Reminds me of some classic comic book tropes, the idea of some technology or item eventually corrupting the user, turning them into something they didn't intend (Doc Ock, for example). I can see the same idea functioniong for any fantasy race.
I like it, a useful item for cursing. Would the wielder need to know the staff is cursed and use it in a particular way, or would simply touching the staff cause the curse to spread? Maybe it's the sort of thing where one must seek vengeance to enact it. Go to Comment
It is a bit powerful, but I don't mind such things when power comes at a price. Here you've got a guy who creates a race of killing machines and his only way to control them was to trust a djinn. See how well that turned out.
I also like the idea that a simple musical instrument can control an unstoppable army with a few toots. Like if the Pied Piper had dire rats. Nice work. Go to Comment
Neat! I kept expecting a natural solution for the lake's warmth, and in a way we got one. The leaves of mortal doings always have an impact in the world - it would make sense for a magic item to do the same. Go to Comment
I found the name "Binky" distracting, kind of took me out of the post. Is that a nitpick? It feels like a nitpick.
That aside, this is a somewhat amusing item. There are a number of spelling errors and typos, and there does seem to be some inconsistency, or at least ambiguity about what will inflate and what won't. I'd like to see it reworked a bit for clarity, maybe a few plot hooks thrown in. Go to Comment
I like the mild horror factor. For some reason I have minor trouble accepting that the rage of a cobbler who eventually killed his wife could make such a curse as this one, but such is the way of magic. Go to Comment