An interesting location, if anything. I keep feeling like the "moving building" thing has been done before, but I can't put my finger on what, and even if I could, this is still written uniquely enough to warrant favor. So well done. Go to Comment
In my mind, the comic image is a, well, comic-like image of them. I imagine them to look narrower, with thinner limbs and not such a large face, but something generally similar. They don't actually do any mining, they just exist in mineral-rich caves. Go to Comment
I can see this as a nice guarantor against tomb robbing among wealthy wizards and the like. Like Echo, I too would like to hear a bit more story to go with the fantastic mechanics. Are there any examples of this happening to a grave robber or the like? Go to Comment
I'll chalk it up to dumb luck. Overlord Pogrom wanted to send a message to the rest of the Modoals that the Vautuans were here, and thus he needed a messenger. Among the many that were separated from their families, Pogrom thought that the one-armed man would be the least likely to fight given his condition, thus unlikely to get himself killed. He ordered Shimm's family captured and killed in front of the man, if only to increase his agony. Shimm's submission was a fortunate surprise. Go to Comment
I like the idea of a Thoron explorer. You don't much see the curious, exploratory side of non-organic lifeforms. Favoring the story behind his name, I'd be curious to explore that more, perhaps hear some more tales of extravagant physics from the crystal scout. I also echo Moon's interest in the growth of Embraced-A-Star's social skills. An intriguing character indeed. Go to Comment
So far, it seems like an eccentric retelling of a classic vampire. I like the personal aspects, but I'm more interested in the "To be continued" part. Why should I be more interested in Cred than the average "Undead with wanderlust searching for a lost love" story? What makes him stand out? I think this has great potential, and I'd love to see what you can accomplish with him, Cloud. Go to Comment
Beware of towns afflicted with Time Cancer.
For every second you progress through time, an infected town goes back 48 hours. Old buildings slowly become new, then incomplete, and finally just a frame and foundation, giant old trees turn to saplings, birds hatch into eggs.
one must not linger in a chrono-cancerous village for too long, before you know it you'll be a fetus. Tme cancer in unstoppable, no cure or treatment is knwn, it eats through the past until the inhabitants of a village turn into primordial protein ooze