Hm... I like it. It has potential. But...
It's a bit short on details. Right now, it seems more like an idea seed. I want to know why they made it biological, who designed it, more detailed advantages and disadvantages, what it might look like. Details like these really make or break a sub, so to speak.
I'll hold off on voting until you edit it. Really, Corinth, it's a *great* idea, I just think it needs some more fleshing out. Keep 'em coming! Go to Comment
Well, it is a sci-fi sub, emphasis on the fi. I have no problem with the idea of biological computers (they were mentioned more than once in ST:VOY, for example), but I do like my biomachines to have some detail. Go to Comment
What might be even more entertaining is to have it actually *do* something, just something very subtle or out of the sight of the PCs. Have you seen that one commercial where the guy keeps hitting the switch on his wall trying to figure out what it does when it ends up opening and closing his neighbor's garage door on top of her own car? Mayb esomething like that: a garage door opener in some far-off star system. When the PCs push the hieroglyphs, the door smashes down on the aliens' starcruiser, setting off an intergalactic war unbeknownst to them. Go to Comment
A metallic, rust-colored button with four eyes and shaped in a square. The button is actually made of two separate pieces attached by a copper band. When tapped twice, the two halves will grind against each other back and forth very rapidly. The result is a small rain of sparks, enough to start kindling or cause a distraction. Go to Comment
Very cool! It's like a bag of minor enchanted items that might crop up on various masterwork or looted garments. I bet you could make a table of these and randomly attach a button to a garment found in a dungeon or treasure trove. Can't wait to see more like these from you, Eclipse! Go to Comment
Bizzaro. It definately has a melancholy feel to it which gives it lots of character. Well done!
One question: you said it's made of yak parts and has glass eyes. Is the head a yak skull, or just a pile of disjointed bones put together to resemble a human skull? Or is it something entirely different? Any selection would be pretty interesting, actually. Go to Comment
Awesomeness! A very unique lifeform indeed. Silicate life is far too often overlooked in sci-fi.
The hive mind and symbiotic aspects remind me of sci-fi insectoid life (Starcraft's Zerg, Halo's the Flood, etc.), but they're so far removed from those similiarites that they're truly unique. Also, they're not evil like other hive minds, but in fact peaceful and curious. I love 'em! Go to Comment
Very nice! Seems to be a combination and twist on several classics, but you've made it distinctly your own. I definately like the detail in their history, how they came to be who they are. I would have liked a little more detail on their structure, operation, etc., but the detail you've given is what some space traveller coming across them might expect to know. An excellent first submission, Corinth! Go to Comment
Very unique indeed. I do have one question: with such a bizzare and monstrous appearance - even with their masks - who would trade with these creatures? And what do they have worth trading? Go to Comment
Among the assortment of organized criminals who live in the great city, few command greater fear the Moonbeard Order.
They of course do not call themselves that, but have earned the moniker from their fashion of dying their large beards with lye to produce a distinctive crescent shape running from earlobe to earlobe. This is meant as a taunt for their enemies, for it clearly outlines their throats.
They also wear garb similar to the northern tribesman, carefully tooled leather and showing multiple, colourful glyphs.
They are feared due to the intense discipline that their group maintains, due to their origins as a warrior-sect.
They serve as paid thugs, enforcers and assassins within the city, with the client simply ordering a service from the organization, not hiring an individual. Apart from making the request and providing payment in full in advance, the order completes the assignment themselves.
Their order has many moles through the organizations of the city, and more than a couple of nobles. As such, no organized move has been made against them since their chief activity is directed against other members of the crime world. It is said that their services have been useful for those in power as well, further protecting them from persecution.
Their religion holds that their time in this world is vanishingly brief, and largely unimportant except as training for the Great Battle.
The order is very utilitarian with weapons choice - they simply use the tool needed for the occasion, though not without having trained extensively with it beforehand. Daggers, garrottes, swords, bows, battle axes, polearms, wagons, even siege engines have been used to carry out their contracts.