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Heart's Scorn
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2006-06-04 02:06 PM
Really like it... But is it Heart's Scorn or Scorn's Heart? The post gives the former, the title the latter. Good job, either way. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Dozus's comment on 2007-10-04 09:06 AM
Volomain sounds like a great guy, but I'm really more interested in this "Tower of Bones." Who built it? What does it do? Why is it made of bones? What's with the red armor? If I had background that covered that, being such an important aspect of the character, I think I could really dig him.

It's a great start with some interesting detail, but it needs some more background to be really accessible. I'd love to see how much further you can take this sub, Agony. Go to Comment
The Battle of Sahhur
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Historical)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-05 02:53 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Marching Barnacles
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2006-10-27 08:53 AM
Updated: Finally "finished" it more. :p Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Dozus's comment on 2014-10-02 07:00 AM
Very cool idea and execution. Go to Comment
The Sculptress
NPCs  (Major)   (Artistic/Performance)
Dozus's comment on 2011-05-11 08:00 AM

The "evil witch/wizard who encases people in stone" is an oldie (I'm instantly reminded of both Medusa and the White Witch from Narnia), but this is well-written enough to be a classic homage rather than a cheap copy.

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The Viceroy
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
Dozus's comment on 2011-12-15 01:58 PM

I like the low sorcery tools added to what's basically your standard petty bureaucrat. Certainly adds some flavor to an otherwise stock character.

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Samahen Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Dozus's comment on 2006-08-23 12:07 AM
I love visualizing this armor. It seems so dark and ancient, yet alive. More like this, please. Go to Comment
My First Character
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - In General)
Dozus's comment on 2006-04-25 01:00 AM
My first real character was Dozus the Windward. I've never actually used him for desktop RPGs, just freeform online ones. He started as just a pirate mercenary, a half-elf, half dragon sailor with two swords and a cigarette. I eventually gave him an epic past, and future.

His father, Damiel, was once a member of the High Council of Dyressendel, an High Elvish nation, until he was captured in battle. He was forced to become a slave and gladiator, and eventually met another High Elf, a woman named Eccaia. They fell and love and had a son, Dozus, who has scales on parts of his body. Then Eccaia disappeared (turns out she was a leviathan, a water dragon... go figure), Damiel is killed brutally in combat before his son, and Dozus is raised by his fellow gladiators. He eventually is purchased by Baron Alaan Alios, a famous swordsman and politician, who trains him in combat. Dozus escapes and joins a mysterious mercenary group. He soon learns the mercenary group is noneother than an arm of the Guild, a worldwide criminal organization. Dozus jumps ship (literally), washes up on shore, is taken care of by an old woman, and eventually joins another merc group, the Iron Wolves. He eventually becomes captain of the Wolves and leads them on many noble and adventerous quests. Then he quits the Wolves, goes off to settle down and treasure hunt, et cetera et cetera, and eventually finds himself trying to save the world in a battle to end all battles. In the end, he fakes his own death and becomes a fisherman.

Looking back, it's all silly schlock, but it's fun schlock. Wouldn't make a good RPG or novel, but a decent comic book, I reckon. Go to Comment
The Whalebone Forest
Locations  (Ruins)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2006-07-23 05:20 PM
Why hasn't this gotten an HoH yet? Go to Comment
30 Rangers
NPCs  (Extras)   (Natural)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-12 03:21 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Leviathan Pool
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2014-02-18 02:40 PM
Lovely imagery on this one. I want to know more about the sperm whale's Leviathan Pool. Why only the "rambunctious" ones? Do they have their own Ocean Mother, or some other deity? Go to Comment
Systems  (Architectural)   (General)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-04 01:59 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Cloister of the Empty Table
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Area)
Dozus's comment on 2015-03-20 11:07 AM
I remember reading this, but apparently never voted. Pretty creepy, both the mind control and all the cultic details. Go to Comment
The Azure Comet Mercenary Guild
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Regional)
Dozus's comment on 2012-10-31 02:49 PM
A decent structural laying out of this guild, but like Scras said, I'd like to see something to make it come alive. Go to Comment
Coinlenders Guild
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Local)
Dozus's comment on 2012-11-01 02:01 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Thick As Thieves
Plots  (Event)   (Single-Storyline)
Dozus's comment on 2007-10-30 09:38 AM
'Nuff said. Go to Comment
The Kamuinji Sabre
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Dozus's comment on 2013-02-22 02:35 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Auchinduin Deep Iron Mine
Locations  (City)   (Mountains)
Dozus's comment on 2012-10-29 09:08 AM
The clathrates are a neat idea, and I like the place you've built for one to live here. Go to Comment
Troll Gloves
Items  (Clothes)   (Combat)
Dozus's comment on 2012-10-29 12:21 PM
It's nice to have a back story for the standard "+1" items. As an individual sub, well, it's not a lot to look at.

Someone should do a 30 of these: 30 Backgrounds to Everyday Magical Items. Go to Comment
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