Part of me wants to vote this lower because of length, but it's such a good, solid, usable item I can't. I'd probably give it more if some plot points were thrown in, but I can't fault its utility. Go to Comment
The Paintings of Marcus Diellus
Items  (Art and Music)   (Cursed)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-26 01:27 PM

The Secret

A brooding piece with a creeping sense of terror. It depicts a pale, well-dressed young man, alone in his study at a table with a lit lamp. He faces the viewer directly, eyes wide and mouth tight, but he appears ready to say something.

Those who view the item will begin to hear a frantic whispering, distantly at first, gradually closer. The voice whispers the viewer's darkest secret, whatever it may be. Eventually the whispering turns to screaming accusations, driving the viewer mad.

The curse is stronger with more viewings, and can be negated by leaving the place it is displayed for a few days. The whispers gradually die down, leaving only a creeping fear of hearing them again.

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The Paintings of Marcus Diellus
Items  (Art and Music)   (Cursed)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-26 01:28 PM
Altogether, this would be a terrible museum. Go to Comment
The Paintings of Marcus Diellus
Items  (Art and Music)   (Cursed)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-27 11:41 AM
I like this one. I feel like, if not for the grace of IMDb, I would do this trying to get the names of obscure-but-shouldn't-be actors in film and TV. Go to Comment
The Paintings of Marcus Diellus
Items  (Art and Music)   (Cursed)
Dozus's comment on 2013-01-04 10:56 AM

Cealdish Market in Springtime

Done in somewhat surreal, jarring colors, this painting depicts a bustling marketplace. The viewpoint is of an odd angle, almost as though viewing the scene from the dirt of the street. At first the image seems otherwise ordinary, save that one of the figures - a young gypsy girl - looks directly out at the viewer with a wide smile. She appears to be stealing an apple from a vendor cart, with her other hand reaching for another market-goer's purse.

When a viewer sees the girl in the image, they may find an item from their person goes missing, often replaced with another item they don't recognize. It is said the gypsy girl trades out whatever she steals from one viewer to the next.

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A great sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-05 02:29 PM
The story's not bad. The item itself is just a sword some guy used to kill other guys. Go to Comment
Furious Tiger Talon
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Dozus's comment on 2014-03-20 01:20 PM
It's got a neat story, and it would fit well in an anime or manga style setting. Go to Comment
Everybody
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Dozus's comment on 2006-08-28 10:04 PM
What's wrong with silly? Go to Comment
Everybody
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Dozus's comment on 2012-12-06 07:57 AM
I lol'ed. Go to Comment
The Staff of Undoing
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-05 02:16 PM
Hm. The story is interesting. Can't say it's my cup of tea, but it's interesting.

The why and how of it isn't explained. Did this kid just will a weird stick to become a magic spear? And the magic properties are a little wordy in their explanation.

It's got potential, I reckon. But as is, it doesn't do much for me. Go to Comment
The Lost Marbles
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-05 02:33 PM
The item itself is a half-baked idea that needed some more time to develop and explore. But +.5 points for the entertaining thread discussion. Go to Comment
Glass Mountain
Locations  (Desert)   (Country/ State)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-26 10:25 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Didet
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-22 07:01 AM
I echo MoonHunter's decrying the number of votes compared to the number of comments. When those young nomads who have but little skill or writing sense when they wander into our Citadel, we should encourage even their weak efforts and try to hone their skills, difficult as it may be. Who knows what potential talent was lost when someone's first submission gets a low vote and they leave without hope?

I'm as guilty as the rest, but I hope in the decade(!) since devblu posted this, we've gotten better as a writing community. Go to Comment
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