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The 'Elite' Goblin Cavalry of Terkuss Tahkhan
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Combative)
Dozus's comment on 2013-03-05 01:18 PM
With all do respect to Scras' forerunner of a goblin sub, I like Terkuss' Kobelyn Calvary better. Go to Comment
Terramax Cruiser
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-26 06:10 PM
Very nice. The details are what really make this. It also feels like an authentic progression of history and Western military somehow. Can't quite put my finger on it... Maybe that the ships are named after admirals? Dunno, but I definately like it. Go to Comment
The Mortuary Hotline
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-26 06:05 PM
Very cool! Sounds like an authentic urban legend, like one they'd base one of those terrible horror movies on.

But much better, of course. :D Go to Comment
Game Cliches
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-26 06:02 PM
Heh, some excellent points and things to think about.

On the "To Hell with Altruism" comment: Go to Comment
Scorpio-01, Marcos Mecina
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-26 05:50 PM
Agree with the above thoughts. Personally, he just seems like RoboCop in a bug outfit right now. Some more details would make him unique.

Also: in the title, you call him Marcos Mecina. The sub lists him as Marcos Medicina. Not sure which you intended him to be called. :) Go to Comment
Baiting the Trap
Plots  (Hired)   (Encounter)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-26 05:46 PM
A divine twist on a classic plot. Go to Comment
The Truth War
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 09:26 PM
Seems like a very classic "Religious zeal turns to violent crusade" plot. There's a lot of detail, but I'm not getting a "feel" for these characters. Maybe that was part of your point, that in war there's no individuals just factions. There's certainly an interesting feel to this whole war, though. Go to Comment
30 Imps
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 09:15 PM
My new favorite 30. :) Go to Comment
Elena "Bloodwind" Tyr
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 09:14 AM
Excellent stuff. This kind of technology lies somewhere between sci-fi, fantasy, and horror. Picturing her is genuinely creepy, and thinking about it more so. Very impressive. Go to Comment
Plants of the Garden-Fortress
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 12:41 AM
A nice assortment of unique foliage. This kind of stuff is the real meaty flavor of a good campaign. Go to Comment
Trailbane Pine
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 12:43 AM
A unique and useful tree. Go to Comment
The Isle of Dragos
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 12:45 AM
Everyone needs a secret underwater hideout. May as well make it a resort as well. Go to Comment
Of divine Life and Death
Plots  (Crisis)   (Campaign)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-24 12:39 AM
It definately has a lot going for it, very interesting concepts on race and religion. It just seems to be lacking something, though...

It's like you've got a skeleton and musculature, but there needs to be a little skin. The sub itself is a little hard to follow with the formatting. I feel like there should be a few more details about these factions as well.

Overall, a 4.0 You've definately got something, it just needs a bit more to make it great. Go to Comment
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-14 05:13 PM
I think the word I'm looking for is "awesome". Go to Comment
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Dozus's comment on 2007-03-14 07:09 PM
Exotic Jacks

Lavajack - If an appropriately strong material could be found - some sort of adamantine or mythril, perhaps - it could serve as the skin for a -jack made from molten lava. Depending on the outer structure, the body itself may be incredibly hot to the touch, giving 3rd degree burns to any that get near it. The downside, of course, is that such -jacks are short lived: either the material in the skin would gradually melt, or the lava would harden into stone.

Coinjack - What better way for a mage to guard her treasure than to have the treasure guard itself? -jacks made of coins could be easily disguised in regular treasure holds to keep an eye on the loot within. Joints would likely have to be constructed, but coinage could easily be welded on to appear as stacks of booty. In a proper storage area, these -jacks would need very little maintenance and could certainly haunt a royal tomb.

Ropejack - Rope is already a common, useful, and cheap material. Why not -jack it up? Flexibility and joints are not a problem, but rigidity would have to be taken into account; a wooden skeleton might do the trick. A ropejack would have a great reach, allowing it to scale just about anything. As an alternative, how about a chainjack? Go to Comment
The Cursing Jar
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Villanous)
Dozus's comment on 2013-01-02 01:02 PM
Beautifully wicked in its simplicity. Go to Comment
Cult of Terat
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Regional)
Dozus's comment on 2015-02-04 07:36 AM
Not much to add. A nicely done war cult. Go to Comment
Items  (Art and Music)   (Combat)
Dozus's comment on 2007-02-24 09:52 AM
Dwarves are so metal. \""/ Go to Comment
Salvorathan - A Sci-Fi Take On Dwarves.
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Space)
Dozus's comment on 2007-02-25 08:55 AM
Very nice! Far more interesting than some Warhammer 20K race variations and the like. If you needed to add anything, it would be some details about their ships. Do Salvorathan favor certain starship designs? It seems they'd want specifically something that doesn't use artificial gravity, but I wonder if there's historically certain ships they prefer to use.

You mentioned "a small pressurizing organ allows an extremely limited form of natural rocket propulsion". I'm curious: where is that located and what does it look like? Though I'm sure it wasn't your intention, I'm picturing flatulent dwarves rocketing themselves through space... Go to Comment
30 Aristocrats
NPCs  (Extras)   (Political)
Dozus's comment on 2007-02-22 09:57 PM
Bravo! A vastly extensive list of aristocrats. Go to Comment
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